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Interestingly, this second showing felt less finished than the first one. That's probably a good sign; it means the work is developing.
Is Maggie seen when she is watching near the wall?
That's a long time for a duet.
Focus and expressions can be clearer.  Especially in the duet. Sometimes they look amused or embarrassed; other times thare are blank or serious.
Great!

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Is Maya onstage from the beginning?
Nice contrast between the dancers. Good partnering and nice to see timings and ideas flushed out. Their moments of contact can be even MORE felt throughout their bodies. Dancers can have the tendency to feel the contact only with the part of their body IN the contact, but they need to make their whole body feel that point of contact. Then the audience can. Sometimes this means the contact needs a second longer....

Surprising developments of movement ideas. Wonderful work.
Is time management an issue?

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Beautiful dancing and movement material. It still needs more elements as it progresses; it starts to feel repetitious, for example, going onto the knees and circling the torso. Too much of the same. There needs to be more variety, either with timing (rhythms, stillnesses, pauses, accents), or space (start in a more localized area and move out of it, and/or back into it), or steps (taking what you have and working with different initiations, or body parts, or levels, or isolations, etc.) . You could also just start out with less to make the build happen as well.

What pictures do you see of yourself on stage? Where are you? Where do you want to be?

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Clarity of transitions. Variation in tempo and levels. Distance between them so much better. And timing pretty good. Maya's drop can hold a beat longer. Lots of movement happening; great movements; overall energy before accumulation could be higher.
The group squirming in a blob is awkward. It's a lovely image, but everyone looks uncomfortable in it, like they don't know why they're doing it, and everyone is trying to move too much in it. It can be softer, slower, less busy.
Wondering about that gesture with hands palms up.Are they reading a book? Quartets get moving. I’m craving more energy, more accumulation of energy.

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Is Iaac’s solo still an improvisation? I wish I could see what he is going to do.

Something about those two lines on the side feels so severe and non-sequitor to the dance. Once the group starts moving, we can see wonderfully unpredictable and captivating material. The three couples making contact with each other in a vertical formation could be slightly staggered so we can see/feel the contact between them.
Nice transition to the two trios and as well as into the slow section. All the movement material is fascinating; some of the group forms could be tweaked. Great job!

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What is that Emma is giving Madison? It's kind of mimed and I'm left wondering if I'm supposed to know what it is, although it's impossible for me to know. This can be a little off-putting for an audience member, where s/he/they are given signs of a story but not the means to decipher it.
On a broader level, I see definite and clear energy relationships between the bodies. However, it is clear that the choreographer has more on their mind, and needs to help me follow along.
Billy Wilder (movie director) once said there are two types of stories: the simple one that can be told elaborately (like a love story between a man and woman) and the complicated story that needs to be told simply (like a police drama full of twists and turns). I think you have the second story here. Miming giving something to someone is not obvious.

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The first section with the rain sounds will be a wonderful, mysterious introduction. Can you get the rain sound to be constant so we don't hear the pause and the loop? Given what you are about to do in the second section, feel free to slow down, add mystery, and relax in the first section. It felt a little rushed. Even Ruson s entrance before opening the umbrella can take longer.
I agree that you need to set where you are looking. Ruson is looking down too much. And it seems like you could all be looking at each other much more while you are dancing. Having fun together. That was what the original trio were like in the movie. We got our pleasure from watching their love and friendship with each other.
Why is Madison so far upstage for her solo?
The only other thing I wonder about is Ruson framing the second section-- opening and closing with a solo. It gives the section the impression that it is Ruson's point of view. Is that what you are after?

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the flow and emotion in this piece is so beautiful to see, it’s really lovely. maybe consider what really exploring the space could mean in the context of the piece, like the edges or the corners and such? idk but amazing work so far aaa

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this piece gives me chills; it has me on the edge of my seat all throughout it! was holding my breath when ella first lunged at maya. the dynamics between the two characters are really good. just keep playing with it!!

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i really enjoyed watching this, the choreography, music, all of it. the dancers are very in sync and connected which i like. all the tricks and partner work is very impressive!

-sophie

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They are doing some hard stuff!! So impressive. The way they move together is really great, the dynamic is so clear, fun to watch. I’d experiment with the music, trying contrasting the music a little more, might make it cool

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great progress! you are lucky to have beautiful compatible dancers who you are using to their fullest potential and you took the feedback from last time and applied it very thoughtfully :)

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so beautiful, your talent is out of this world. The movement complements your body so well, it’s overall just enjoyable to watch. I would experiment with going against the music a bit more, but otherwise i love the movement

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U r a crayz gorgeous dancer omg

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ur such a beautiful dancer i mean those extensionssss! so much more developed than last time, and i like it a lot with the song.

-sophie

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Omg I’m obsessed such a beautiful dancer actually wanna cry. No words so good😆😆😆

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love love love it’s so gorg to see you working in your own style and you execute your choreography wonderfully ! consider how much of the space you want to use — it’s definitely concentrated in the center and the back of the studio, so just remember that more room is available if you want it :)

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You are such a beautiful dancerrr
Use space more! You have the entire room and most of the dance happens side to side.
What is your connection with the audiences? What do you want them to know?

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this piece is so cool and i love it so much!!!!! it has a touch of absurdity to it while still having a more serious/intense/dark undertone which is really cool to see. relationships between characters are interesting to see, maybe consider if you want to expend on that in the movement more or not?? idk but it’s been awesome to see this piece develop and it’s looking really good!!!

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Really good choreography! The way you use the group is really cool to watch. In the background, there are some people whose feet are flexed and some whose are pointed when walking. There's sometimes a lot going on at once so keep in mind which groups the audience will be drawn to watch. Your piece is so fun to watch!!

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I always enjoy watching this dance! Everyone is always so in sync and i think the movements are emphasized very well.

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so good, a big improvement from last time. i can’t wait at all to see the rest of it!

-sophie

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Really good choreography! Make sure everyone is together during the dance.

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this piece is honestly such a joy to watch and always puts a smile on my face, absolutely love the utilization of the umbrellas and how you’ve organized all the solo and group work!! i think at this point it’s just a matter of refining and really getting familiar with the choreography :))

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think ab the transitions and their intentions

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i really like how there is a clear storyline and it’s very animated, and when you’re watching you didn’t know what was coming next. i’m really excited to see the rest!

-sophie

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Everyone came into their characters well.
It was a very fun and playful, yet mysterious dance.

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Everything is so in sync! Love the energy and emotions.

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There is such a strong story, I’d lean into it all the way. Making sure expressions and focus are clear will make it that much better. I’ve always loved your work, I’m so excited for everyone to see the fantasy like you do

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Setting the piece farther back is gonna make it easier for the audience to observe it.
Everyone shines so much in this piece

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!!! very cool !!! i love the unique character that each dancer has and their personalities definitely come through in the choreography. so curious to know the story behind the piece (if there is one) and such a major fan of the song composition :)

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Love the umbrellas! Make sure everyone is doing the same steps throughout the dance.

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I think the part at the beginning is cool but make sure you know why you are including it and it’s like purpose in the piece/ how it ties in

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The part without the umbrellas adds a lot of dimension

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It’s fun to see happy movement

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Keep eyes up.
Very uplifting dance that is such a joy to watch.
Great use of space
Making sure arms don’t look like you’re running.
Such a cute piece!!!

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This piece makes me so excited for the showcase. The change in tone is really great. The presence and tone of the second part is so performative and specific, just making sure you’re in it 100%. something to think about. Focus and clarity of steps tooooo. This piece is so hard omg good job

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I love the opening so much

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love it so much!!! so lighthearted and distinctly unique plus you all are handling the umbrellas so well and using them very creatively…just be cognizant (especially with such an iconic style) of the faces you make and the energy you exude : )

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i like how it starts off as a contemporary dance then all of a sudden it’s not. the dancing showcases all ur guys talents very well so nice work with that!

-sophie

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ughhh i actually love this piece so much, it gives weather vanes and sunny days and frolicking in fields and it’s honestly such a joy to watch!! love itttt

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U have such lovely motifs in this piece and I rly adore it also the music is perfect

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-love the duet
-work on emotional connection and meaning behind movement
-love the together part after Maggie comes in again

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So good, unlike anything the showcase has seen before. Your point of view is so clear. Maybe clarify your story? Confidence in focus is also something to think about. I love watching it every time

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This is definitely cleaner and more confident then last time,though a bit of places of stumble. At this point I’d work on faces you are giving to the audience, great work!

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So good! Work on cleaning and focus. Loved the shape made on the floor.

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Very clear story that you are illustrating.
I love the relationships that are represented throughout the piece.

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i love this! the way you used partner work/weight sharing is very cool. also liked how you used up the whole space, overall it has such a fun and lighthearted vibe and was so fun to watch!

-sophie

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The music still makes me think one of them is secretly an alien, which I love. Also, the use of spacing and angles is incredible.

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Love the words speaking in beginning. Great contrast between bodies. And you help us to bounce our focus from one performer to antoher. Are the tracks separate from each other? Voice and insruments? If so, you could heighlight speaking just a tad more. The voice gets slightly swallowed by the music.Lovely relationships between the two, even when they’re doing their own things. Wondering a little bit about focus. Is it mostly downcast? So did they just swietch roles? I think so, and yet it looks so different on each other that I almost missed it. Love that! I wish the running lasted longer, or the third part had a little bit more of an extension to it.

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What I find so interesting is that there are "no" conventional transitions and that's great! You've set up the dance that makes me believe whatever you do just follows the next thing. More than transitions, you could think about time in verious aspects. The first is in terms of speeds. First, the speed of movements now doesn't feel thought out enough. Second, how do you want each movement to resolve, or end? The beginning of each movement idea is clear, but the way they resolve before a new idea begins feels arbitrary. So many ways to resolve a phrase-- softly, with a bang, sharply, quickly, matter-of-factly, etc. Lots of options. Third, the stillnesses are as important as the movements in this dance. Holding positions and waiting can also bring more excitement to it.

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first off, suchhhh a gorgeous piece omg! i think it flows nicely and i like how you migrate from upstage to downstage :D one thing i might suggest is maybe thinking about focus and where you’re looking; i notice you don’t seem to acknowledge anything that often? not a bad thing, but maybe something you could consider!!

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I thought it was so beautiful! The relationship between both Issac and Lily is very clear. Very good!

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I can tell the dancers are dancing with emotion and it feels very authentic so keep that up

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That’s was amazing!

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so many things about this piece stuck out to me. mostly the emotion and chemistry between the dancers. unique song choice, it really fits the vibe of the piece.

-sophie

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So this piece is so good and it’s amazing and so so beautiful. I like how it’s short (er than a lot of others pieces will be) and it’s works rly well. LOVE

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-love music
-love that it’s independent yet together
-LOVE WEIGHT SHARE MOMENT
-amazing choreography
-so good already but really nit pick connected parts make sure they happen together bc it looks so cool

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all love!!! i’m deeply impressed that you finished creating and teaching your piece so quickly and it’s so lovably, immediately “emma” — very well done and i can’t wait to see the final vision :)

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Chemistry is AMAZING!!! Love the sounds made by dancers. Find more ways to refine in between steps?

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Add some feeling into it - you both feel a little disconnected from the movement

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Beautiful movement.
The poem adds so much to the piece
I want to see them together more! Their chemistry is amazing.
The times when they randomly dance together is so beautiful.

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Love the music choice
I would love for the shapes to be sharper
Very together

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Find a way to dance in sync without the help of music.

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love it! definitely an improvement from last time. i would say the biggest thing i noticed was the emotion and energy of the piece. right now it seems to lack passion and if that’s what you want, be sure to make it more of a choice. if you want it to be more emotional and passionate add more contrast to the steps you’re doing and take moments. adding music also gives more energy to a piece. if that makes sense. another thing is at the beginning, when you’re doing the same thing, i feel it would look cool as like a cannon moment. you don’t have to do it, i just think it would look interesting.

again, love it!

-sophie

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you should be proud of having so much done!! i agree that you should think about your transitions — maybe try working thru your whole spine between movements for fluidity and let that initiate your choreography :)

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Focus seems to be rly important so make sure u r being intentional with it

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I like the use/ balance of dancing together and also doing independent things

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So in sync
Keep eyes up
Leg swings were SO good
Good chemistry
What’s the story that you’re conveying?
Very lovely ladies! Super excited to see the full piece!

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Love when you are dancing together, I think the lines and shapes are really great. Just cleaning up transitions and sharpening the movement I think would make it that much better. Eyes up too, and mind clarify the story so you can show that much more! I really like it

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-make steps flow more so it’s not one step then another it’s like a flowing sentence
-make sure to finish step don’t just give it up

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If I remember correctly, the beginning is two people meeting. Perhaps you could have some parts in canon at the beginning, or parts where one person copies another to show that they are getting to know eachother, and then the unison has more significance. -Olivia

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I love the beginning
Though find confidence in your movements
Very together