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Uses academic language

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The second paragraph flows better. Not as choppy.

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gives details, academic language, dates

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It has better academic language.

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B explains the topic and gives the facts and dates- nicholas

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B explains the topic and gives the facts and dates- nicholas

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  B- it gives more dates and tells more information and facts -Sam

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  B- it gives more dates and tells more information and facts -Sam

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explains the topic/ movement which is being written about. Listed more detail. amanda

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goes into more detail such as the people fighting for this and when it was etc

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It describes who and why the minority was women and why they were protesting

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It describes who and why the minority was women and why they were protesting

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more description and explains what the paragraph is about.

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Lists the movement and gives specifics about the movement and used academic language

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Lists the movement and gives specifics about the movement and used academic language

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Amber McGee

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They didn't repeat things over again.

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tells what protest is and gives facts and information about it.

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It has better use of academic language, facts, and flows better.

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Its alot more specific, they used academic language, and good grammar

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More specifics. 1st sentence is too long.

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C- It doesn't flow.

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It had no protest listed in the paragraph. lack of detail. - amanda

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this doesn't go into very much detail did not say what the protest name even was

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C there is spelling errors, no name of movement- nicholas pooler

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C there is spelling errors, no name of movement- nicholas pooler

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C+ doesn't have name of protest and doesn't go into detail

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Not enough detail

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It does not show evidence and there is no detail

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Spelling mistakes and no commas

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no name, not very specific,

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spelling mistakes and lack of detail. Academic language is bad too.

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Amber McGee           not good because there is no name of the movement 

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Amber McGee           not good because there is no name of the movement 

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It lacks detail and explanation of the statements

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Jessica
some spelling mistakes and not very detailed.

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it didn't say any forms of protest at all and lack of detail

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Not very much detail, and it isnt very good, ACADEMIC LANGUAGE????

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Spelling mistakes and is not as detailed as it could be.

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Does not go into detail and isn't very good.

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Amber McGee
A group of sisters starting the Black Lives Matter movement that is becoming world wide and commonly known for the killing of a 17 year old african american male.

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1. Antigone

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Antigone

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A group of three sisters started the Black Lives Matter movement because a young black male was but on trial for his own murder.

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The gay rights movement was started to help gays have freedom to marry and to live a daily life without hiding in the shadows.

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The Black Panthers where a violent minority group that wanted equality for themselves and people are still affected by it today

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1. Black panthers were a violent minority group that fought for equality for themselves and other minority groups. People are still effected their movement today.

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The Black Lives Matter Protest is about how white police officers were killing African American people

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Past and present football players of all levels are the minority in an issue not involving a lot of law breaking or major protests but can long term effect the safety of all football players.

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The Black Panther movement was started so that African American people receive equal rights with white people; their movement helped all people achieve freedom.

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During the Vietnam War students and other groups participated in marches and boycotted drafts to stop American involvement in the war.

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13 people of two different  races became one step closer to ending all of American segregation.

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Owen C.
The Black Panthers were a violent group that fought for the equal rights of minorities so that the U.S. could be the diverse place it is today.

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The Antiwar Protest was one of the most destructive protests against going to war with another country and caused more chaos than ever.

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1. A group of civil rights activists protested segregated public transportation to help end racial segregation.

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The anti-war movement is a struggle of power, caused by war and many people were killed in the process.

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Arson as a form of protest (ELF and ALF)    Justin C.

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Arson as a form of protest (ELF and ALF)    Justin C.

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Protesters started using arson to protest by burning buildings, threatening people, causing over 100 million dollars of damage.

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The minority voices were very different in some areas , any extent the  laws were broken , and any long-term effects the protests caused by the Tea Party Movement.

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The antiwar movement is a struggle of power, Caused by war and many people were killed in the process.

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The women's suffrage movement was women fighting for their right to vote.

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Could use better language. But it gives out good information.

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it gives a lot of information but it needs more academic language

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When you write the title of the play Antigone, how should it be written?

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Contains a good amount of detail, and answers the outline without being extremely direct

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It didn't contain enough academic language and sounds choppy. More detail could be added. Also it restated the questions

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1. THESIS:  The movement of Occupy Wall Street was a protest, desire for change, a call out of corporations greed and escalation of the issue.

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The occupy wall street movement started out with a small group of concerned activists that grew to be in the thousands.

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What does the 2nd paragraph do better?

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Look at the example paragraph #1. What grade would you give it? Why?

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Type out your thesis statement