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Cora! This looks amazing in terms of format, color and organization! Pictures are great as well.

Maybe it was because we only had 10 minutes....but, I feel like you were rushing a little bit. Slow down and breathe!

The informational interview slide stuck out to me! Your descriptions and explanations of these interviews were informative and spot on. You really showed us that informative interviews are important and beneficial.

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You are very well spoken

Eye contact needs a little work, but that's not a huge issue for you

Visually appealing

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The information was good and there were many pictures but you didn't go into depth about why you want to do the asvab test but your slide was very visually appealing and it was great

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the slides look very good

tons of information

talked a little fast

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Your slides are good in the sense that they're good to look at and very informative. Your slides are easy to follow along with and most of your main points are easy to understand.

The only constructive thing I had for you was to look at the auidence more in some parts. You did a good job with this but in some parts, (not all) I felt like you looked at the slides a tad bit more in some parts. But it's nothing to worry about because you presented well.

Overall, good job

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explained stuff very well

lots of information

spoke at a normal pace

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Love the slides they are so cute!! Little robot so cuteeee!! Love your EQ. Like how you explained what RAA means. Use photos that have you in it or photos you took.

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Your slides looked great! I loved the aesthetic and animated transitions.

I would have loved to learn more about your interest in the the air force, because you spent a lot of time on your fencing and maritime interests.

Your eye contact was and speaking was fantastic as always. I look forward to the final project

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The slides were very appealing, and even though you didn't finish most of your slides and did not have pictures, it were still very informative

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Evidence is good

You sounded very tired and low energy

Explains things well

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good pace

not to much words on slides but good amount of info / explained well

sound excited

overall 2/10

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You have good volume and speak very clearly. Your slides are also very easy to follow and has a lot of good images. They're pleasing to look at and don't find myself bored with the slides.

At some points I felt like you look a lot at the slides and not the audience. But I'm not worried becuase I feel like you'll get used to the slides the more you practice them and by the time you'll present you'll be fine.

Overall, your presentation is valid

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Good job with your mentor introductions. This is very important! I am excited to see your robot demonstration during exhibitions.

PICTURES

I like that you explained your RAA Project essential question in a way that your audience could understand.

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Your slides looked very good and you did a good job of explaining complex topics. especially with an unfinished exhibition.

Try to improve your speaking and exhibiting skills for the real thing, as you didn't have much enthusiasm.

You have improved a ton since last time, and Your slides have good pictures.

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good amount of pictures

projected well and good pace

good information clean slides ( not a lot of words )

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I like the quote it was good and was relevant to you but you were kind of moving around a lot. But you went in depth with your RAA project and did well

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"Where do I see myself after college" is a great addition to your personal information section.

Is "dreaded" a good word to put at the top of the email slide? What if Mayor Xay shows up and sees that? What would he think?

You obviously are a great public speaker but, I wonder if you could add a bit more emotion.

I think that the quote you chose is very relatable for you this semester. I like your "personal realization moment" that you spoke about. Good job Nayshawn.

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Your slides are very aesthetic, and you have a lot of great pictures.

Although, many of the pictures are stretched, and a few others are reused. The emails slide doesn't quite hold up compared to the rest of the slide, maybe focus on just one.

Your speaking and presenting skills are great, and you probably don't even need your notecards

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You are a very good presenter, and your slides are very easy to watch.

I think its a good idea to watch your words, for example; don't say negative descriptives. Instead of saying it was a "bad day", say that it "didn't turn out the way you wanted it to be." It comes across smoother and sounds better.

You're doing such cool things and I can't wait to see where you end up!

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Well Spoken and reflective

You paced around a lot

Good eye contact

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Love all of the photos. Very in-depth. The Email slide was a lot of words, but like how you added it. Maybe one slide for one email. Like how you explained what RAA is. Good pace.

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very understandable talking pace

very fancy wording

very good at explaining stuff

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using to many filler words

ZERO pictures

looks like you just started today

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You take your time

Make sure that all the words are on the TV because they get cut off

Explain more

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You seem to have a big love for baseball, I'm glad you incorporated it into the slides.

The hair. STOP playing with your hair and acting like a baby.

You also need to get more in depth and be more prepared.

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Be more in depth. Act like this is an actual exhibition. Look out for the cut off slides for the exhibition. You need photos.

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Spelling errors

You need a picture for Thawn and some basic facts. You also need an ILB picture

YOU GOT THIS

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terrible

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the best exhibition ive ever seen

so much detail

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You clearly tried to make your background look good

The words on your slides were cut off by the edge of the screen, and you need to do a lot more work in all

You spoke much better than you did in your freshman year exhibitions

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Omg okay I love your quote and your template. You also connected your quote to your sport which I find very good.

Work on that eye contact, and make sure you're stopping to breathe. (Also, if you don't know if a fact is 100% true, don't be afraid to be confident in it. I doubt anybody would know whether he is your mentors cousin or brother.)

Your slides are so pretty and so easy to read. You speak at a great pace and enunciate well. Keep practicing and you're gonna kill it!

ps. i'm so sorry i keep yawning you are NOT boring me i am just so tired :)

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I love the way your slides look, and like that your quote connects to your interests. Like how you talked about your goals and post Met plan. Love your mentor photo snipe.

Why is your LTI only Fridays?

Love how you had photos of the space you work in.

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Good job separating passions from career interests! This is an important distinction to make.

Are you inviting Patrick (your mentor)?

Rylee! I think it would be AMAZING if you showed us some of your writing. Maybe something from the auto bio? One of the journals we have done so far (review? perfect day?)

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Slides look great, photos are numerous and well integrated.

a few of the slides looked off, like they had inverted colors, and you should have gone over your learning plan.

Your slides and speaking skills are great, especially your eye contact

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You told what your interests were and what your career goals are.

You talked about your internship and said what you did while you are there.

You should make the text bigger on your slides so it is easier to read.

Doesn't look like you started it today unlike Steven

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You have a very good quote and go into detail about how it specifically relates to you.

You were able to tell us about yourself in a way that if someone didn't know anything about you now, they do. Your slides have good contrast between color and words, the words are easy to read. Did well in explaining how your typical day goes at Balance Fitness.

Did good in explaining your project, and how it relates to you, and I liked how you included your history with softball and how long you've been playing softball. Went into depth with your project, and the relevance behind it.

One thing I had to say was your eye contact but you did better during the end.

Overall, Good job

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explained stuff pretty well

nice talking pace

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Lots of information went into a lot of detail about what your interests are and what you do at your internship. You also explained your project well

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i like the template and pictures you used

good quote

explained why personal trainer isnt for you and why

mentiioned post met plan and some ideas you have for it

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You have pretty good eye contact, your tone and enunciation is also incredible compared to last year.

Who am I -(there are two identical slides) -you didn't explain who you were, you just read off the slide, explaining your interests. How old are you? What grade are you in? Why are you so interested in these things? Explain who YOU are. Also, maybe throw in some pictures on your slides, they appear slightly dull. Spice it up.

You do a lot of cool things, I am excited to watch your XO.

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Bradly???

who said the quote?

get better contrasting colors for the text and background black on blue is difficult to read.

Need more pictures

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love the quote

know whats on your slides/ fill the slides more

good speed and projected well

more pictures

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Slide design isn't the best right off the bat.

Good explanation for quote, surprisingly deep. However I was immediately disappointed by the template-like design of the slides. No effort whatsoever.

Who Am I? Slide should be at the beginning instead of before so that it flows nicely. Should also have a slide dedicated to what the project is.

Talking about struggles and how your internship has evolved is good, provides honesty to audience. Definitely make sure to add evidence to slides later on.

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explains well

you seem to be distracted by certain people in the audience

introduce yourself and interests sooner

don't assume the audience knows what you're talking about

if you cant explain it don't put it in the XO

it feels out of order

You overall reflected over the trimester well

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You did a good job of telling us who you are. You have some good visuals. You have good eye contact and good volume.

Make sure you put the author of the quote in the slide. It would help if you spent more time considering the quote's meaning. I think notecards would help you out a lot. I feel like you could merge the who am I and what am I interested in slides together to make the slides smoother. I'd also recommend adding some more photos in as well. When you say "You get what I mean" we don't get what you mean.

You are going to have to elaborate more, you've done a lot of cool things and know that field tell us about it. I also feel like at some points you could turn your sentences into bullet points, to reduce the words on your slide, and if you were to take my advice about photos it'd create space for said photos.

I also feel like there could be some improvement in some areas, I don't know if you have an RAA Project but if you do I know it'll be interesting to hear about.

I know this is your practice XO so my feedback may sound, over bearing but I'd like you to think about taking it.

Hope to see your final product,

Nayshawn

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You had lots of good info on your interests, and you were clearly passionate.

A lot of slides looked unfinished, and you kind of repeated your intro slide.

Your quote was very good as well, and you had a confident speaking voice.

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Your bullet point should be organized - proper

Combine statements

In depth explanations - ichthyology - glazed over

One proper intro

Photos/ fill the slides

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Your slides are really pretty (better than half of the students here..)

When you speak, be sure that you are speaking loud and that everybody can hear (for some people in the back its hard to hear you). Also, try to maintain that eye contact. It's important to feel connected with your audience.

You have come so far since the beginning of your journey! Can't wait to see you present.

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Very well organized

Very good slide design

Good talking pace

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speaks mostly clearly

eye contact needs a little work

make text bigger/change colors based on visibility

slides are pretty

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Good slide design, great eye contact and speaking voice to the audience.

Very complete looking, and everything being linked in and the evidence all being there is great.

Overall, great job. Cant wait for the final product.

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You have really visuals, and your slides are appealing to look at. Had good documentation to show your progress and a photo of certification. Even though you flipped through the RAA project slides they looked good.

Your slides look good, the only thing I recommend you work on is your volume. You may want to speak a little louder so some people in the back and hear you but other than that you did a good job.

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I like the slides/ format

Like the pictures

showed/ explained a lot what you have done ( literacy, qr, rwl etc. )

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Your English was very good, and you had many finished slides with good info.

Your slides are very good, but a few of them had difficult read words.

You had good speaking and eye contact as well

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You are talking with your hands.. But not in the right way, stop clasping them at the end of your sentence. Keep them out in the air, or on your side, anywhere else but clasping them. Comes off a little egotistical. Study body language!

Your tone has changed a bit, it sounds a lot better and more emotion filled.

Your eye contact actually went down. Your first practice you maintained great eye contact but I feel as though you were looking at the screen the whole time.

BIGGG SMILEEE BUDDY BOY. Make jokes throughout your presentation, throw a funny picture in there. Your audience is 10x more likely to be engaged if something funny comes up. Trust. You don't have to be professional the whole time.

You're doing great

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Good job Brady! Your slides about your RAA Project are awesome. You seemed extremely passionate and excited during your presentation!

You NEED more pictures. Even if they are just pictures from the internet....

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Slide design is much better than previous exhibitions and presentations, obvious that feedback was taken and received well.

Cant say much since it ended earlier than expected, but overall pretty good.

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very cool slide designs

GO GET EM TIGER!!!!!!

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good pace/ projected well

talked about who you are

I like the slides good format and not to wordy

explained what you do at LTI

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projected voice well

Talked at a good pace

Slides are very appealing

explained LTI well

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intro is thorough and brief

you're tone was very neutral most of the whole xo

you use a good sense of humor at some points

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Spelling error on the first slide. Despicable.

Otherwise, slide design is good, talking about struggles is good but obvious distaste in voice doesn't make this enjoyable at all as an audience member.

Good eye contact with audience, could talk louder and with more energy next time.

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Max,

Your slides have incredible visuals, are appealing to look at, and are easy to follow. Your projection is good as well. Your pictures are also good too.

I will have to admit this may sound hypocritical of me to say but maybe some more tone? I know I struggle with my tone while presenting but I think you have what it takes.

Overall I believe your final product will be excellent and this is just a practice.

Best regards,

Nayshawn

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MAX your presentation skills are awesome. You seemed super comfortable and everything flowed naturally. I know earlier you told me you were concerned about only having gone to edge and end twice BUT in your presentation it seemed like you have been there for months! Good Job! Slides look awesome!

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Get to work u slacking

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Have good information

clear voice

have some photos

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explains well

you go through too quickly

don't swear

organize slides better

good info

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DO NOT SAY YOU NEED TO DO SOMETHING DURING THE PRESENTATION!!

The slide design is definitely an improvement over last time, though the duolingo slide is absolutely jarring on the eyes.

Talk slower, all of this is obvious stuff you have been told a thousand times before.

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Archer,

You have good slides and they're organized better. You also do good at your voice projection. I also liked your introduction as well as your mention of how you wanted to go to medical school, maybe describe which school you would want to go too.

Archer while your slides are clean they lack photos in some, such as the QR and RAA Project slides. I took from my RAA Project Proposal document and took screenshots of the sections I'd talk about.

I would also like to congratulate you for not talking as fast. I know it's something you struggled with so seeing you not talk as fast is good.

I know you'll continue to work on your XO and can't wait for the final result.

To a good future XO,

Nayshawn

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Good info, spoke clearly with decent evidence.

Seemed unprepared for some later slides like QR and Duolingo

Slides look pretty good though