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Sherry:57
Positive:1.Have a clear structure.2.sentence are correct.
Negative:1.ues less reference.2.No formal language is used.

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mark:50
the article seems lack of linking word and because of the poor vocabulary,there have some grammar problems, no citations is another question.

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Kotomi Shimizu
my score : 58( topic 2)
Two positive :
1 clear structure
2 Did not make any mistake spelling

Two negative :
1 used only 4 references
2 there was something i did not express in own word.

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Wan Yafei 54
two positive:
1. have used the right title and included the question that this essay should be contained.
2. have explained the basic meanings of several concepts that Karl Maxs claimed
two negatives:
1. did not explain some in detail, for example,
the question: The relevance of classical sociological theories to the Industrial or French Revolution. Beacuse I didn't understand the relevance of the concepts and industrial revolution entirely.

2. maybe some sentences and vocabulary are not academic and these are too simple. And maybe some references that I mentioned are not unqualified and inaccurate

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Lingzhi Chi 56

Positive: 1.Have a clear citation about Marx thoughts.
2. Include all of requirements for the essay.

Negative: 1.I didn’t explain the thoughts with my own words and forgot to show my opinions. So my essay similarity was to high.
2. I didn’t use so many sources and I forget write the reference list at the end of essay.

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Two positive:I have developed a clear structure,and answered all requested questions,responded all topics.
I used correct APA system.And meet the words requirement.
Two negative:I only used 4 references.
I have some paraphrasing errors  and my sentences are not completely grammatically.

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Positive: I use many vocabulary to write the essay and use different linking words.
I checked my grammar and spelling carefully before hand in.

Negative: my essay didn’t include 8 academic source and not enough evidence to prove my sources

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Two positive:
I have a clear and logical structure for my essey.
I can make basic arguments.
Tow negative:
I have some grammatical mistakes.
Some of the analysis is inaccurate.

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Mark：50
Two positive
I'm up to 500-750 words
content is very complete

Two negative
1 I don’t have 8 academic
Bad grammar

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Mark:56
Two positive:
I have a clear structure, including introduction, body text and conclusion.
Also,I used linking words in my essay.

Two negative:
I have some grammatically mistakes.
I didn't use 8 academic sources.

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52  topic1
Two positive: 1.enough words number.The structure is clear and coherent
2.Check weight rate is low.Reading material writing

Two negative：1.No source cited.
2.Statement usage is informal

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Grade：55
Two positive：I described related concepts and terminology.
All relevant questions were answered and explained.
Two negative：Not making evidentiary claims about the relevant issues very accurately.
Not very flexible use of literature，not enough concise sentences.

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Mark:52
Two positive:
1.My context is complete.
2.My structure is clear and i use linking words and sign posting throughout the essay

Two negative:
1. I don't have 8 academic source
2.My words of essay are less than 500 -750words, which excepting bibliography

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mark: 55 (topic 1)
two positive:

a clear structure of essay

give a quite clear explanation of the cause and impact of revolution

two negative:

few references

don't have a really clear explanation of the theory

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Tsz Ching, Wang 65

Positive:
-Link the theoretical concepts to the French/ Industrial Revolution well, not only two connection.
-Include an introduction, body text and conclusion.

Negative:
-Not included 8 sources
-Some grammatical mistakes

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mark:51
Positive:Having included 8 references.
Having used the right structure to write.
Negative:The analysis of relevance is confusing.
The grammer mistake can be seen.

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57

positive：
Get organized
Check weight rate is low

nagetive：
Words can be more precise, improve vocabulary
Write more examples

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Sihan Chen  58

Two positive:
My essay has clear structure
I explain my own thinking to enrich my opinions

Two negative:
I may lack of enough evidence to support my claim
I need to find more details about the connection between Emile  Durkheim’s theory and the Industrial Revolution (This is the topic I chose).