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Hey Adam! Awesomemazing story! One fantastic feature that I loved was how was your plot. I liked how the baseball game tied to the scavenger hunt, it pulled me in really easily. One more thing I absolutely adored was how your punctuation was near perfection. For example you added the sentence “‘Ok so it seems that he lives on 216 Emory Street in Pigtown, Baltimore, MD. We’ll have to get a plane there. Luckily dad just got a bonus so we can sit first class,’ Michael said.” One thing you may need to work on for next time is your grammar or spelling. But overall, great story!

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Yo Adam! Whats up! Great story! I loved the plot and mystery involved in the story, as well as the Grandpa who died at the end, it really enhanced it and added emotion! Also, when they got to the house and the spirit wanted them to get out, that was really scary and really well written! IN addition,  I loved the pictures you added! It gave a sense that you were there! Maybe next time, try to check your capitalization and punctuation. Overall, great story! You really hit home base with it!

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Awesome essay i rlly liked it

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Hey Adam you wrote a great essay! I really liked how in the intro paragraph and the conclusion both have similarities and differences with each other. One way I feel that they are similar is that in your intro paragraph how you defined stress but in the conclusion paragraph how you defined happiness which would happen if their was no more homework. To add on I also thought that it was clear when you gave 3 clear examples in your body paragraph and explained all of them. It made me get a better understanding of why students should not get homework. Next time maybe you can try to elaborate on your warrants a smidge more. Overall, Wonderful job you wrote a very informative essay

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Hey Adam! I definitely agree with your essay! Your hook really persuaded me into a angry and thoughtful manner in a very good way. Especially the part when you defined the dictionary's exact words. To add, your essay was rounded out and organized really well! Also I liked the big boy words you used like, Furthermore, approximately!!! (My favorite word) to elaborate, and other good transciation words. Next time, you might want to fix a little punctuation to make your essay ever better than it is! Overall, stupendous job Adam!

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That was a funny story funnest I read so far. I also liked how the charter all had bacon in the name. Also you brought a lot emotion into our story. In the future the cliff hangers is killing me. All in all it was a funny and really good story

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Sup Adam!! Great story, the base of the story was cool because I like secret missions, and the way you made Herbert’s personality was great, but the only thing I ask for is to finish the story!!! You left me on a cliffhanger! But overall great story!

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Hi Adam! Nice story bro! I really like the intense ending that you had. It left me with a lot of questions.  I also like the idea of your plot and the secretness of Bacon and his project. Next time, try to add in character details to describe what Bacon looks like. Overall, bravo!

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Hi Adam. Great story. The plot was very funny. And your main characters name was even more funny. Next time, Try to eliminate random letters. Nice job.

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Hey Adam, I really liked your story. I liked it when Jerry aways acted tough when coach challenged him and tried his best. Also the ending was really good because I liked how coach was sad that Jerry died and he felt guilty. Overall amazing story!

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Hey Adam, I really loved your story. Especially when Jerry always tested the coach and asked him if he liked it. Overall great story!!

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Next time try to make a A Cris P er hook!

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I liked how sad your story was, it really brought a motion to it.  You could have been a little more descriptive though. I really liked the ending of where the coach was sad and mad at himself for being so hard jerry.