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Body language said a lot.

Good vocal emotion it changed throughout and made it more impactful.

You had good facial expressions and you had good range.

Was a great monologue for you.

I was able to feel how you were feeling.

Came back from your mistakes and made it better.

Good use of pauses makes a difference.

Well done Vic xx

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Your doing so good hun if you need a moment to pull yourself together just take a moment

You facial expressions really shows what your going through

Your eye line is great

Your raspy voice shows how upset and hurt you are

Try not to pace so much

Well done vic xxx

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if you’re going to move then commit to it fully

good emotion

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Strong start got straight into the character

Good vocal voice that is clear that shows really good tone

Good facial expressions that is shown

Don’t rush it

Take your time and you own this stage remember!

Don’t stress you do amazing and you show your confidence in this character

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Good characterisation from get go

Clear rage and anger

Clearly talking to someone else. You make the audience see this other person.

Good pacing

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Try and choose one eye line and either stick to it or make the change in eye-line clear.

Have a good pace and you keep that throughout the monologue.

Can hear emotion in your voice.

Your facial expression changes throughout the monologue.

Look at the length of your pauses can they be longer or shorter and could that change the impact .

Was a powerful monologue and I think that you chose a good one.

Well done Liv xx

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As you go along the days show how much it can affect you.

Like the frustration and tiredness in your voice as you are listing things off.

Good facial expressions.

Make sure you keep projecting towards the end.

Very good monologue, enjoyed it!

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i love it. i like how when you are repetitive it isn’t boring.i like how although it’s sad your taking a diffrent point in it and more angry about the situation. the ending is very good i love the emotional change….. AMAZING

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Try and make it look like you’re talking to someone (unless your character isn’t meant to be)

nice eyeline

very clearly spoken

nice pause

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Good pause

Show clearly emotion in voice and face

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-paused were great

-well done for remembering lined

-clearly have thought about the way you want to come across to the audience

-great eye line

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I love the stillness

Your eye-line and focus is great

I can hear the emotions in your voice

Try not to fidget

The built up of your emotions really helps makes it engaging

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nice eyeline, who are you talking too?

really lovely characterisation

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Strong emotion and good confidence.

Taking control of the stage and bringing us along with you, the facial expressions capture the emotion in your voice.

Eyeline was good between audience and Andraste.

Be aware of projecting you're voice throughout.

Well done xx

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Good ownership of the space.

Good vocal range.

Changed the eye line gave the impression that you was talking to different people.

The emotion really came through in your voice.

Held a lot of power.

Was confident in the space and in yourself.

Well done Frann xx

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Good stage craft.

Incredible emotion.

Good focal point

Showed us andraste and the berries

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i love the movement and voice i love how your emotional but when you point to the audience i don’t think it matches with the lines for you to do that. overall very good i would be happy

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your characterisation is so beautiful, your emotion and the changes are so captivating. you really drew the audience in from the beginning. you have really connected with this character. beautifully done franny <3

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you play the character beautifully

you know how to draw in the audience

character emotion is good

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Strong start

Strong eye contact whiles looking at the audience

Good pause

The result:

You understand this character and prove it through body and facial expressions

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Try and pick an eye line.

Had nice facial expression's.

Was able to tell the fact that your playing a young adult/teenager by the way you portrayed the character.

Could be more confident in the space.

Chose a good monologue for you.

Well done Sophia xx

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I can picture the raindrops

Spoke really clearly

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try to not rock back and forth and try not to fidget. really lovely diction. good eyeline.

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try to keep feet still

good eyeline

you’re words are really clearly spoken

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good but i feel like there’s a bit of lack of confidence. i like when you think you look upwards i like your eyeliner. i like the breaths and pauses .

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Clear recall of a memory.

Smile shows a inner joke that she still finds amusing

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Try not to swing

Looking up feel like your speaking to us

Great diction

Emotions in facw

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your voice is very good! but it dosnt match you facial expressions and i feel like you have the same face throughout the whole monologue. i feel like there’s not a lot of shift in emotion .

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I really love how you kept still and picked an eyeline.

Try and challenge more emotion into the Voice.

Tap into the enthusiasm more

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Emphasise each persons name you talk about, not only certain ones.

“One point and one point only” this is important and should make us think what point your going to say

Play around with pitch

Good diction

Great remembering lines

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Sound like you’re reading off a script

Add more emotion in voice

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Good start

Good facial expressions

Try to be more confident all the way to the end

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try to ground yourself more try to put hands down at the side instead of playing with your fingers

have more confidence in yourself

try to add more emotion maybe try experimenting with tone a bit more

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try not to rock back and forth

nice eyeline

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Try stay planted on the floor. Your fidgety. If that’s apart of your character make that clear.

Should be a shift when you say your not ‘Lucy Curtwood’

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Careful or your eyeline. When you look up I see your emotions. But as soon as you look down it’s like you close off and almost disconnect from the audience

“My arms then my leg” maybe touch or look at those parts that you are talking about.

When you’re talking about the seasons “winter summmer” etc - this is the part where you’re taking ablut things you know are true so have more confidence in those lines. This list is what helps you to get over your feelings and feel better

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Emotion is clearly shown

LOVE THE USE OF VOICE

Maybe chance the throughout the monologue to keep in engaging

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i feel like your almost trying to sad and it makes your voice go a bit whiney at the start but as you get more comfortable it goes away. very good ending definitely got batter and stronger

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Clear desperation and pain and grief from the very start.

Rasp in the voice adds to the emotions, sound like on the verge of tears

Voice and emotions calming a little as you list ‘things I know to be true’ is nice

Ebb and flow of the emotion is well and a good representation of grief

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Take into account where your character is physically. I didn’t get the sense of the place that they were in. Explore the voice more , different parts of the characters personality maybe. Good use of focus points.

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Can hear the emotion in your voice from the start.

“ I want my dad” that’s a powerful moment.

Can see the pain on your face and it helps convey your emotions.

Try and own the space a bit more.

Well done Aniya xx

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to try stop swinging your arm as much it can take away people’s attention

emotion shown clearly in voice

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Nice emotion

Don't force yourself to cry if you don't think you'll cry

Project a bit more

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You show your facial expressions very well made it so real

The pause was good

Breathing is good

Eye contact is strong the way you looked showing the emotion through there as well

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Really great emotion! Great pauses too!

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nice eyeline.

i liked your emotion.

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Your character would want to leave , and then the beginning of the monolougue is you telling yourself not to leave? So maybe show that intention of convincing yourself through delivery. When you’re depicting a memory , try to imagine that as an image that appears in front of you. That might be an interesting thing that will help.

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-Fist line “I can’t leave” felt like there needed to be more pleading, will hook the audience in more

-“Where has he gone” sound and look more confused

First few lines could be more frantic. Your trying to find someone you clearly love so we as an audience need to see your eagerness and frustration

Diction was great

Well done

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Very good pause

Good facial expression

Good eye contact

Good vocal voice that clearly that I understand what you are talking about and show it well in body language

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Desperation and pain conveyed well.

Tension and fidgety as she starts recalling the traumatic bits.

Clear recall of a memory and good diction and pace

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straight away can see the emotion.

There was power in your stillness

Need more energy make it bigger in some way. Well done Lucy xx

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clear voice

try not to touch your face unless it’s part of the monologue

liked the pauses and pace

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I like the gradual increase of emotion in the beginning

When you're talking about the memory I like the confusion when you're trying to recall what happened

Good facial expressions

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make the decision whether you want to move or not, don’t go to just for the sake of moving, try and explore the stage a little more when talking about pacing.

really lovely eyeline.

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really nice pace i like the start. enjoy the pauses. i like the change in emotion when you talk about the fire

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Great facial expressions.

Great Vocal emotion.

Try and ground yourself more

Chose a focal point and stuck with it, your eyes aren’t darting around.

Was confident in the space.

Grabbed attention straight away. Well done Charlotte x

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-when you talked about the fire I felt like you were really in the moment and felt like you meant every word you were saying

-really good Confidence

-loved how when you said John you soften your voice so you could clearly tell it’s someone you care about :)

Well done

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slow down a little some words are getting lost

really good monologue

emotion shown well

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The good facial expression

Really good pick of monologue it really suit you

Good eye contact

Make so long pause to like compost yourself

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describing the bodily pain , wouldn’t your physicality reflect that bodily trauma with how you stand? I loved the emotional changes , especially when you got more angry

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Strong opening, straight in with the emotion

Facial expressions are lovely and there's a nice amount of movements

Very good pronunciation

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Good projection good use on hands really good monologue for your personality overall one of my favourite performances from you

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great articulation and voice projection

Maybe slow down

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try not to bounce from one foot to the other, it distracts the audience

lovely characterisation

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Good eye contact,chose a spot to focus on and stuck with it.

Could hear emotions in your voice.

When you talked about going home it didn’t really feel like you were performing it and you just said it.

You gave the character emotion and character really.

Well done.

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Show more emotion

Good that you remember your line

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the words are very clear

understands character well

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Find more personality through the voice.

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Nice facial expressions - link it to the emotion in your voice

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Really good rhyme and tone.

Paused were great.

When talking about your mum o, maybe sound more confused as to why she was crying when you say the line.

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i really liked your characterisation

good diction

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It’s feels like it’s reading make sure you show emotion through your voice

Be more confident

Good eye contact

Even if you forget the lines you still kept going well done

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I love how you change from him shouting to your voice and it’s like the perfect change

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Strong start grabbed attention.

Could hear the frustration in your voice.

Was able to see the emotion on your face.

Was able to hear the pain and frustration in your voice.

Was a very powerful performance.

Brought the performance back to a still for the end which was great.

Well done Maisie xx

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Strong opening.

The different emotions you use blend well together.

Really good facial expressions.

Love the anger, I can feel it.

Captured everyone's attention.

Clear pronunciation.

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That was SO GOOD

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Very good pause

Got straight into character

Good vocal Voice and the pace just felt natural and real very interesting to watch and listen

Facial expressions was really clear

You showed this character very clearly that show how you understood this monologue

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I like the emotional changes. Who are you talking to? If it is someone you know , it will inform how emotional you get. How does his language make you feel? If it makes you feel belittled , show that in your delivery. Ending was fab. BOSHHHHHH

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felt like i was in the scene

performed very well

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Great build up and release of tension

Quick changes in pace and tone

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-I think a couple lines you started to really feel what you were saying.

-you don’t have to always be looking straight when talking to soemone or about soemthing you can look down or at your hands

-change your tone a bit more “I saw a magpie today,well one” you can say it in a more conversational way as if your trying to grab out attention by saying it

-loved the tone at various points ,diction was great :)))

Well done

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How do you feel about the magpie? Look at the subtext more , what are you really trying to communicate under the text? Your character is obviously trying to justify their feelings for the boy but doesn’t want to seem stupid because superstitions could be perceived as stupid. Explore your voice more , don’t say the magpie line the same each time.

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Need to find a focus point for your eyes.

The emotion was clear in your tone.

Even though you were stood still it still held power.

Was clear in how you wanted it to be presented.

Well done Sophie x

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Add more emotion in voice.

Don't sound like you're reading off a script, sounds a bit robotic.

Add a bit more movement.

Clear pronunciation.

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Great eyeliner and articulation

Change the tone after the repetition of “I saw a magpie today “

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Still freeze be confident in what you doing (show more movement in your body language)

The voice is good

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nice eyeline

power in stillness, that worked really nicely.

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careful of your breath sometimes you hear it and it clouds the word your saying.

Felt like you believed every word you said.

”I can’t leave I won’t” maybe say it more sterner so you’re making it obvious that you won’t change your mind about leaving and that’s that.

Play around more with different tones more anger and less lightness

Work on relationship with mother and your intent on thr letter your writing

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Good facial expressions as soon as you started.

As soon as you started you could hear the resentment and the emotion in your voice.

Was confident in the space.

Was very powerful.

Was able to hear the pain and see that you loved the person you were talking about.

Well done Sophie x

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ground yourself

good diction

emotion shown clearly

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Grouded, great use of emotion and nerves

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Good facial expressions

You really show your confidence is there girll!

The breathe and pause is good

Can hear you so clear and perfect

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ground yourself, don’t move for the sake of it, try not to rock back and forth.

nice eyeline.

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Don’t force your voice , if you don’t feel the emotion don’t force it. Find the light and dark more. The different levels and shades.

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-really nice, chosen really well the character and their language suits you.

-“I kept being stupid” line was impactful. maybe leave a bit more pause afterwards almost as if you have realised that you have admitted that you haven’t made smart choices and your hearing yourself take accountability.

-you know the correct time to pause and it felt natural and not rushed 100%

-light feeling to the play

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The pause is very good

Got straight into the character

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Could be more confident in the space at the beginning.

Good pauses for effect.

Can really see the pain in your eyes.

Can hear the emotion in your voice.

I was able to feel what you were feeling.

Well done Charlotte.

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Facial expressions portray the emotion in your voice.

Project a little more in certain areas.

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Good use of movement. Good use of circumstances , I could really imagine the space you were in (like when you leaned in to admit something). Very clear voice. Good sense of emotion.

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great pause for effect

Very grouded and connected to your emotions