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I'm planning on weaving my core values in better, and express more of the psychological/emotional truth, which means trying to dive deeper into more specifics of the story i'm telling instead of leaving it a vague overview.

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I plan to lead into the ending more and not making it feel abrupt. I will also add more personal details and descriptive words so that it adds to the growth of the story.

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-add smoother transitions

-talk about how mentally I grew from the pain

-correct a few minor errors in grammar

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more variety in transition words

be more descriptive of the journey and add more content

make sentences sound better and have better vocab.

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I need to make my sentence structures have more variety. Better transition words could help flow between paragraphs. I also had some run-ons, so I have to fix those.

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-Add variety

-Focus on impact

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I needed to add more sentence types so it is more interesting. I also plan to add some dialogue or a quote to make the reader more interested. Also could go more in depth with my vocabulary words!

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Work on making the transitions between paragraphs better. Could possibly start with a story sooner switch up paragraph order. could add some more adjectives or descriptions for words. rework some sentences and change up some vocab.

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I plan to expand on details and reshape a lot of my sentences with better vocabulary throughout as well. I can also explain how the lessons I learned apply to my current life rather than just what I learned.

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I need to expand more on the details

I need to use better vocabulary

I think I told more than I showed, which isn't good

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Kinda wrote in a rush to meet a a deadline, still working on core values for it. Still showing a lot more than telling and that's good but I need to lock in more on fleshing ideas out.

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I need to use more vocabulary and I want to end the essay with more detail.

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I plan to make the flow of mine better, more smooth, and I plan to work on not repeating ideas and words or phrases

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I want to have better sentence structure

Add more diverse vocab

Don't repeat the same things over and over again

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I need to add more about how it affected me mentally and physically, good sensory details but I need more vocab to make it more engaging to read.

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I want to work on making my sentences flow better by combining some to make it easier to read. Also make it clear what my core values of the writing are without stating them

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I needed more transition words and needed to elaborate a little more on certain things. I said some of the same things multiple times.

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I plan to make it more vulnerable and more complex sentences. I will also better explain core values throughout the essay.

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add more details and fix punctuation

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I want to add more sensory details, create a better driving point, and include better vocabulary.

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I am working on spelling and much better punctuation. Especially not leaving the reader on cliff hanger, a need for a better ending.

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using stronger words in some areas, adding some more details to make it more engaging and interesting. Better start to the essay, add a good attention getter

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using stronger words in some areas, adding some more details to make it more engaging and interesting. Better start to the essay, add a good attention getter

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I am going to work on adding better vocabulary. Also to not be repetitive in my sentences and use different sentence starters. Add more sensory details.

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I need to change a lot,

I want to change sentence structure.

My vocabulary needs changed

I need to shorten it

and take out and add parts

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Separate into more detailed paragraphs and work on sentence flow. Add more vocabulary and get rid of run on sentences.

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I am going to work on improving some of the vocab I used as well as a couple of sentence structures. My writing will also benefit from a little bit more detail.

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Work on better transitions from paragraph to paragraph. Needs more sentence variety. I need to add more sensory details.

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Add more details and work on spelling and grammar.

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Add more transition words, fix run-on sentences, add better/more vocab, and a deeper personal connection. Maybe add to the word count

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Work on adding more sensory details and double check punctuation. Work on incorporating more vocabulary to further add depth. Make sure that personal growth is clear within the story.

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