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Dry as dust because they repeat goals to much

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The dry as dust response and laundry list?

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The dry as dust response and laundry list?

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Repetitive phrasing

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Dry as Dust because they keep repeating the topic

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Dry as dust

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Laundry list

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Like stay on topic and make sure the paragraphs connect in a way. And try pre writing it

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I think that the treatment that would work is pre writing  process and connect the paragraphs

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Track ideas that connect to the thesis statement

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The second one/green highlight

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Pre writing the sentence structure

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Over sharer and laundry list is the one that I think

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Over-shared because it included a lot of details

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Over shares

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Over sharer

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Over-sharer because they go on and talk about Harry’s life and doesn’t talk about the goals he set just his life

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Like put less details and try to connect more to your thesis

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Like put less details and try to connect more to your thesis

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I would connect back to the thesis and delete details because there really isn’t any explanation for the thesis mainly examples.

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Track ideas that connect back to the thesis

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Track ideas that connect back to the thesis

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Connect back to the thesis

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Eliminate irrelevant details

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Connect back to the thesis