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? What is your problem? What is your solution going to be? Come see me for a graphic organizer. 
Gage Rush
Gage Rush
Don't just copy facts. Come see me for a graphic organizer. 
Kanye Stuart
Kanye Stuart
Make sure you introduce your characters and setting before jumping into the problem. The paragraph you have written will be great for the middle of your story. In the introduction, focus on talking about the setting and the characters. 
Brooklyn Minor
Brooklyn Minor
Your beginning sentence is great! Don't do so much dialogue in the beginning. In the introduction, just focus on introducing the setting and characters. In the next paragraph, talk about a problem the characters are facing. 
Arianah Miller
Arianah Miller
Great beginning sentences. Make sure to include a hook sentence and introduce the names of your characters. In your next paragraph, think of a problem your characters will face. How will they solve it? 
Jonah McNary
Jonah McNary
What a great start to your story! I loved the way you introduced your setting and characters. When revising, I want you to add a clear problem to your story. What is the problem your character or characters are facing? How will they solve it. Also, what is "crafting"? Were there different kinds of crafts? Add some more details about your characters and main events. I love how you used details from the sources in your writing! Great work. 

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Silvia Martinez Zacapa
Silvia Martinez Zacapa
I loved reading your first few sentences. Great Introduction! Make sure you talk about the setting of the story in your intro. Think about what problem your characters will face. How will they solve it? Include details from your sources to make it realistic. 
DeAndre Jennings
DeAndre Jennings
I enjoyed reading your introduction! Make sure you check your spelling and add punctuation at the end of sentences. In your next paragraph, I want you to begin talking about the problem your characters will face. Will the farmer run out of fun? Will DeAndre do something wrong? Pick a problem and then think about how the character will solve it. Include details from the sources to make it more realistic. 
Sebastian Delay
Sebastian Delay
What is your problem going to be? How will your characters solve it? Include details from your sources to make it seem more realistic. You want to tell a story about a day in the life of an AP. 
Ashanti Compton
Ashanti Compton
I love how you hooked the reader with a noise and dialogue! Make sure you use the right verb tenses. Not "we WAS tired" --> "We WERE tired". Your story needs to be three paragraphs. Think about what you want your problem to be. You started off with a good idea about the leaking roof. Can you think of any other possible problems the storm could cause? What will be the solution? Add details from your sources to make it more realistic. 
Niasia Carter
Niasia Carter
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Who are your characters? What is your problem? What is your solution going to be? Come see me for a graphic organizer.

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Don't just copy facts. Come see me for a graphic organizer.

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Make sure you introduce your characters and setting before jumping into the problem. The paragraph you have written will be great for the middle of your story. In the introduction, focus on talking about the setting and the characters.

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Your beginning sentence is great! Don't do so much dialogue in the beginning. In the introduction, just focus on introducing the setting and characters. In the next paragraph, talk about a problem the characters are facing.

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Great beginning sentences. Make sure to include a hook sentence and introduce the names of your characters. In your next paragraph, think of a problem your characters will face. How will they solve it?

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What a great start to your story! I loved the way you introduced your setting and characters. When revising, I want you to add a clear problem to your story. What is the problem your character or characters are facing? How will they solve it. Also, what is "crafting"? Were there different kinds of crafts? Add some more details about your characters and main events. I love how you used details from the sources in your writing! Great work.

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I loved reading your first few sentences. Great Introduction! Make sure you talk about the setting of the story in your intro. Think about what problem your characters will face. How will they solve it? Include details from your sources to make it realistic.

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I enjoyed reading your introduction! Make sure you check your spelling and add punctuation at the end of sentences. In your next paragraph, I want you to begin talking about the problem your characters will face. Will the farmer run out of fun? Will DeAndre do something wrong? Pick a problem and then think about how the character will solve it. Include details from the sources to make it more realistic.

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What is your problem going to be? How will your characters solve it? Include details from your sources to make it seem more realistic. You want to tell a story about a day in the life of an AP.

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I love how you hooked the reader with a noise and dialogue! Make sure you use the right verb tenses. Not "we WAS tired" --> "We WERE tired". Your story needs to be three paragraphs. Think about what you want your problem to be. You started off with a good idea about the leaking roof. Can you think of any other possible problems the storm could cause? What will be the solution? Add details from your sources to make it more realistic.

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Watch out for run on sentences! Don't use "but" too many times. Try to introduce your setting within the first few sentences. I like how you started to talk about the problem of a big storm in your second paragraph. Think about what some challenges could be of living in a cliff dwelling during a storm? Add some more details to your problem and come up with a solution.

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Reread what you have so far. Count how many times you use the word "But". Try to make sure you don't repeat the same words over and over again. Make sure you have a clear problem and solution. What is the MAIN problem that your characters are facing? How can they solve it? Don't forget to include details from your sources.

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I love the idea you have for your story! Very creative. However, good writer include LOTS of details. Think about these questions to add more details: Who was trying to get the baby? Why did they want to get the baby? What's the baby's name?What are the names of the family members? How does the family solve the problem?

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Wow! I really enjoyed how you began your story. Remember, an introduction should only include some beginning details. Save the problem of the dog falling off the cliff dwelling for the middle of the story. Make sure you follow the directions. What details from the sources could you include in your story to make it seem more realistic?

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Make sure you use quotes correctly. What the character says goes in quotes. Example: Jayden said, "Hi, I'm Jayden. We can be good friends."