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Re Write:

_Michael has been sleeping for a long time, which was unusual for him. He normally wakes up early but he had slept over his alarm today

He looked in the mirror and looked at the old familiar scar under his left eye.

“I think it’s fading” he said to himself “but I still need to get that tooth looked at, I guess I’ve been swamped with work.”

He looked at his eyes which felt very heavy, he’d had an amazing weekend but now he was going to afford the price! His Creative Writing class was starting today but it was already late and he felt tired, there is a chance that he will not make it on time.

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Jack was doing a hiking on the edge of a very tall rock mountains, he is doing a great challenge to beat a record-he is doing rock climbing without any protection gears! Something no one had never done before, many News channels are broadcasting his climbing through camera and drones, and his climbing without gears has been described as” the most brave man as Bear Grylls”

He put his feet on another rock! Being confidently, he was using that rock to climb higher, but what he did not expected was the rock is actually starting to Loose, when he grabbed another rock on the top, his foot suddenly lose support because the rock falls down, he almost fall down.

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On a snowy and windy day, Jerry was driving on the street carelessly, he had been drunk but he was too confident that he has a good driving ability. Suddenly, because he was so drunk, he suddenly hit a tree by the road and Passed out. A few hours later when his wife and the police found him: he said: it is just a small scratch of my car.

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Allusion 1:

The poodle dog is adorable, brown, cute.

Oxymoron:

1. Libby is warm, making people wants to study there.

2. Hostel is clean, without any insects.

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SIMILE:

The very good smell of the Pineapple bun metts with the butter like a butter flavour perfume.

Metaphor:

What wakes me up in the morning is not the great dream of me, but the need to go to clastes,

peysonification :

When I go out during snow weather, snom touches my sin inst like remind me greatly it is winter right now.

Hyperbole:

During the final time, I aways feel like I have a hundred home worker.

Under Statement :

He had been hurt really badly, but what he expressed was "I an fres

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The special location I went to was a highland on the way of my family’s drive from Sheffield to Birmingham, the scenery was amazing with the special natural elements of high latitude, this kind of scene is impossible to be seen in Hong Kong.

The cliff could be easily seen in the distance, which was an amazing scenery, I come across with a group of England high school students who are going on a hike as well.

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o Poem title: Go hiking on that autumn day

o Your name / Student number: LU YILIN/ 4115126

o Date of submission: 28/10/2024

o Course code (LUE3001)

Go hiking on that autumn day.

Go hiking on that autumn day, because winter is too cold for the heart of nature to burn.

Go hiking on that autumn day, because spring is too busy for the heart of nature to bloom.

Go hiking on that autumn day, because summer is too hot for the heart of nature to cool down.

Go hiking on that autumn day, because tree leaves will make up a beautiful, gold painting.

Go hiking on that autumn day, because this is the last time to escape from the cold, long winter.

Go hiking on that autumn day, While there is still time to engage with nature.

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“Jack? , why are you runs back so quickly and nervously? Anything happened?"

Jack was out of breath when he runs back to the tent, Betty wants to ask about what exactly was happened, but Jack runs so fast before and cannot even say a word.

After Jack Panting for a while, he slowly says "there was a large black bear chasing after me, hope it didn't discover that I am inside the tent.

Betty slowly opens a corner of the tent, she see's there is a black bear in the distance of the woods. Trying to find the smell of any living beings.

Betty closed the tent quietly and slowly, there was a scared looking on her face.

"Be quiet! The bear is still outside!" Says Betty.

Jack quietly opens the tent again, he sees a big, black nose is at the other side of the tent.

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1. My bus I took was broken, it initially was driving perfectly, but suddenly it crushed with a car that changed lanes. “Boom!” When it crushed onto another car, the glasses pieces of the broken window flied everywhere, also flies on my clothes, fortunately I was not hurt. The girl sitting behind Michael was screaming.

2. Michael was in a bus that was driving perfectly before it crushed with the car that changed lanes, the sound of the crush could be heard within kilometres, people on the bus was screaming.

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Short story – Revised and expanded version.

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Short story – Revised and expanded version.

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Almost everyone in Hong Kong loves travelling, why?

Because we live in a small and crowded place, and most people continue to live the same kind of life every single day.

Everyday we wake up, goes to work or study, take the same crowded public transport, dealing with the stressful work of study. Take the same public transport back home, take a shower and go to sleep.

On the next day, this kind of life will continue.

On this point, sometimes we will ask ourselves, what’s the meaning of this kind of repeating and endless life style?

I should say the answer to this solution is travelling.

Why travelling is the solution?

Imagine after you wake up in the morning, what waits you is not the same daily routine, your will not get on a bus to the university or the place your work, instead, you will get to the airport.

You might be already familiar with what is happening in the airport, but what will not change is the excitement of going to the place you love.

There is a wonderful saying I love: a mile of of road can only take you a mile away, but a mile of runway can take you anywhere.

When you wake up middle in the night on a 10hours flight

What you will see will not be your bedroom.

you see the aurora in the middle of the North Pole.

You will see the sunrise on the top of papua new guinea.

You will also see the sunset in the middle of Atlantic.

When you arrive at your destination, what you will see is

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Analyzes:

The inspiration of the choice of the topic comes from the fiction books I had read written by LIU CIXIN, a famous Chinese writer who wrote The 3 body, The Wandering Earth and other science fiction novels.

The most successful part of this story is the description given to describe the scene when Captain David needs to set everyone into frozen sleep for the very first time, that is risky because no one has tried that before, but it still needs to be done. And the ending is also a succeed because it is an open ending, giving the reader more space to have imaginations.

The suggestion given by ChatGPT mainly focuses on adding more details to the story, for example:

Original:

In 2144, traveling around the solar system has already become common, if going on a vacation at this time, people will not take on an airplane and travel to another country, instead, they will get on to an space craft developed by the commercial companies.

After:

By 2144, the once-unimaginable idea of space travel had become commonplace. Vacationing no longer meant flying to foreign countries—now, civilians boarded sleek commercial spacecraft designed by private companies, gliding effortlessly between Earth, the Moon, and Mars. Spaceports, once a novelty, now buzzed with the routine hustle of travelers in zero gravity, sipping synthetic cocktails as they gazed at the stars through panoramic windows.

Original:

During the launch, the launch field was already a mess of people. There are protestors who strongly against the sparkling project because they think this project only carries some of the people on earth, leaving many people behind.

After:

As the launch unfolded, the field was a chaotic scene of emotion. Protesters clashed with security, their voices filled with outrage. "Leave no one behind!" they shouted, holding up banners that depicted families torn apart by the decision to abandon Earth’s masses. On the other side, supporters rallied with hopeful smiles, chanting, "A future for humanity!" The media captured the moment from every angle, creating a divide in the global narrative. David, standing at the helm, couldn’t shake the weight of the decision. He had never felt the sting of guilt so deeply as when he saw a young child waving goodbye to their parents, unaware of the irreversibility of this mission.

This improvement has made the story more vivid and much more attravtive.

A reflection on my growth as a writer:

The biggest challenge I met was the topic of the story, I am not a good person with a good imagination and I usually struggle with a topic for many days with all different assignments. This time, to avoid this kind of situation, I forced myself to read some books, including the science fiction novel by LIU CIXIN as mentioned before. In this way, finding a topic became easier for me, I will keep using this way in my future assignments in other subjects: which is to have more related readings before the assignment.