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your word choice and imagery is impeccable!

liwag

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I like how you put in today's colloquialisms into the ballad; makes it much more relatable in this society.

-Sherwin

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I like how you used the different seasons to depict   different emotions.
-apoorva

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Even though you were obviously hurt by her departure, I respect the fact that you still wanted the best for your "best friend". This is true love.
-McCarly

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The allusions you make to music really show something about you. (how much music means to you)
Akshay

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"Dark and stormy days" is nice subtle comedy that can still portray your emotions effectively
--Nick

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I like your use of choir and music to explain feelings of love

Amie

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Hearing this series in events in prose allows one to understand that these events occurred; hearing this series of events in poetry really conveys the feelings attributed to this event- Joe

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I like how you recognize the necessity of ending the relationship but still represented how it affected you.
--Rebecca

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I love the change in tone as you go from a love filled spring and summer to a cold winter.
- Caitlin

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I like how your ballad is affectionate and warm despite the heartbreak. The ballad also reflects your relationship and emotions.

Hadia

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I like how you used real life events in the poem, it adds to the authenticity of it.

Anushka

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Your poem is melancholic and never loses emotion throughout.

Jenny

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I like how the setting changes, it gives the effect of passing time and explains how much time you spent together.
-Parthi

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I like how you depict winter and how you describe time going on.
Sneh

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"O woe is me; you are in my head" is a line Keats would approve.
Love that you included "dark and stormy" in your ballad.
Mrs. Corsun

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I loved how you said you "waited far too long" for happiness. I know how it feels and how rewarding it is to finally take that leap just as you described.

-Johnson

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I notice the pun you used in your title, very effective in describing who this person is that you speak of

liwag

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i like you transition from an innocent crush to love to heartbreak.

Amie

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I feel the emotion in your voice and words.

Hadia

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Just kidding. This is a beautiful poem. I'm proud of your transparency

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I enjoyed your use of double entendee
-- BIlly

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The ballad's intimacy was refreshing.

-Sherwin

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Decent.
-McCarly

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I like your use of metaphors to further describe your heart break.
- Caitlin

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Nice imagery in "Spice of Latina, Indian, / What else is there to say?"
Mrs. Corsun

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I love your description of first loves. I think everyone has felt that awkwardness being around them and the sense of not knowing what you should be doing.

-Johnson

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I like how even though the poem was a progression of your relationship with her, you also talk about changes in you that did not directly relate to her.
--Rebecca

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I like how you start the poem and the progression of your story with her.
Sneh

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Your poem has great flow and rhythm to it- Joe

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I like how your character has two parts of himself but still want to attention of a girl.
--Nick

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I really like the rhythm of your poem and how you tell a story.

Jenny

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I enjoyed how you described the awkward feeling of first love because I think everyone has a similar experience
-apoorva

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Your flow is very clean.
-Parthi

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I like the rhythm of the poem and the similes and metaphors throughout it.

Anushka

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You capture well what the urge to leave feels like.

-Kevin

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I liked how you used older English in your ballad. Makes it feel a bit more authentic.

-Johnson

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Your use of detail and flowery language stands out.

Hadia

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I though the "glove" double entendre was interesting
apoorva

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Nice use of double entendre

Amie

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I respect how you were able to write about so intimate a moment.
--Rebecca

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I enjoyed the rhythm in your poem.

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I like your use of double entendre!
- Caitlin

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I like the imagery of the ballad; I can almost see "her eyes."

-Sherwin

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Your use of double entendre is effective- Joe

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"She took my heart, my love, my youth" is a line worthy of Keats.
Mrs. Corsun

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Great use of double entendre and imagery.

Jenny

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I like how you use both subtle double entendre and explicit language. It adds to the poem.

Anushka

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Your double entendre is clever
--Nick

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I like the use of the double entendre and how you write the description of the girl.
Sneh

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I liked your use of double entendre
--Billy

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Your double entrentre with the glove was very effective.
Akshay

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Your poem is very raw and true.
-Parthi

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I like how even after you signal the end of you relationship, you continue to represent the moments you had in present tense.
-Rebecca

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I like the fairy-tale allusion of your ballad; different from the more personal perspectives of the other love ballads.

-Sherwin

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I like how your metaphors were used as imagery to help further convey the feeling of heart break and hidden emotions
-Caitlin

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your ballad had really nice rhythm and fluency to it!

Amie

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I like the transition of your poem and how you vividly demonstrate how you feel after losing the person. You can feel the admiration that you feel for her. Very poetic.

Jenny

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I like how the ballad centers around the cupid. It symbolized many things.

Hadia

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Your use of personification is great and illustrates the feelings you experienced skillfully.
Akshay

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I like how you take cherubs, a symbol of love and felicity, and turn them into something painful to bear- Joe

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As an older sister, this poem helps me see both sides of the story, especially since I am leaving my sister alone this year.
apoorva

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I like the extended metaphor using Cupid throughout. The allusions also add to the poem.

Anushka

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I like how cupid gives you the realization of your faults.
--Billy

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I like how you incorporate the dialogue and how you end the poem.
Sneh

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I really like your use of parallelism in your stanzas. They make your flow feel even better and your flow was already great to begin with.

-Johnson

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The dialogue between the character and himself underscores the character's haplessness and echoes a deep rooted feeling of losing oneself.
--Nick

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Nice apostrophe to Cupid, even though he didn't help you keep her.
Mrs. Corsun

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I can feel the heavy emotion in your ballad.
-Parthi

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I firmly enjoy your personal reflection and the adjectives used in this ballad

liwag

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The mood change in your poem is artfully dramatic
-McCarly

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I hope your sister and you have a better relationship in the future

LIWAG

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Nice use of classical allusion- Joe

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As a fellow younger sibling, your poem makes me feel sentimental. I relate to seeing a sibling change.
Akshay

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I like how your poem is about your sister, like mine was. These similarities allowed me to relate to your ballad better

Amie

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The emotion you conveyed in your ballad was tragically beautiful.
- Caitlin

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I like your topic, it is unique  and personal to you. I also like how genuine the tone of your poem is.

-Kevin

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I like how you slowly build up why your sister is so important to you. She is your friend and your inspiration and this build up of detail makes it understandable why you care so much about her.

Jenny

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I like the way the poem shifts from happy memories to something more severe. It shows the significance behind the ballad.

- Hadia

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I liked the metaphor of the witch.

-Billy

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Nice allusion to mythology.
"Years without Hope."
Have you shared  this with Hope?
Mrs. Corsun

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I like the allusions to Greek mythology with Daedalus. Ties in gothic elements.

Anushka

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I enjoy how this is a dedicated piece; a nice sentimental piece in contrast to the other more self-indulgent ballads.

-Sherwin

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I like how you show the difference between your sister before and after and what you think of this difference.

Sneh

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I loved how you incorporated paranormal figures and mythology such as Daedalus and the witch. It showed how you don't quite blame your sister.

-Johnson

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I love how you personify pain.
-Parthi

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"years without hope" i like the double entendre. Hope, as a sister and a concept, highlights the how loss you suffered doubled.
--Nick

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I like the sadness in your poem; I hope that all is well.

Sherwin

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i like how you talk about the value of one person in your life,
the lack of your sister can make such a big difference

-apoorva

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I like that this is not the typical romantic relationship poem-- you express emotions in reaction to another cause.

Anushka

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I like how origional your ballad is because it's about filial love instead of romantic love.
--Nick

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Akshay

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I like how you go to your sister for comfort
Sneh

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I like the allusion to "Oh Captain, My Captain!" with your title: "Oh Sister, My Sister."
-Johnson

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Have you shared your poem with your sister?
Mrs. Corsun