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- To whom it may concern
- Slightly arrogant

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-Ineffective subject Line
-Improper information
-No action paragraph
-No salutation

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Subject is vague and useless.
To whom it may concern does not address anyone and is not preferable.
The purpose of the email and what you want to be done is unclear.
It uses a semi colon instead of a colon or more informally a comma.
You haven't listed your hours, location or any specifics so the person you are corresponding with would have to put in work or reply to you and ask to do any good.

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-Ineffective subject line
-Improper way to address someone
-No specific personal information
-No Sign off

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Sam Heaton, Eisa Babaei, Linda Hongmin He.

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Sam Heaton, Eisa Babaei, Linda Hongmin He.

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Subject vague, salutation poor. Long introduction about how the person wants to contribute but not what they propose to contribute. Purpose of e-mail is therefore not clear. It is only in the final paragraph that the aim of sending the e-mail (getting better office space) is revealed. There is also no clear request for a private office but the hope that the sender's expectations will be met, which also gives the e-mail a passive-aggressive tone.

Poorly ordered paragraphs, no thanks or warm greeting at the end, and no ending salutation.

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-the subject is not clear or complete
-the intro not concise as it contains too much personal detail
-intro does not state the purpose of the email(her objective) efficiently and clearly
-the middle paragraph appears to be unnecessary rambling about her teaching experiences; rather, the writer should go into detail about the problem she wishes to address
-no appreciation was shown to the reader for reviewing the email
-no solution was provided to the problem in question

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1.The subject doesn't have specific and essential information.
2. It is not very polite that there is no "thank" at the end of the email.
3. There is also no signature.

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Long Sentences.
"To whom it may concern".
Long introduction detailing who they are.
Not a detailed subject line.
No suggested action to fix issue.
No sign-off.
Semicolon in greeting instead of colon.
Unnecessary details in second paragraph.
Second and third paragraph are on the same subject.

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to whom it may convern
not a good subject
no sign and thnks

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- Subject is vague.
- Email is not addressed to anyone
- First paragraph is not making an introduction, it's only about him/herself.
- no office hours
- not coherent

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1.To whom it may concern vs Dear ...
2. Subject is vague
3. 1st para has repeated words (ie: "to my")
4. Problem para is broken up
5. No solution given

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- You have not presented a solution
- Subject line is too broad

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No office hours listed
No location listed
Vague reference to recipient
No sign off

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no thank you
no signature
there is no exact subject
too many words for intro but useless

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- No sender's name.
- Subject is not detail
- No salutation

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2 paragraphs of exposition, 1 sentence explaining the problem and no solution offered

E-mail is impersonal, "To Whom It May Concern"

E-mail loses focus throughout the 2nd paragraph, starts to shift to the teacher's personal beliefs as opposed to facts about the issue

No indentation

Paragraphs are incomplete

No sign-off or thanks given

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- Ambiguous subject
- Improper salutation
- Incomplete and irrelevant
- Doesn't directly address the issue at hand
- Not convincing enough

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-non-specific subject
-non-specific salutation
-almost complete lack of purpose
-problem presented unclearly late in email
-no action asked for, only vague hope
-no sign off

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To whom it may concern
No thank you at the end
No sign off
No solution presented or what the specific problem is
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Subject is not detailed/specific enough

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The subject is not clear.
She only express her own business.
The email does not talk about the benefit of the college.
There is no thank at the end
no sign off

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not detailed enough in subject
-  there is a ; semi instead of :
-  didnt address someone, (to whom in may concern)
- not polite, no signoff, or sincerely
- doesnt specifiy what is valuable
- should start with the problem of a busy office due to collegues, before mentioning that she always sets time aside for student hours

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-No proper subject line
-No salutation
-did not address someone
-no clear explanation

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1- Sender name is not mentioned.
2- Subject is not clear.
3- Not mentioned the name who to concern.
4- Not describe that what something valuable to contribute.

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Does not properly address reader.

No salutation present.

Subject line is not informative.

Informal writing: use of contractions.

There is no sign-off.

No courtesies.

Too many personal pronouns.

Too personal.

Too much irrelevant information

It is too lengthy.

It is not clear what the issue is.

Not clear to the intended reader.

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1.'’To whom it may concern'
2. not a clear subject line
3. not a good organized content, the problem, the purpose, all mix together
4. not polite enough, no words like thank you, or sincerely