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1. What are the two most common errors you noticed in the revision phase?

The main errors I noticed in the paragraphs was the spacing , no indentation.

2. What are the two most common errors you noticed in the editing phase?

I noticed incorrect punctuation , fragment sentences , and grammar wasn't correct.

3. If you had to rate this essay from 1-10 (10 being the highest), how would you score it? Why?

Id rate the essay a 7/10, its informative and overall good its just not really organized and needs fixing.

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1. weak or unclear thesis statement

the transition wasn't the strongest and topic sentences

2. incorrect punctuation. The semicolon and missing commas

Sentence fragments. a few sentences were overly repetitive

3. 8.5 because it was a strong idea and evidence but needed clearer structure and some minor grammar fixes.

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Ryan Timberlake

1. There was more than 4 paragraphs

1. There are grammatical errors throughout the article which are easy fixes.

2. None of the paragraphs were indented

3. There are no quotations from the text that we can see that can tell us what the authors really said.

I would give this article a 7/10 because they do go into detail between the similarities and differences and they are able to decide which one is better to them.

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1. Errors I've noticed was the beginning of each paragraph not being indented. As well as some sentences being double spaced with grammar and punctuation errors.

2. Fragment sentences and unnecessary wording.

3. Overall this essay was a 7/10. Very clear and direct, but it did need some things shorten down. It did have some errors, but I think that if they are altered, then the essay is perfect!

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1. The two most common errors that I noticed were that all the paragraphs were not indented and that some words would include excessive spacing between each other.

2. I noticed that Sturges name being mentioned plurally was spelled incorrectly when an apostrophe should have been added over the last "s" in the name. The title was not centered within the page and the student name did not line up with the professor information, class, or date.

3. It was a well written essay, it would get a score of 7/10 due to the fact that it had a lot of grammatical errors, and no indentation what so ever.

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The errors noted:

Grammar: 6/10

1. Excessive spacing in multiple sentences

2. No indentations in any of the paragraphs

3. Wrongfully making words either plural or singular

Coherence: 6/10

1. The introduction paragraph's conclusion statement is essentially repeated twice which also results in the essays conclusion being repeated twice

2. The similarities that are being compared are two different similarities

Total score 6/10: The foundation is mostly strong with the exception of the repeated conclusion, and while the grammar is mostly correct, there are major errors such as no indentations and excessive spacing.

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1. The two most common errors I noticed during revision were second-person use in the conclusion and a few spots where sentences could flow more smoothly.

2. In the editing phase, I mostly found small grammar and punctuation issues, and one or two sentences that needed rewording for clarity.

3. I’d rate the essay a 8-9. It’s well-organized, the argument is clear, and the examples are strong. Just needed a few minor fixes to make it cleaner and more polished.

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1. The first common error I noticed is the firs paragraph is not indented. I also noticed it feels like they are just jumping around, they need to slow down and use some transition words.

2. First thing is the S in stalking is not capitalized. The grammar is all over the place and they are not using proper punctuation.

3. I would say a 6/10 because the information is good but the grammar is all over the place

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1. The two common mistakes I saw was that there was not enough spacing between the paragraphs or too much spacing in between.

2. Two common errors were the capitalization errors and how they transitioning from one paragraph to the next. Many sentences started with uncapitalized letter while words in the middle of sentences were capitalized. On the other hand the transitioning between paragraphs also didn't have any capital letters to show where the paragraph was starting. Secondly the start of paragraphs did not have any transitional words .

3. i would probably rate it a 7-8 because it had the claims and something to support it but just did not word it correctly or separate the information in the right category's

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1. The two most common errors I noticed while revising was the punctuation/grammar and not indenting and not letting the reader know when you are starting a new paragraph.

2. The second thing I noticed it was filled with information but it was a lot of fragments.

3. If I had to rate this essay I would rate it a 6/10. There is an excessive use of incorrect grammar and the author needs clarity on when a new paragraph is starting.

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1. The two most common mistakes errors I noticed in the revision phase were not enough spacing in between paragraphs and multiple words had double spacing in between.

2. The two most common mistakes I noticed in the editing phase were no capitalization in the very first sentence and not using punctuation in some contraction words.

3. I would give this essay the rating of a 7.5 out of 10 because overall the essay is very factual and enlightening, there were just plenty of errors that could easily be fixed.

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1. The two most common errors in the revision phase were incomplete thoughts—such as the sentence that ends with “while article two the, ”which needs to be finished for clarity—and weak transitions between ideas, where adding words like “similarly” or “in contrast” could improve flow.

2. The two most common errors in the editing phase were capitalization issues, including inconsistent use of capital letters in article titles and author names, and punctuation or sentence structure problems, with some sentences being too long or missing commas, making them harder to follow. 3. I would rate this essay a 7 out of 10 because it shows strong understanding and analysis of the articles, a clear thesis, and a thoughtful conclusion, but it could be improved with better structure, smoother transitions, and more careful proofreading to polish the writing.

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1. What are the two most common errors you noticed in the revision phase?

The most common errors I discovered were double spacing and failure to indent paragraphs.

2. What are the two most common errors you noticed in the editing phase?

punctuation and a couple of fragment sentences.

3. If you had to rate this essay from 1-10 (10 being the highest), how would you score it? Why?

Probably a 7 out of 10. The essay was very informative. It just needed a few tweaks here and there.

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1. The most common errors that i've noticed in the revision phase were that a lot of words were double spaced.

2. The two most common errors that iv'e noticed in the editing phase were punctuations that needed to be added as well as a lot of spaces that needed to be taken away.

3. If I were to rate this essay, I would give this essay a 7 out of 10 because the essay was good. The essay itself is good, but the essay could have been summed up a little more. It seemed like more was said than needed to such as the last paragraph could've been summed up to one paragraph instead of two different paragraphs and the student could have stayed on topic with difference like they stated in their thesis.