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Focus Here: I would like feedback on my proportions, blending and how my hands are. As you can see, I had to draw a bunch of hands for this portrait and hands aren't really my specialty. I don't know how to feel about how the blending are in this portrait, for example the skin, so I would like feedback on that or tips.

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Feedback Focus: I would like feedback on my proportions, specifically on the portrait and if there is something I could've done to the background to make it more interesting without it becoming to distracting with the complexity of the rest of the drawing. I think I got a little confused on the portrait due to all of the crystals and their intricacy as well as it being a self portrait.

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Feedback Focus: I would like feedback on my composition and my proportions. My goal for this piece was to inverse a photograph using white charcoal. Flipping the image back and forth between negative and positive often confused me and I believe it is distorting the proportional relationship with the eyes in the portrait.

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Feedback Focus: I would like feedback on my proportions, my attempt at drawing fabric, my background, and use of white. My goal for this piece was to really make it feel ominous and have the main focus be the model. I chose to put eyes as a background cause I felt it added to the unrest you should feel when viewing the drawing, but i'm unsure if it has actually taken focus away from the portrait.

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Feedback Focus: I would like feedback on ways to improve background design and placement. I feel as though if I were to have put the shack to the left side and the field on the right, it would have balanced out the contrast of the drawing. I would also like input or tips on how to make tubular shapes look more 3-dimensional. The tentacles on her head feel a little too "drawn" for me, and if there are any tips anyone can give me I'd be thankful.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on my composition. In the past composition has been difficult, and I feel like this is not very dynamic. I would also like to know about proportions, because the more I look at it, the more it looks really weird. You could also say something about contrast, because I feel like it's a little lacking. You can also say whatever else you want, but those are the main points I want feedback on.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on the sculptural headpiece and the hair mainly, but if you think it would  be helpful you can give me feedback on the portrait. Also any tips are fine.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on my proportions, and my composition. With the head on a slight tilt and a slight turn, I think I struggled to align everything  correctly. I think my composition could have been much stronger as I struggled to integrate my background into my drawing.

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Focus Here: I personally don't want feedback. I know what I hate about the piece, what needs improvement, etc. If anything I would want feedback on the likeness of the head piece..... only the head piece. I already know everything wrong with the portrait and I really don't want that to be the focus on my critique. Focus on things like the head piece and collarbone. DO NOT mention the nose, eyes, or even the lips...... I know whats wrong with them and how to be fixed so don't waste yours and my time. However, if you have any tips, they would be greatly appreciated.

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List Feedback Focus Here:  For my feedback I would appreciate feedback on my composition, the value, and the overall proportions and likeness. For reference I will put my photograph below so you can critique the likeness. I would also appreciate some tips and advice to make this drawing even stronger, whether that be an engaging background or including hands or etc. Can’t wait to here your constructive criticism :)!

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on my proportions. I feel like the proportions going from the face to the clothing is a little off.

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Feedback Focus: I would like my feedback to be focused on the overall likeness. I’ve attached my reference photo to compare it to the piece. I also want feedback on my background. Backgrounds have never been my strong point, and I’m wondering if the vines work in this drawing.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on the proportion of the nose and the eyes. I would also like feedback on the neck.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like to know if it has a wide value range and if it shows how light traveled across the face and head wear piece. I would also like feedback on if there is clear evidence that I simplified the forms of the face and head wear piece into simple shapes.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on general likeness and proportions specifically on the face and arm. If you find the value/contrast to be effective. And if there is anything you think I could have added to the background that would’ve been simple, so that it wouldn't have taken away from the rest of the piece. I believe that I moved to the compressed charcoal and charcoal pencils too quickly, due to time restraints, and it was then difficult to work around without smudging. If there is anything you recommend to help the piece or anything in the future please leave your ideas.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would like feedback on value and proportions and if it's well blended, and possibly fabric. Or if there's anything else that needs to be pointed out just let me know. But i am mainly looking to improve on proportions and value. but i mainly struggle one proportions.

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This drawing is absolutely phenomenal! There's something about it that is just so captivating and it really just pulls you in. Every time I look at it I notice something new and I think that's something that's really hard to pull off. I think you did a really good job at differentiating the skin from the rest of the drawing and I really enjoyed that you chose to do the drawing in white charcoal. I also really like your choice of background. It adds something to the drawing without taking away too much focus from the figure.

I  don't think your contrast is lacking. I actually think it's very strong. You can clearly tell the  difference between various elements in this drawing. I also really enjoyed your composition and I think you did a really good job at integrating different things to elevate it. I think if you were to add more things to your composition, it would get too busy and take away from the rest of the drawing.

For your proportions, it is hard to tell if they are inaccurate without a reference photo but from what I see, I think the parts of the portrait you can see look fairly accurate. The only thing that I think is proportionally off is the left forearm that is leading up to the hand. I think that compared to the other arm, it looks a little too thick, although I'm not sure if that is how it looked in the reference photo. Overall, this drawing is amazing and I really think that it fits into the category of magical realism perfectly.

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List Feedback Focus Here: I would appreciate feed back on my proportions, background, and my likeness in general. Also if you have any tips/suggestions I am open to them, and willing to her your opinions.

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Mimi, I appreciate your strong sense of likeness and contrast in your charcoal final. My favorite moments in your drawing are the portrait and the crinkles in the right shoulder fabric. Your ability to render value helps each crinkle in the fabric feel like it is popping out and sinking in.

I also appreciate your artistic risk of including the rendered eyes in the background. I enjoy how the eyes subtly shift their gaze towards the figure. Each eye helps to reinforce and support the portrait. My suggestion is to adapt some of the values in the eyes to be darker. Through darker values, the eyes will appear to be hiding within the darkness-pushing your ominous mood.

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Carrine, The way that all of the organic forms in the sculptural head piece have been blocked in is really effective, and strongly conveys the flowers and the way that they seem to all grow together. I would suggest adding more of a contrast or differentiation in the values of the flowers to give it more depth.  The shapes are clearly separate and each flower feels like it's own, but some areas feel a little flat, and a little over blended.

I really enjoy the way that the light travels across portrait. I can feel the way that the nose comes out and the eyes feel like they are sitting in the sockets. I also think that you handled the hair very well. the dark values layered on top of the dark value of the background still lets the individual strands of the hair show through and gives it a different texture from the skin and head piece.

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I would adjust the following:
1. The highlight in the top lip from far away reads as teeth rather than a highlight.
2. The cast shadow edge on the nose almost makes the nose feel like it is in profile, maybe blend out the edge.

I appreciate  the following:
1. The texture in the headpiece-it feels soft.
2. The composition, the figure feels like it belongs on the black page.

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I would adjust the facial proportions it feels like it is getting squished and compressing the facial features.

I would also adjust the contrast because it feels like the tone is to even and they facial features are a little hard to see.

I appreciate the hair it feels very life like.

I also like the fabric it feels like it flow of it is natural

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First off, this drawing is STUNNING.  I think you did a really good job at conveying the ominous mood that you were going for and I think your choice of using white charcoal really paid off. My favorite part of this drawing has to be the fabric. You did an amazing job at capturing all the folds and the overall flow of the fabric. I think your proportions look really accurate, although it is hard to tell without a reference photo.

I do have to agree with Ms. Johnson about the eyes being too bright. While I don't think they take anything away from the drawing right now, I do think they could elevate it so much more if they were a little darker. My only other critique would be to underlay some of the eyes under the figure so they look like they are behind the figure as well as around it. Overall, I think this drawing does a really good job at fitting into the magical realism category and you should be really proud of it.

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I really appreciate the detail work in the eyes and the likeness of the mask compared to your reference. You also have a wonderful value of contrast without making it look forced or jarring.

Starting with your question regarding the background. I do believe it works well with your portrait, especially because you have the hanging leaves on your headpiece. This ties it together nicely and shows thought. The only thing that for me makes it ineffective is the size of your portrait compared to the background. I wonder if you had made the model slightly bigger, so the shoulders had stretched across the paper more, similarly to your reference photo. If this would have taken up more of the space making it look like the model was in the world with the vines. For your second question, your likeness is quite similar to your reference. I do think that your nose may be on a slightly different angle and that the eye on the left side of the paper could be a little bit bigger, but this is incredibly nitpicky.

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Before I get to your specific question I find the background to be so stunning. The contrast and sense of light in the headpiece is wonderful and works very well with the rest of your piece. I think the proportions of the eyes are good, but what may be the issue is it looks like you inverted the tones. Because I don’t have the reference I can’t be positive. I see it mostly in the crease/folds of the eyelids. I think the nose looks good as well proportion wise. But because the rest of the face is so light I think it may just need to be slightly brighter in places to provide the high points of the face and make it look more sculpted. Your specific question about proportions I don’t think are relevant without a reference I think it looks spot on.

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Lena, I very much appreciate your attention to detail in the top of the head piece where the fabric is almost like a net. I also had a small section with that fabric, so I know how difficult it is to draw. I think the stark shadows on the left side of the face and shoulder makes the piece very dramatic, and graphic. The crystal chain that falls over the face is very convincing and rich.  I also admire that the entire piece is very clean. The detail in the head piece brings the piece to a high level of detail that I think really enforces the sense of magical realism.
You asked about proportions, and when I look at you reference photo, I can spot a few minor things. I think the overall proportions of the figure are very accurate, but the face in the drawing is a little wider on the right side than it is in the photo. I think this might be due to the right eyebrow being too long. The tail of the right eyebrow is a little higher in the photo and ends almost in alignment to the end of the right eye's eyelashes. I think this caused the face to seem a little wider. This being said, the proportions of the piece and the face are still very realistic, and it took me a long time to spot the difference between the image and drawing.
You also asked about how you could have made the background more interesting. I think adding actual elements into the background would be overbearing seeing as there is already an immense amount of detail in the portrait. So I think what could have helped was to make the background more like in your reference photo. The area closest to the face is the lightest and then fades into a darker grey in the corners. This could have grounded your figure and enforced the mood and drama. It would intensify your drawing as well as make the light source more clear. I think this would be the best bet for improving you background.

btw, I got the reference photo from the sculptural headwear editorial fashion photographs slide, that we got 10/26/2020.

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This drawing is absolutely gorgeous. I really enjoy your composition, and your use of negative space, especially in the head piece. The dashed lines and dots in the background are well incorporated into your portrait as well and don't feel out of place or segregated. The way the light travels across the portrait shows a clear light source and was very well done.

The main critique that I have for the sculptural head piece would be some of the changes in value. I don't know if it could be the quality of the photo, but there are some areas in the plant on the left where it looks like there is a halo effect around it. Without the halo, the lines would be much crisper. I also think that if there were a few more mid tones and shadows pulled through some of hair, it would  push the contrast a little more.

I love the differentiation of texture that you have in your overall piece, between the headpiece, the skin, the fabric on the side and the hair. You did a really good job with this project, and it is a very strong magical realism piece

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To start off you piece looks fantastic, I can really appreciate your attention to detail and the likeness in your drawing. As of your background the only thing is that I agree with how it could use more contrast in the left side of the piece, for me it feels a little incomplete compared to the rest of the drawing  due to it having so much detail in the rest of the piece. For the tentacles I think they might look a bit more "tubular" if you were to make sure to shade at the edges and blend them into the highlights a bit more, and maybe don't make the highlight so defined, for example on the top of the one that curls on the face of the portrait. If I were to say anything else I would there is something a bit off with the eyelids of the portrait. Although, in conclusion your portrait is exceptional and looks like a immaculate piece.

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MIMI OMG LET ME JUST START OFF SAYING THIS IS AMAZING AND YOU SHOULD BE SO PROUD!! I really appreciate your creative risk you took with the background I think it was a very affective background that doesn’t take away from the art work. The eyes stare at the drawing which leads you to look at the art work, while also being able admire the background. While we are talking about strengths the likeness is there, I definitely see your mom in this portrait without even seeing the reference photo.

I’m being very nit picky with this critique because it is really hard to find improvements for it is very strong. Overall your fabric is very strong, but I believe some of the shadow edges are a little harsh. For example the big shadow placed on the middle the head piece it is halo-ed with a bright white highlight. I find this distracting I feel like it should be smoothed out, the shadow shape just feels un natural when shadow shapes tend to be more organic. So in general I’d just be a little careful not to give things this halo effect, for it tends to give things a more un organic shape. I see this a little bit with the top crease of your models eyes as well.

Again, I had to search real hard to find these critiques, I am so proud of you’re improvement this year!! And I can’t wait to see more of your work this year, keep up the amazing work Mimi!!!
Love, your favorite sophomore, Cece <3

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Carrine, I really appreciate the hard work. I can tell that you put a lot of work and heart into this piece. Some strengths I see within your art work are things like the over all shape of your headpiece, when looking at it there are a few flowers I really enjoy. For example I really love the big flower to the bottom right. I find that this flower is very eye engaging, your eye is naturally drawn to it because of its size. It really strengthens your drawing. Another thing that I appreciate is the contrast of your hair to the headpiece. The difference is shades really allows the flowers to pop.

A couple things that could help you improve your drawing is in the head piece. I think it would have been affective to make them all the same texture. Some of the flowers feel scratchy and some feel really smooth. I think to improve  the head piece you should either smooth out all the flowers or make them all scratchy. I can understand it if it was an artistic way of portraying the flowers if they all followed the same texture. One more thing with the headpiece, I believe that if the flowers had a bigger range value it would make this art piece even stronger! I started to see your knowledge of it with the dark gaps you left in the headpiece, so i think if you continued that in the headpiece the gaps wouldn’t feel misplaced or secluded.

Overall though this piece is beautiful and I enjoy the portrait aspect of it, and I think these improvements to the headpiece would really strengthen the drawing, and would frame the portrait even more nicely. Great job Carrine! I am so impressed with this drawing, keep up the good work <3.
Love, your sophomore critique buddy, Cece.

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To start with your portrait is terrific, I really can appreciate the likeness that is in your drawing. I believe that the sculptural head where has a well thought out amount of contrast, although when I look at some of the rest of the portrait such as the shirt it looks a bit "mucky" in some areas. I honestly had no idea that you simplified the forms It really doesn't look like it. Just as my opinion i'm going out on a limb here but I think it might look better with a background, but then again I also like the simplicity of it so maybe something little would help it along. I honestly think that your portrait looks fantastic, and I think you should be incredibly proud of it.

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Charlotte, this is amazing! Your sense of value and texture differentiation is amazing-- especially in the hair and skin. I love the way the hair looks soft and flowy in contrast to the solidity of the skin. The eyelashes are subtle but very much there and it draws attention to the eyes. The highlights in the eyes as well catch my attention and really give life to the portrait.

I think there may be some proportion issues with the nose in particular, maybe with how one side of the nostril is further down than the other. It looks to me as though there is a shoulder to the bottom left. The shading on it is very good, however the size is off. The head looks a little too high up and large to fit the proportions of the shoulder, I believe, but the hair flowing over it is very well done!

On the topic of the background, I really like the idea that I think you had. The textures in the figure are very pronounced and it's easy to tell  what's what, but the trees seem a little too smooth to be easily picked out from the drawing. Perhaps this was intentional, of course, but for the sake of the focus to be on the figure, the trees make it blend a little.

Outstanding work! It looks amazing once again and I admire that you did it on black paper. Keep it up!

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Noam, I really love your work! This and what Ms. Johnson has showed us. Your sense of texture is outstanding and your shading skill is through the roof. In this, I really like the background elements and the design of the mask. The intricate details on it are beautifully done and the focus is perfectly set on the figure. I can tell you're probably detail oriented, which is something I can really admire and appreciate.

With the background and composition: I love the seahorses! They're super cute and feel very fitting with the appearance of the mask. I believe at the top is a reflection of water since there are seahorses and it looks a little like the mask is underwater, floating? I really like this aspect, that it feels underwater (at least to me), it's a very nice aesthetic to follow. However, in the bottom of the piece,  there is a little fade to white you've put. On the right, it is easier on the eyes and can be overlooked, but on the left it's a little too bright I think and derives from the arm's highlights. This, and if it is underwater, then it would be darker towards the bottom I think.

The figure itself is fine in its placement in my opinion, as being more centred allows for the focus to be drawn to it in my opinion, however an alternative could've been to lean it more to the left or right. I personally am no genius with composition, so there's not much for me to say. I think it looks great!

Onto proportions of the figure: I love that it feels like this person is leaning forward onto their hands. The shading on the arm to our right is perfect, I love gently it fades into each colour. The one to our left is also well-shaded, however it seems a little wide. This goes for the hand on this side, too. I believe the hand may be at an angle, though, so that's debatable. On the right hand, it feels like there is a little bit of a lack of knuckle towards the edge. The fingers are very well done but that small little detail is throwing it off a little.

The shirt's texture is a little too close to the skin as well, and the shading on it doesn't feel like fabric-- feels a little more to me like rubber maybe? In general, for the whole drawing, it feels like there is more attention paid to the right side... maybe excluding the seahorses. This doesn't really have any underlying meaning to me, just something I sorta noticed, haha.

All in all, this is a gorgeous piece. I'm delighted to see so much time put into this and absolutely adore your style! Keep up the good work, dude! You're amazing.

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Ezra, first of all, I really enjoy your integration of 3D elements around the portrait, I think it frames the figure well and actually aids with balancing out the composition a lot. I think your way of drawing the wire using only the highlights is very captivating, and gives the feeling of magic. I also thinks your details in the flowers make them feel delicate, and their sharp shadows give a dramatic and graphic look.
You asked about composition, and I actually think yours is really good. The use of newspaper and flowers to frame the portrait is very innovative and helps with the compositions. I usually tend to put something in each corner when trying to frame drawing, so I praise you for avoiding that, and I think that gives it an organic feeling that enforces magical realism.
You also asked about proportions. There were only a few minor differences I spotted between your reference photo and the drawing. One thing is that the right nostril in the reference photo is a lot smaller than in the drawing. If you were to draw it in a way that the space between the nostrils was bigger, I think it would look more realistic. Another thing is that the right jaw in the drawing is wider than in the reference photo. The jaw in the picture is almost aligned with the right side of the neck. One last thing is that the bottom right portion of the mask nearest to the feathers is a little bigger in the photo than in the drawing. These were the only things I saw, though, and everything else in the drawing looks very accurate.

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Your piece looks very thought out and looks splendid. I really enjoy that you challenged yourself with the multiple hands that are shown in your portrait. I believe that shading looks fantastic overall but it seems that at the face you might have struggled a bit, mostly the right eye and the at the mask because it seems a bit confusing, due to it being a bit difficult to tell the if the mask is suppose to be transparent or if you were trying to show a difference in value to try to show that the nose and mouth is there. Your blending looks great but it looks a bit mucky in some spots (mostly in the portrait), I would recommend to blend certain spots into each other a bit better, what I do is I have a little extra charcoal on my blender and lightly go over the spot and it makes it look more intentionally blended. Really though I can enjoy this piece and I appreciate that you took on such a big challenge with the hands.

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To start I really like how you incorporated mixed media. I also really enjoy your composition. Something I would change is maybe make the right nostril a little bit smaller. I also think you could've made the skin a little bit smoother. Something else I really enjoy is how you can see the light travelling through the artwork. I really like this drawing.

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I really like how your portrait turned out. The mask turned out wonderful. The cottons texture has the exact feeling shown in the reference photo. I appreciate the shading in this work.  You balanced the light, medium and dark tones evenly.  I think the vines goes well with your piece since you have leaves attached to your mask itself.
I would adjust your model shown in the portrait to be enlarged a bit more just to take up space just like how it's shown in the reference photo.

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Your piece looks like you put a lot of effort into it, and you can easily see how that hard work impacted the quality of the piece. The shading and lighting of the piece are very good, there's a lot of contrast and mid-tones. You could use more blending to make everything a bit smoother though, it almost looks like everything was highlighted. The proportions are mostly fine, the only problems are with the nose, the bridge of the nose is very small while the main part looks very large. You were worried about the hands and skin texture, but I don't see any problems with them. Overall this is a very good piece. :)

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To start I really like the sculptural headpiece. I really like how black the horns are and I think the highlights look amazing. The one thing I would say is the portrait looks a little stylized but other than that I think your proportions are good. I also really like your values. For example I love how the shirt and horns are really dark and the portrait and back round is lighter. This is a really strong drawing.

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This is amazing, the shading and contrast are incredible and make it look absolutely stunning. The proportions are overall amazing, the only problem with them that I notice is that the neck seems very long. The background looks very out of place, the smoothness of the trees doesn't match the detail of the portrait and it distracts you from the portrait. The likeness is very accurate, you can easily tell what everything is and exactly how it would look in real life. The only other thing I could comment on is that you could blend the face a little more. You can see some marks left from the charcoal, other than that everything is absolutely beautiful.

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I love the contrast in this piece. The head-wear looks stunning, you did a great job on that. The portrait also looks nice, I don’t have a reference photo to compare it to but the shading looks realistic. The shading on the arm looks too flat and needs to be blended more, and I can see very harsh lines in the hair that could also use blending. Overall it’s a beautiful piece and I think you did amazing, but I agree with your statement that you may have moved onto darker materials too quickly.

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Dana for them bonus points and also because I love Mimi

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Dana for them bonus points and also because I love Mimi

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Mimi!!! This is so beautiful!! This is so amazing I am absolutely marveling!! Entirely stunned!!!!!!! Wow!!!! WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Important things should be said at least three times: wow!!!

The fabric is drawn so beautifully, the textures are all perfect and easily distinguishable. I love the expression, and the energy the background-- covered with eyes-- gives to the rest of the piece.
One thing is that maybe including part of the body could've helped see where it's grounded. However, I think that could also derive from the aesthetic and general feeling of the drawing, so I don't think that's really something to be "fixed."

I absolutely love how the shadows of the fabric fade into the pitch-black background. With the background, maybe making the eyes fade into less visibility or varying in size and randomness could help frame the figure in the center more. I love how shiny and detailed each eye is, but making them fade to be darker or lighter could really provide a sense of focus on where they're staring... could also help with the feeling of being over-pressured by everyone's eyes and expectations.

I love that you've used Ms. Apeti as your model so much as well! That's sweet. Your work is getting more and more beautiful every time I see it. I'm so proud of you, Mimi, keep up the great work! You've got so much talent and I'm overjoyed to get to see you show it off and express yourself with it.

Love, your least favourite most despised arch nemesis enemy utterly hated sophomore, Dana:)

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It looks like you struggled with drawing on black paper. My recommendation would be to really pay attention to where the highlights are in your photo and make sure you block those in. The hands look very good, you blended them well. The face sticks out to me because the shading isn’t as effective as the shading on the hands, and the face is being framed by the hands. To me the face looks like it’s made up of mostly lines when it should be shapes blocked in and then shaded.

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Let me just say, when I seen you creating this portrait and the sculptural head wear, I was amazed! It gives me a spooky vibe. I love the piece itself. I think the shading on the head wear and face looks wonderful. The proportions looks on point. The only thing that I'm going to point out is the shirt. In my point of view it looks kind of "one-toned" in my perspective. Maybe a background could have been nice to. Like if something was creeping out, but that's just me being extra of course. Overall, I think you did a magnificent job on this project and you should be proud of what you created to.

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First off, like everything you do, this is an amazing piece of artwork. I really appreciate the thought that went into the background, portrait, and the physical head wear piece. This is just a wonderful piece and you should be very proud of your work!!! Now I am not qualified to give out critiques but I would agree that the tentacles feel more drawn than observational, that being said I don't feel that it takes anything away from the piece and I really like how they look. I would also agree with you on the placement of the shed. I think it might look better if it were placed on the left side, but I mean it still looks amazing either way. For the tentacles, though I'm not going off any reference,  I think maybe you would want to add more contrast, but not unrealistically. I think that maybe having a little more texture would help it feel more realistic, but I'm not completely sure. Anyway I think this is an absolutely stunning piece of artwork and i'm in love with it!!! Great job Dana!!!

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Cece, I think your work with shadows and contrast is really captivating. The particular shadow that's above the nose draws all my attention. The flowers are also very well done, and show sharp details, but are delicate at the same time. The dramatic lighting captures a very magical feeling that pushes the idea of magical realism.
You asked about proportions and likeness, I think your likeness is really good, but I did find some differences from the reference picture and your portrait. In the picture the eyelids are just a little more closed, and in the drawing they are a little more open, which makes them seem a little too large. The nose in the photo is positioned a little bit to the left of the viewer. The left nostril is just a little smaller and the top of it is slanted in the photo, which makes the nose look like its pointing to the left, and in the drawing it just looks like it's facing straight forward. In the reference the shadow on the cheeks is less harsh and is faded downwards, which makes the cheekbones seem less high. Even with those things the likeness is still spot on.
A tip to make the drawing more dramatic would maybe be to make the shoulder and bust area a little darker so that the figure seems like they are hiding in the shadows.

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Oh my gosh Cece, this is amazing!!! The way the light source is placed just satisfies my brain. I love the vast contrast between the highlights and darkest darks. Just by looking at this piece I can immediately tell who it is. Basically to some it up, this is an amazing piece, give yourself a pat on the back girl! Now one thing I would say is the background is a little bit empty, and could use something to spice it up, and feel like with the complexity of the flowers you might want to do something more simple yet tasteful like using some mixed media type of thing. I think the portrait is definitely you, and is very accurate. There are a few spots, like the jaw on the right, where it could be a little more accurate, but I think it's really good. Great job Cece!!!

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Oh my goodness D'Saayah, this is amazing!!!! I think that the likeness in the piece is remarkable, and the actual head piece on it's own is crazy creative. This is a truly magnificent piece, you should be very proud of yourself!!! I think that hands are so hard to draw but you really managed to get the likeness down. I think that the highlights and shadows are very engaging and make the piece that much better. The only thing I would recommend would be to maybe smooth out so areas a bit more cause when using a pencil, it can come out a bit sketchy. But I would have to say this absolutely amazing, you really hit it out of the park on this one, great job!!!

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I think your portrait is really cool. The shadowing is amazing and i like how crisp the shadow is across the shirt and the cheek. The facial expression is simple but clear. I also really like your use of the charcoal to create very defined white lines and very defined black lines. The blurred shadow on the left showing the hair is a little confusing. Amazing piece.

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I really like the style of your piece, the attention to detail, and the effort. The blending and proportions within the figure look really good. The shirt just seems to disappear and I feel like there should be more to the all black parts of the clothing and face.

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Somethings that are really well done are
- how smooth the blending is throughout the drawing
-the lighting on the sweatshirt is really well done
-the lighting on the face is very light and it really adds to it

Somethings that you could do a bit better on
-the neck is possibly a bit too thick, and a little off from what a neck actually looks like
- the head, and maybe it's just the photography, but it feels like it's a little slanted
-the blending on the neck is great, but usually skin has more value and shadow, so maybe you could've given it more shadow and value

but otherwise I think it's really good, and you've done a really good job on it!

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The value for just everything is really incredible, the lines on the headwear are really accurate and so is the proportions.

The neck is really good, but the two lines on it doesn't exactly make much sense, maybe blending a bit more could maybe make it look more real.

Its looks very good though, the despite the neck, but I think it's still very good, the blending is very well done, and the background is amazing and it gives off firefly vibes.