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Writing Strengths:

Topic Sentence was clear and strongly sets up the paragraph to come.

Concrete Details that were firmly blended and cited and relevant to the paragraph.

The analysis of my paragraph was thorough and supported my points through evidence and commentary.

Areas of Improvement:

Analysis need to be more clear and detailed to the reader.

Cited details need to be more analyzed and elaborated on.

Cited details need to be more blended into the paragraph.

As a writer, I see that I have a lot to improve on. Also, I always try to see how I can make my writing better in any way, from the vocabulary I use to the analysis of evidence. The image of the unfinished puzzle represents my writing skills and of how it is not yet mastered. Each time I write, I strive to fit another piece into the puzzle till the puzzle is finished.

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Strengths
- Good topic sentence
- Strong, solid evidence that supports the claim
- Good summary

Weaknesses
- Too many unnecessary words/sentences
- Grammar needs work
- Wrong font
- Needs more analysis

I think i've always been a pretty average writer. I always liked writing, it was just fun for me. But the older I get the less fun it turns out to be. There's a lot of stuff to pay attention to now, like formats, fonts, sizes, and certain ways you have to write. I haven't really been paying attention to these and kind of doing my own thing, and it shows in the TKAM Pivotal Moment Paragraph.

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strengths:

strong claim

good analysis of the prompt.

weaknesses:

avoid slang

include all syntax present tense

Not going to lie but I don't really see myself as a "strong" writer because I struggle with coming up with ideas to write. But I think I can get better by practicing and not procrastinating as much. I chose this picture because it's literally me at home trying to finish all my journal entries so I can watch Netflix all day.

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Strengths
- Strong, solid evidence that supports the claim
- Good quote blending

Weaknesses
- Too many unnecessary words

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Strengths
- Topic sentence had a strong, arguable claim that set up the paragraph
- Paragraph had a good analysis of the prompt, and had clear evidence and commentary

Weaknesses
- Paragraphs need smoother beginnings and blending
- More clarity is needed regarding the theme of each quote

I've never really seen myself as that great of a writer. I always think that I know exactly what to say in my head, but when I put it down onto paper it always just sounds sloppy and thrown together. I feel like one thing that I could really improve on is making everything flow better from quote to explanation.

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Strengths

1. Strong claim

2. Good analysis of the prompt

Weaknesses

1. Details are not blended into the paragraph

2. Needs to connect to the theme more

I see myself as a pretty decent writer. I am not the best but not the worst. I need to work harder on getting the right details to use. I also see myself as a slow writer. I second guess myself all the time so I backtrack a lot.  I feel like my writing is like a construction site. It has a strong base but the details are off.

Strengths

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Strengths:
-Good quote blending
-Clear topic sentence that    provides good enough leverage for the prompt

Weaknesses:
-Missing concrete details within the paragraph
-Too many grammar errors

I've honestly never seen myself as a good writer in general, and that's a problem I'm willing to improve upon to any extent and this was a very good learning curve for me. I have the ideas, but am never really able to put them together well.

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2 Writing Strengths:

Strong Claim

Good attempt at blending sentences

2 Writing Areas of Needed Improvement:

Avoid slang and fix syntax errors

Need to explain more

As a writer I often try to be entertaining and involve my reader but I do get relaxed and informal about it as I go through writing. Sometimes I also don’g go into detail well but all of it is an attempt and I experiment with my writing often. It is always changing and I sometimes make mistakes on the way that is why my picture is a kid with his experiment blown in his face because my writing is truly an experiment that will often go wrong and my grade may explode in my face.

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Strengths:
-Blending of the subject
-Clear and concise arguable claim
Weakness's:
-Quote blending
-Lack of explanation

I think that my statement of my claim is done very well but i could definitely work on my blending of quotes and making it seem less choppy and more smooth when I add and then explain a quote. Speaking of explanations I think that I could do a much better job of explaining what i'm talking about and completely conveying my ideas to the reader. And finally i think that using the before mentioned ideas and tools I can expand my writing ability.

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Strengths
topic sentence/ claim
commentary

weaknesses
blending quotes
grammar and mechanics

I think that as a writer i can give good claims and topics to talk about, but really being able to support it is more difficult. Writing is not one of my strongest subjects, but if I keep on practicing, I think I can become a better writer.

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2 Writing Strengths:

Strong Claim that responds to all parts of the prompt and strongly sets up paragraph.

Excellent analysis that shows how and why my quotes represent the pivotal moment I chose.

2 Writing Areas Needing Improvement:

Need better quote blending for it to flow better and sound less awkward.

Need to write every thing in present tense and use better grammar.

As a writer I see myself as someone who struggles to put what I am thinking into words. I often have trouble thinking of how to make my writing flow. Specifically, I need to practice on my quote blending. With practice I can get better and feel confident about my writing.

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Strengths:
1. I came off at the start with a strong claim and supported it throughout the paragraph with my analysis and commentary.
2. I blended my quotes in smoothly along with details about them.
Weaknesses:
1. I mess up all the different tenses like past tense and present tense.
2. I had grammar errors and added letter to words that didn't need any extra letters.

I see myself as a writer who messes up when I first start writing, but when I get into it I can make something good. And after that I can polish it up by editing it and make it even better. So I'm like these polished and colorful rocks because what I create doesn't look amazing at the start, but will look better after some editing and changing.

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Strengths:
-I can articulate ideas for topics
-I can also blend quotes well
Weaknesses:
-hard to make sentences flow
-grammer
I see myself as a mediocre writer. I can see and have an idea on how I want to write the paragraph but I'm not so well with making it flow and connect with each sentence.

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strengths:
-good quote blending
-solid overall conclusion paragraph
weaknesses:
-explain more in depth
-use of words were off
I see my writing as very organized and planned out. I try my best to use more challenging words rather than words like "things" or "stuff". Sometimes the words I use are put into sentences incorrectly, which I need to work on. I also see my writing as very creative and in dept with the topic, it's just i don't always back up my reasons as strongly.

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strengths: stated claim clearly and blended details well

weaknesses: making a relation between quotes and writing and some capitalization errors

I don't really see myself as a writer. Typically it's easy for me to go with the flow and write, but sometimes it can be tough to really support my claim. I also am not usually very thorough with my writing so when I am done, I am done.

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Horrid, Below average, Why am I in honors

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Horrid, Below average, Why am I in honors

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strengths:
~Strong claims
~ great quote blending

Areas of improvement: My main area of improvement is how I word my sentences. My sentences are wonky and get spurred out, rambling when i'm supposed to write longer. Another area of improvement is the way I barely use quotes for the sake of finding where they are, I don't put down the page or paragraph.

I don't see myself as a serious writer in any shape or form, my sentences are too short rather than the dragged out with many details having symbolism thrown everywhere so that ELA teacher can sing kumbaya around it. I am just a average freshman writer

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2 strengths:
~had evidence to support my claim
~quotes blended into the rest of the paragraph
2 weaknesses:
~wrote in 3rd POV and used "normal" language
~commentary made sense for most part but got confusing in places

I see myself as a consistent writer who writes the same but has very different themes. I write about my experiences and real things that happened. I'm not a fictional person and would rather be vulnerable with my stories. The crazy image represents my urge to be crazy yet consistent. I want things to blend but not like how you would think it should be.

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2 Strengths:
- Strong Claim. I felt as though my claim was strong and arguable.
- Good quote bonding. The sentences between quotes flowed well with my paragraph.

2 Non-Strengths
- I need more clarity for my quotes. Sometimes the quotes I choose don't make sense.
- Better commentary. I need to do a better job of explaining why I used that quote.

Myself as a writer:
I don't see myself as a good writer. My vocabulary is basic and my writing is very weak. I am mediocre at best, like squidward playing the clarinet. His game could definitely improve, but he is a below average performer. My writing is okay, but it could definitely improve in many ways.

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Strengths:
- My topic sentence was strong and intriguing. It helped support my claim as well as the prompt.
- Topic sentence helped set up for a strong argument.
Weaknesses:
- Need some work with quote integration and commentary after the quote.
- I need to do a better job with my grammar and word use. Use larger words instead of smaller, bland words.

Overall, I see myself as an okay writer and need to do better every time. I need to use better vocabulary and less run-on sentences. I also need to use less first person words like "I" and "You". I feel like I feel like I do a good job planning it out and make it sound good before I write it but it doesn't end up the way I wanted it to be. I just need to work on my grammar and shorter, get strait to the point, sentences. I chose a mountain because my writing usually starts out sounding good. I then try to put it together and it doesn't work out that well.

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Strengths:
1. Good at making analysis points
2. Had a good, strong, arguable claim
Weaknesses:
1. I need to quote blend more better
2. I need to improve on grammar and mechanics
Description:
As I writer I feel like I'm very good at it, but I have my weaknesses towards some stuff. I always reread my writing to make sure it's good. The only thing I really need to work on is quote blending and just common grammar and mechanics.

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Strengths:
1. Presented a strong and clear argument.
2. I think my topic sentence was the best sentence of my paragraph. It was clear, concise, and compelling.
3. I used stronger and better vocabulary and replaced those words that have no or less meaning.

Weaknesses
1. Most of my sentences could've been stronger and more grammatically correct.
2. I hope to improve my ability of integrating quotes into my paragraph, so it doesn't seem as choppy.
3. I had a lot of run-on sentences. I need to learn how to break up the sentences so they seem smoother in transition.

As a writer, I don't think I am very good at it. I think after a while, its hard for me to continue making changes and edits to my paragraph, and many mistakes are overlooked and possible edits that would improve my paragraph are missed. I think for me, when I write, I need to start it early, so I have time to review and edit my document. I think I prefer more simple straightforward thinking instead of writing.

I chose this image, because writing is sometimes very consuming, and I often have to take breaks or do something else to take my mind off of writing.

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Writing Strengths
-included quotes that go with the claim
-Gave an arguable claim
Weaknesses
-Don't give enough explanation on commentary
-grammar errors

I wouldn't see myself being a good writer because my writing weaknesses are an important part in writing. I'm not great at writing paragraphs that need evidence and including facts.

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Writing Strengths

Very strong claim that responds to all parts of the prompt

Clear commentary for quotes that shows how it is relevant to the topic

Areas of Improvement

Blending between commentary and quotes need to be smoother

Need more of an explanation in some of the commentary

Need to pay more attention to the small details

Overall, I feel like I'm a decent writer. My paragraph was not too much of a headache to read, which is pretty good. My thesis was very strong, but the rest of the paragraph was lacking. This made the build up of the thesis seem to lead to nothing so I really need to work on making the actual meat and potatoes of the paragraph stronger. I also need to pay attention to the small details, as I tend to work really fast to just get it over with and those simple mistakes always get me at the end. This paragraph wasn't really my best writing piece but I can only go up from here

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Strengths :
1. Hook sentence is good
2. Closing Sentence
Weaknesses:
1. I need better quotes
2. Grammar wasn't great
3. Some of my sentences were to long

As a writer I feel like I have some good ideas, but I have trouble translating it to the paragraph.

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STRENGTHS:
- Made a good claim in my topic sentence
- My overall analysis was not bad
WEAKNESSES:
- My grammar wasn't as good as it typically is
- I need to work on quote blending

Overall, I don't think this paragraph is a very good portrayal of what I am capable of writing. I think that because this was a paragraph and not an essay, I was too afraid of being too detailed, which resulted in me not providing enough context and analysis in my paragraph. I also feel like I should work more on being less literal in my writing and being more metaphorical. I will take everything I learned from this assignment and I will put it to use in future writing projects.

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Strengths:
- Strong use of words and meaning when analyzing and commentating.
-Great summing up of the paragraph and closing sentence

Weaknesses:
- Need to work on blending my quotes in with the rest of my commentary
- I need to stop using to many words and rambling on in order to keep the writing more brief and to the point.

In my eyes, I see myself as a writer who is always wanting to put in extra detail and explain as much possible. Although this could be positive, it also could result in run-on sentences and complication in a simple topic. I need to know where and when to add detail, and remember not to fix what isn't broken.

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Strengths:
My thesis statement was strong and said all I needed to say.

I chose impressive vocabulary to use.

Weaknesses:
I have to watch out for mistakes, such as misspelled words or punctuation errors. :)

I need to make sure I write in present tense and remember not to talk in the second person.

I think I am capable of writing clearly and to the point, but there are a few things I need to work on to improve. Such as staying on topic and using better concrete details. I think an image that would represent my writing abilities would be a block of raw wood because with some shaping and sanding, my writing will be the best it can possibly be.

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My topic wasn't the best, and I feel like I could've expanded on my ideas better. Also, I need to be responsible, and take my time in order to make it that much better. But, my hook, or my opening paragraph, was solid. Lastly, I think my quotes that I chose were okay.

I see that my writing isn't the best, and that there is plenty of room for improvement.

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2 writing strengths I have:

Gives lots of details and examples

Great, captivating topic sentence(s)

Excellent blending of the concrete details

Fantastic writing analysis

2 needed areas of improvement:

Needs to include all syntax present tense in essay

A few grammar mistakes

I see myself as a very descriptive writer. I paint a clear picture for my reader to envision in their minds, letting them get creative, but they still get the main point I’m trying to get across. I hook my readers by my topic sentences and I make them want to keep reading more. When I imagine my writing, I think of a puzzle. My writing all fits together perfectly and they create a beautiful picture when they’re finished.

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2 Writing Strengths:

I had a strong analysis that supported my thesis and created a good argument

I also had a strong concluding sentence that clearly wrapped up my argument

2 Areas of Improvement:

I have to remember to stay in present tense

I need to avoid writing in 2nd person

I feel that as a writer, I am direct but also descriptive. I can get straight to the point of an essay, but still include details that support my writing. I also feel that my writing can get better. I've been working on stopping my habit of going back and forth between past and present tense since 5th grade and now, when I look over my writing, I can usually find most of my errors. This flower represents my writing because it is still growing, but very pretty, just like how my writing is pretty good, but can still improve.

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Writing Strengths
1. I was able to choose two quotes from the book which strongly supported my argument and were cited correctly.
2. The commentary following my quotes gave a clear explanation as to how they support my topic sentence. It helped in creating a strong argument.

Areas of Improvement
1. In my paragraph, I need to improve on language, grammar, and mechanics.
2. I had a couple of syntax errors and repetition of certain phrases.

As a writer, I think I am a bit of a perfectionist. I like to proofread my work again and again to make sure that I have done my best. I also check my grammar and spelling to see if everything is done correctly and that my sentences make sense. I always think that my writing needs to be perfect and I think I can catch all my mistakes, even though sometimes I don't.

This picture represents how meticulous I am with my writing. Like cleaning a window, you'd think it looks fine, but there's always one more smudge that you could wipe away, one that you originally didn't see before.

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Writing strengths:
-Topic sentence is clear and gives an arguable claim
-Included two concrete quotes that back up my claim

Writing weaknesses:
-Needs more commentary to support my quotes
-I wrote some of my essay in second person

As a writer, I think I have lots of room to improve and I should continue to practice. I need to work on using better details to support my claim or quotes and using correct grammar. I've come a long way since elementary school and I am proud of the progress I've made.

My picture shows that my writing is kind of sloppy and needs some cleaning.

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2 Writing Strengths:

My topic sentence sets up my writing well

I use pretty good vocabulary and stay in third person view

2 Writing Weaknesses:

Writing quotes are not        blended well and do not   go with my claim

Do not have good commentary in my paragraphs

As a writer I see that I have to improve a lot. I need to hone my skills on many things because my writing is left unsupported and does not have good commentary and quotes. I feel that I am bad at writing right now but have a lot of time to improve. My writing starts off strong with my topic but then starts to fall off in the end.

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my writing strengths
1. I had good strong quotes that backed up the thesis statement.
2. My transition words were fantastic.
My weaknesses
1. I need stronger quote blending
2. A better analysis to back up my thesis.
As a writer I think I am okay. when I write on my own time I think I can do better. I need to be able to back up my thesis statement with good quotes and a good transition to blend it in. I used this picture to show that I need to be able to blend in quotes into my essays and that I can use transition words to blend in certain passages.

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2 Writing Strengths:

Strong, concise claim that clearly conveys the prompt and my thoughts.

The analysis of my paragraph was thorough and clear, ending with a strong concluding sentence

2 Writing Areas of Needed Improvement:

I need to focus on my punctuation consistency throughout my paragraph. And must make sure all writing is in present tense.

Create a smoother blend between my quotes and my explanations.

Overall I see myself as a writer who writes straight to the point. I try to clearly state I my claim and back it up with evidence. Next time, I do need to make sure I check closely every single word in my writing to make sure everything is correct. But, I think something that represents my writing is clear water, because it is clear and you can see through it well.

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Two strengths I demonstrated throughout my paragraph was the ability of blending quotes and commentary analysis. Two areas I needed improvement in was writing in present tense and grammar errors. I view myself as a writer who focus's on details but has a hard time with punctuation/grammar. I also think my writing can be stronger and is a future goal of mine.
I chose this picture because as a writer I focus on details that can make my claim stronger.

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-Three Strengths I displayed when writing about to Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee would be that I did my topic sentence, grammar, and general size correct for my essay, I like to think I was clear and responded to the prompt without many grammar mistakes, and without it being too long or short.
-Three weaknesses I displayed however was my work was a little wordy, along with me overstated my topics too much, and improper blending of my quotes, which were the weakest parts of my essay, and I need to work on improving.
-As a writer I see myself as good at writing broad, academic, and independent papers such as declarations, reasons being that I can write easily and effectively about a subject, especially without the need to add in quotes, with my strengths explaining myself well and my weakness of being too wordy being a benefit to writing a big document.
-I chose this image because im good at writing declarations and that's my face when i have to write something

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Writing strengths:
-Strong claims
-Explanations for each quote within the paragraph.
-Paragraph shows a good supporting argument throughout the argument.
Weaknesses:
-Concrete details need to be more blended
-Essay is written mostly in third person
I feel that I am more of free writer that goes all over the place, and kind of lead off the topic with another another statement that is in't related. Otherwise a drifting writer, I can focus on a topic for atleast two sentences then go to something else. The picture i put repersents a concrete writer that I wish to be rather than what I am now.

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Writing Strengths

Clear and easy to understand topic sentence

concrete details

academic language

grammar and mechanical

concluding sentence

Weaknesses

Commentary needs more explanation

More clarity

I feel I am a big-picture writer. This means that I look at the essay as a whole instead of all the little details. I focus more on the general idea(s) of the paragraph instead of the smaller details. The picture I chose was a picture of a puzzle. I chose this because just like in my writing instead of seeing the individual pieces I see the overall picture.

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Writing Strengths:
- Clear and arguable claim
- Good commentary for each quotation

Areas of Improvement
- Smoother quote blending. There seems to be a lack of that in my essay.
-  Improve minor grammatical errors (tense)
- condense the conclusion into one sentence
- Less wordiness and more clarity

I feel that I am a more detail-oriented writer. I often overthink a lot about even the most tiny details, which in some cases can lead to some pretty good arguments but in other cases can lead to wordiness. I chose this picture of a magnifying glass to show how I focus on the small details.

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Strengths
- Topic sentence gives a clear and arguable claim that responds to all parts of the prompt.
- The concluding  sentence shows a good analysis of the prompt question and of the text.

Weaknesses
-  The blending of the quotes is weak and the commentary afterwards need more connection to argument
- Grammar needs work

As a writer, I'm pretty mediocre. I typically will make a rough draft, but well end up scraping it and just write whatever goes in and out of my head. This leads to my writing having bad flow and blending. Since I go pretty fast, I also make a ton of grammar mistakes. Since my thought process is pretty random, I never give very thorough commentary because I just end  up jumping to another topic too fast. My writings usually end up reading like a rant more than a structured paragraph / essay.

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2 Writing Strengths:

Strong, succinct claim (thesis) that fully addressed the prompt

Thorough commentary explanations and analysis that connected text evidence to claim.

2 Writing Areas of Needed Improvement:

Need smoother quote blending that includes plot context to introduce the quote

Need strong concluding sentences that wrap up my analysis points

I see myself as a meticulous writer who always checks and re-checks that all of my points all fully analyzed and explained to back up my original claim (thesis). This rock wall image represents what I want my ideal essay to look like: all the pieces (claim, text evidence, and commentary/analysis) fit seamlessly together to fully answer the prompt.