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Strong thesis with strong body paragraph topics. They used good proof by choosing specific examples that relate directly to their ideas. It was straightforward and clear what the message was that they were tying to get across to the reader. I liked how they didn’t jump around too much in terms of the topic between each body paragraph. Instead of switching themes, they used 3 different people that related to the same thing, gift giving. It was well rounded, and well written.

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I think the essay was well put together with a strong thesis and got the point across very well, the writer did a very good job of point, proof, explain for each point made.

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The Pure Evil and Cunning Villain in Amy Dunne.

To essay is to try, and that is exactly what the author of this has done. In most regards they succeeded. They have a solid thesis (stating that Amy Dunne is one of the most evil villains) and they do a good job at bringing forward specific evidence to prove their point. They also are obviously a strong writer as is seen when they say "Amy never truly liked Noelle, but that did not defer her undeniable charm from wrapping Noelle around her finger." I think their use of the word defer here is strong and concise while catching the attention of the reader. However there are a few areas where this essay could be improved... Their in text citation of an article on psychopathy vs sociopathy is not up MLA standards. They also depend rather heavily on formulaic transitions "to begin" and "furthermore". These are used in excess and give the essay a flat and composed air. They also have a bit of an issue in their conclusion, ". Knowing that someone appearing as

normal as Amy Dunne can truly be one of the most evil villains, it strikes a thought; are the people around us really as innocent as they show? It would be better to end this with us rather than show. They also need to fix that last sentence as it is not good English.

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Essay number 4 is strong because it clearly explains how rumors and accusations affect Gatsby’s life, step by step. It uses strong examples from the text to support each point and stays focused on the main idea. The essay is easy to follow, it starts with small rumors at Gatsby’s parties, shows how they grow into serious accusations, and ends with how they ruin his reputation and lead to his death.

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The essay had a super strong hook, and the writer of this essay continues to hold a readers interest throughout the essay. They do this by making interesting references and not writing too heavily. The thesis statement is also something a lot of people can probably relate to and the argument is very agreeable.

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This essay had a strong thesis statement, and strong quotes to back up their ideas. Each body paragraph had multiple points to back up their opinion, and each one of those points were backed with strong relevant quotes.

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The essay had a very captivating hook and a clear thesis. The writer did a good job of making a claim, and then giving evidence to support that claim and explaining it. Also, the writer asked the audience questions throughout the essay and answered them immediately after. The writer added many quotes and a few statistics to give evidence of their statement. At the end, and throughout the essay, the writer cited their sources to support their argument.

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This essay was well organized - each paragraph had a strong (if a bit abrupt) introduction and followed the "point, proof, explain" form very clearly. There were many examples given from the text, with clear explanation of how each one applies to the topic of the essay. It was also worded in a way that connects personally with the reader, which kept the essay engaging despite its length.

The introductory paragraph was also quite strong with an engaging hook and a clear thesis.

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Strong thesis statement, vocabulary and arguments. Supported by text with multiple quotes. Overall it is a strong essay, one criticism would be it describes her the same way multiple times and feels somewhat repetitive at times.

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Forgive me, Leonard Peacock essay. Good use of quotes to emphasize points. Body paragraphs are straightforward and the point comes across. However, the opening paragraph and the ending seem to contradict each other and it is unsure if Leonard passed away or is still alive.

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This essay had a complex thesis statement that immediately hooked me into their content. They displayed numerous quotes to back up there topic statements and kept me engaged as a reader.

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The introduction paragraph was nicely done. The writer had a strong hook and used well known characters as examples. Their thesis was strong.

Their body paragraphs were also done really well, utilizing many examples and quotes.

Additionally, the vocabulary the writer used took the essay up a level.

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This essay has a clear focused thesis. It starts with a main argument a claim that the entire essay builds toward and supports. It gives the essay direction and helps the reader understand what to expect

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Their writing was very descriptive and the thesis was good because what they were arguing was clearly stated. They also had a pretty good hook. For every point they made they made sure to back it up with a quote from the book and also explained the relevance of the the quote they used.

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Essay number 2 has a very strong topic which is very well carried and strong throughout it. The argument has good side proof within each section and each point has great backup alongside it for better understanding. They did a very good job getting their point across making it a very great starter essay to look at. The writer also added a lot of strong quotes as well including the numbers beside it which is good for people who may have the copy. Lastly, this essay has a very strong concluding paragraph talking about how strong the friendship and relations were throughout the book.

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Essay 1:

In the opening of the essay the writer starts with a thesis that is pretty solid making it clear that Amy is one of the most evil villains of all time. In this essay the writer makes some good connections to other fiction villains such as pennywise and Voldemort.

The body paragraph were descriptive with point, proof, explain.

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I thought that the author had a very strong hook, as well as good vocabulary. I was interested in the essay at first. Though, as I read more of the essay, I lost the interest. It feels like the author repeats the same couple of sentences throughout the whole thing. Each body paragraph covers one very similar topic. Rather than covering three smaller topics. Changing the subject only very slightly. They always have to refer to the fact that “accusations kill”. I feel that they would have benefited from choosing a topic that was more diverse. It feels like the author is talking about something that only happens in the first body in the entire essay. Overall, it was well written, but there needs to be more diversity in what the person writes about. In addition, the quotes were very good.

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for my essay I decided to pick #4, in this essay about "the great Gatsby" the writer does an excellent job by making events such as jays death, they didn't sugar code it but they more so explained it in a way where it is still respectful but they also get their point across as they are not over explaining but they are simply explaining what happens in the story. I found when reading this essay that the writer was very clear with their vocabulary and how they were writing this essay, with that being said the writer made it very easy to understand the point they were trying to get across ( how rumours effect people and how they resulted in serious actions) I also found their conclusion to be very well written as the grammar is advanced, the writing flows and they tend to be clear with their ideas.

one thing that really stood out to me in their essay was " its not so easy to realize that these same things happen in our every day reality" I like the way they added this into it because it really stood out to me because not only did they get their point across they put information to make their text stronger.

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The essay was structured well with each paragraph flowing into the next, with everything connecting back to the main idea of the importance of adult figures in a child’s life. They integrated quotes successfully to back up each of their ideas. The additional research and statistics really adds to the depth of the essay and further proves the point of the essay. As well as the metaphor of the baby tomato plant and the cage. One thing i noticed was the self contradiction on page two. The beginning of the essay talks about how kids will basically fail in life without an adult mentor but then the quote added contradicted this “But somehow I pulled myself

together. I started talking again, went back to school, and an extremely relieved Linda left me alone once more." That is the one thing I can criticize.

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The writer has made it very clear explaining all the points that make Amy dune evil and the why behind it all. There were some parts that were repetitive and could’ve used more evidence from the text but the conclusion was written very smooth and concise. - Bessie

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This essay was a clear example of how a strong outline helps. The essay builds upon each point and as it goes gets clearer to the reader. The opening was relatable talking about other more popular villains. -Trinity

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This essay had a strong thesis letting the reader know that Amy Dune "is one of the most evil and cunning fiction villains of all time". They did very well on their body paragraphs and making great connections. There was a bit of repetition but it was well done.