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please now go the "Essay Writing" folder near the top of this vUWS page to access the new padlet (discussion boxes) for your Assessment 3 Essay. All Assessment 3 Essay related questions will be answered there. This "Paraphrasing Practice" padlet will no longer be checked as your Paraphrasing assessment is now complete, but it will stay on this vUWS site until the end of semester.
Mandy (PCALS)

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I am currently paraphrasing 'patient centred care' extract.  I know we need to write in our own words could you please clarify if i need to re word the part which says underpinned principles 'empathy, dignity, autonomy, respect, choice and transparency'.  Im just a little confused are these principles that cannot be changed as it is a fact or am i supposes to change each of these words?
thanks

Hi there

Words such as 'empathy, dignity, autonomy, respect and transparency' are technical and do not need to be changed. However, you will need to find another synonym for 'choice', as it is not a technical word.

Suzanne (PCALS)

Ok thanks

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can I post my extract here?
Hi there,

You need to post your student number and name with every post.

With regard to your question, I would strongly advise you against posting your extract here as other students will be able to view your extract. If you have specific questions about the paraphrase, you can post your queries here.

Suzanne (PCALS)

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Also last tips or advice I should work on and apply for my assignment  besides attending PCAL Worshop?

Hi Sam,
In addition to the workshops you should make a 1-1 appointment with a PCAL staff member, for any further proof-reading. We can help with the writing, structuring and grammar; your tutors are available to assist with the content of the assessments.
Best of luck with your semester.

Regards
Katherine [PCALs]

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My question is for Assignment 2 are we allowed to use the following

"1,2 and 3 person", "referencing just Author and Date" , phrases to make a list "To begin with... and then ... finally", Conclusion , pronouns , nouns,verbs , adjective , Generalize a phrase , and Cohesive and coherent ?

Hi Sam
I think you are referring to a range of questions: writing and referencing questions. Please explain more clearly. Remember for all referencing questions you  need to ask the Library staff
Regards
Katherine

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Thanks for that feedback! I couldn't make it to the workshop so I just needed to know if I was on the right track.  I will work on incorporating the dot points because I was struggling a little bit with that.  :)

Some of the dot points cover similar ideas so you can combine them into compound sentences and the use of transition words such as:  in addition, furthermore, moreover, consequently.....  will aid in cohesion.  Good luck with your work!

Laurine PCALS

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Can I get the PICALS email address

I am from Hawksburry campus. please
Dear Nagendra,

The PCALS eamil address for Hawkesbury campus is:
NM_Hawkesbury_Literacy_Tutors@westernsydney.edu.au

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Hi Laurine,

Yes I would still like to zoom if that's okay.  My class finishes at 1 then I will log on.

Sofia,

Having verified with a colleague, we are not allowed to view your paraphrased extracts as a whole, only a few sentences from each one so if you would like to send through some to see if you are on track I will be happy to view that  on Padlet with any questions you have regarding paraphrasing..
Laurine (PCALS)

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Hi, just needing some feedback for my extract 3 paraphrasing.  The padlet won't won't allow me to attach a file Can we ZOOM at 1?

Sofia,

If you still want to Zoom please let me know.
Laurine (PCALS

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Dear Student,

I am sorry but we are not allowed to do that.  Did you go to any of the workshops?  The PCAL staff could have looked to see if you were on the right track there.  If you have specific questions at the moment please write them on Padlet and I will address them.
Laurine (PCALS)

More information:  Parramatta Campus is conducting workshops today at 1:00 in EA.1.29 and tomorrow at the same time in EA.1.33  Laurine (PCALS)

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Hi, How do I make an appointment to go over my essay ?
Thanks

Dear Lisa,

Just email a PCAL staff on your campus for a 1:1 appointment.  I assume you are talking about the Structured Essay which is due on the 17th of April for the Professional Communication Unit?
Laurine (PCALS

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Patient quality care ensure patient to care in a safe environment which includes good communication skills in order to overcome challenging situation. Does it make sense.HiNagendra,

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Patient quality care ensure patient to care in a safe environment which includes good communication skills in order to overcome challenging situation. Does it make sense.HiNagendra,

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Normally we write: Quality patient care ensures patients are cared for  in a safe environment.
I'd probably end the sentence there as the next part of your idea doesn't really fit with the first part.
Mandy (PCALS)
You can post more, but the next tutor will be online to answer tomorrow at 12pm Thanks.

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Hi How can I use onine PICALS . Please. I am writting whether it makes sence or not please i would like to requst you to check and give me feedback on it.   Patient quality care ensure patient to care in a safe environment which includes good communication skills in order to overcome challenging situation. Does it make sense.

Hi, as an undergraduate student, the only online support we can currently offer is here through this padlet you have just written on, so you are in the right place :)We ask that you write your student number and first name please, followed by any question you have. Or, you could paste here a couple of your sentences from your paraphrasing practice for us to check the grammar/does it make sense (please do not paste whole paragraphs).
PCAL Staff are online during the following times for real-time feedback:
Mondays               12:00 to 13:30

Wednesdays         12:00 to 13:30

Thursdays             12:00 to 13:30
During these times, you could also have a ZOOM meeting (a face-to-face online meeting like facetime or skype) if you or the PCAL Support staff suggest it. Instructions on how to use ZOOM are below this padlet at the bottom of this page. You can also post a question here outside of the times above, but it will be answered at the next regular session above (NOTE: these sessions are not run during the breaks).
NOTE: PCAL Online Collaborative Support is only available during the semester period

Mandy (PCALS)

I have expected some feed back from the top sentence.
thanks

Hi Nagendra,
I reposted your sentence in another box on this Padlet last week with my name mandy_salas on top, with suggestions for your sentence underneath. I'm sorry you didn't see it- I should have posted my suggestion in this box for you to find it more easily.
Mandy Salas (PCALS)

Can I have Pcals  email; address please

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Hi, how can I practice paraphrasing and get feedback in return? Thanks :)
Hi Jam,
In terms of getting feedback, you could go to one of the PCALS workshops and get some feedback there (time-permitting as the workshop content will also need to be covered if students other than first years are there) or during tutorial visits when PCALS pop by this week. You could ask your tutor for some feedback. You could also post here on the padlet a few sentences or so and we can give you some feedback here on your grammar/structure/does it make sense (please don't post your whole paragraph here though).
How to practise?:1.Read each extract a few times until you feel you understand the main points, 2.make notes in your own words of important points,3. organise/order your notes logically (the ideas you noted down do not have to necessarily follow the same order as the original extract/group similar ideas together), and 4.write a 200 word paragraph from the notes you have written.5. Compare your paragraph to the original extract (hold them side by side) to make sure your paraphrase contains all the main ideas as the original, but does not look the same. Also check you haven't added any extra ideas that are your ideas and not ideas from the extract-leave these out.  **PTime yourself at home- set the clock for 30min and leave yourself a few minutes at the end to check your handwiting is legible/spelling/grammar.
**Practise the same procedure for all 3 extracts because we don't know which one you will get on exam day

Mandy (PCALS)

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Can I get the link for slide about paraphrasing?
Hi Aditya,
click on the slideshow below. Also, there are more slideshows/videos about paraphrasing if you scroll to the top of this vUWS page, and also if you go to PCALS side tab on the left of this screen called "PCAL Skills WORKSHOPS", and in there click on the "Academic Writing" folder: there are 3 more slideshows on paraphrasing there (Please note- no in-text citations/referencing is needed in your in-class paraphrasing test next week).
You will also find the slideshow from the workshop in the left side tab "PCAL Support for UNITS" in the Professional Communication folder there, and at the top of this page.
Mandy (PCALS)

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Its 18621437 Ayush how to paraphrase bullets points

With paraphrasing you cannot use bullet points, you need to put your ideas into complete sentences
Katherine PCALs
Hi Ayush,
Dot point information can be used as examples of concepts earlier in the extract eg. Nurses must communicate clearly and effectively with patients, for example, when delivering test results and...
You can also perhaps combine ideas from two or more dot points into one sentence.
Mandy (PCALS)

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just to double check, there is a workshop on wednesday at 12 pm-1 pm right for this week??
thank you

it is 11-12pm. Katherine PCALs

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in paraphrasing, if there's a dot point, we can exclude some of them right? and also I've done my 1 and 2 extract, can you help me to check if i'm on the right track?? thank you

Hi Leoni
For your paraphrasing you do not use dot points/bullet points at all. You can come to our writing workshops advertised on vUWS to have your drafts looked at this week otherwise we are visiting the tutorials this week too
Katherine (PCALS)

Hi Leoni,
include all the information from the dot points you feel is important. Dot point information can be used as examples of concepts earlier in the extract eg. Nurses must communicate clearly and effectively with patients, for example, when delivering test results and...
You can also perhaps combine ideas from two or more dot points into one sentence. Do remember to always write in full sentences. You will need to be selective when choosing all the main ideas to paraphrase as some of the extracts are much longer than 200 words and you can only write 200 words in your exam. Try not to repeat yourself (write the same ideas more than once).
Mandy (PCALS)

hello, just to double check, there is a workshop on wednesday at 12 pm-1 pm right for this week??
thank you

Yes it is 12-1pm this Wednesday
Cheers
Katherine [PCALs]

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Hello, i was just wondering when i complete my extracts would you be able to check it for me and give me feedback? can i come and see you anytime?

Hi Mai
Please see the Writing workshops timetable when you can have your extracts looked over otherwise PCAL Staff are visiting the tutorials this week to look over any drafts
Katherine PCALs

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in paraphrasing, if there's a dot point, we can exclude some of them right? and also I've done my 1 and 2 extract, can you help me to check if i'm on the right track?? thank you

Hi Leoni,
include all the information from the dot points you feel is important. Dot point information can be used as examples of concepts earlier in the extract eg. Nurses must communicate clearly and effectively with patients, for example, when delivering test results and...
You can also perhaps combine ideas from two or more dot points into one sentence. Do remember to always write in full sentences. You will need to be selective when choosing all the main ideas to paraphrase (including from the dot points) as some of the extracts are much longer than 200 words and you can only write 200 words in your exam. Try not to repeat yourself (write the same ideas more than once).
Mandy (PCALS)

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Please follow instructions that follow this padlet which includes a meeting ID number when staff are on.

Laurine  PCALS

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I have bad hand writing skills so I want to improve my writing skill is there a workshop I can attend?

Yes, consult the PCALS Workshops tab on vUWS to find out when they are being held on your campus.

Laurine PCALS

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What is the best way to time manage my studies?

Perhaps you should talk to a mentor or a student who has been here a year or so to find out some strategies but a timeline of when assessments/assignments are due is always useful.

Laurine PCALS

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How to connect all paragraph

Please come to PCALS writing workshops which will cover cohesive words to link paragraphs.

Laurine PCALS

In addition some examples of cohesive devices or transition words are: on the other hand, as a result, consequently, nevertheless, therefore, thus, however, on the contrary, furthermore...

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HI! Could you please give some examples about common mistakes in paraphrasing.

Please view PCALS slideshows relating to paraphrasing which are posted on vUWS.  Paraphrasing too close to the original text is often the problem.

Laurine  PCALS
Hi Michelle,
Michael asked the same question in an earlier post below- take a look at my response in his post.
Mandy (PCALS)

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I want to pass this unit so what is the best way to effectively pass this unit?

Please attend all tutorials and workshops to gather the correct information.  Ask questions as well.

Laurine PCALS

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How can I know the difference between specialised words and key words?

Please attend all workshops on paraphrasing and view the PCALS slideshows.  In a nutshell specialised words are those that are more technical that nurses use such as the names of diseases while key words can be verbs or nouns that you can find synonyms for.

Laurine PCAL

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Rama lamichhane

How can I understand which is key word to paraphrasing
Key words are words that can be changed such as verbs.  Specialised words are those technical terms applying to nursing that cannot be changed such as diabetes melitus.

Laurine PCALS

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could you explain about easy way to do paraphrasing

There is no "easy way" you must follow specific strategies.  Please refer to the PCALS slideshows on Paraphrasing for the technique and over time it will become more automatic for you.

Laurine  PCALS

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How do you do proper intext citation ????

Please download a copy of the APA Referencing and refer to it for this information.  Workshops will be run by PCALS to cover this as well.  The library staff are experts in this area so talk to them too.

Laurine PCALS
Hi Dishka, PLESE NOTE: NO in-text citations/ referencing is needed in your week 4 paraphrasing assessment.
Also, the library and PCALS are running 2hr workshops in week 4 on referencing and in-text citations. Here are the times/locations:

Campbelltown Campus

Tuesday 14/03/17 from 1000 – 1200 in 30.G.213 (LT)

Thursday 16/03/17 from 1700 – 1900 in 30.G.213 (LT)

Hawkesbury Campus

Monday 13/03/17 from 1300 – 1500 in L2.G.30 (Conf)

Wednesday 15/03/17 from 1700 – 1900 in R6.G.01 (Conf)

Parramatta Campus

Wednesday 15/03/2017 from 17:00-19:00 in G.19 (Auditorium)

Friday 17/03/17 from 1200 – 1400 in EEPS-EA.2.13 (LT02)

Mandy (PCALS)

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how to pass this unit? thank you

Hi there
Manage your time well. Be aware of assignment deadlines and work on your assignments well in advance. Access all sources available to support your learning such as PCALS, Study Smart and PASS. If in doubt about nursing content check with your nursing tutor.
Good luck with your studies.
Suzanne (PCALS)

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How can I know I paraphrased without the teacher telling me the answer? So in other words how do I know i answered the question correctly?
Hi Sam,
this is a difficult question to answer. My advice is to make notes on all the main ideas you can see in each extract (try to write your notes straight away in your own words, using synonyms if you can or keeping the specialised words (the words that are difficult to change). Then put the extract aside and use the notes you have made to write your paraphrase. If you have made notes on all important information in the extract, you will have satisfied the assessment requirement- provided you have written it enough in your own style (so it doesn't seem to be a copy of the original). Make sure you write all your notes into full sentences (no dot points).
Mandy (PCALS)

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Hi! I am working on my second extract now, can anyone check it to see if I'm on track?

Would you like to meet me on Zoom?

Laurine PCALS

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How to work with refere
Please explain further.
Laurine PCALS

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How can we collect all the information from the text and paraphrase them without coying?

Please come to PCALS workshops held on respective campuses for more information.

Laurine PCALS

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can we delete some unimoirtant infromation from extract? ()

Be careful in acertaining what is unimportant.  If unsure please attend PCALS Paraphrasing workshops.

Laurine PCALS

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will online session will be as effective as the class ?

This is a personal decision.  Please avail yourself of all support and decide for yourself.

Laurine PCALS

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Hi there

Could you type in your query please?
Suzanne (PCALS)

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19076948 , what % of similarities will turnitin will accept bhawana jaisi

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19076948 , what % of similarities will turnitin will accept bhawana jaisi

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Sometimes it depends on the particular assessment.  Please ask your tutor.  The lower the percentage the better.

Laurine PCALS

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would like to know more about note taking

There is information under the PCALS site on vUWS.  Workshops are being run as well.  Please come along.

Laurine PCAL

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Dear Student,

Do you have a question?

Laurine PCALS

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Hi there,

Just wanted to know to find the key points while paraphrasing and refrencing techinique.

Please attend PCALS workshops and view PCALS slideshows relating to this assessment.

Laurine PCALS

Hi Jenifer,
the key points are all the points you think are really important. Usually each small paragraph in each extract has one or two main ideas. Asking yourself questions about each extract  (WHAT? HOW? WHO?WHY? WHEN?) may help you find important ideas in the extract- for eg. What is documentation?, When is information documented?, Who needs to document information? Where is information stored?,Why is documentation important? How do nurses document information?
Only add information from the extract- do not add any extra ideas of your own.
Mandy (PCALS)

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Hi,
Can you provide examples of common mistakes in paraphrasing?

Hi Michael,
here are some common mistakes:
Paraphrasing line by line - it is better to read the whole text, then make notes on the main ideas, then use your notes to write your paraphrase

Keeping the sentence structure the same and only changing a few words here and there- not acceptable

Simply reversing order of the original sentence without changing any of the words (ie. without using synonyms)- not acceptable

If you click on the extract below (taken from the Paraphrasing & Summarising PPT above), it shows you a poor paraphrase and a suggested rewording.
Mandy (PCALS)

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Hi
If the sentence is small and makes sense and i cant come up with anything better can i use " " and use the full sentence.

Hi Simone,
no you cannot use a "direct quote" in this exam. The purpose of this assessment is to practise paraphrasing - changing authors' ideas into your own words- so the markers won't accept any "direct quotes".  I would recommend perhaps combining that short idea with a similar idea from another sentence to make a longer sentence. You should not paraphrase sentence by sentence

Mandy (PCALS)

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Hi I am Reena,
How many of the technical words from the original passage do you recommend I use for my paragraph

Hi Reena,
it depends on how many of those technical/specialised words you think are very important. Do try to include all the main ideas you can see. With specialised words like "documentation", though it's difficult to find a synonym (different word with similar meaning) for these, you may be able to use a different word form: eg. noun: documentation/ passive tense: information is documented/ verb: nurses should document / gerund (-ing): Documenting patient data...
Cheers,
Mandy (PCALS)

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Mahnaz
Hi
How to start the paraphrase I mean from which section we need to start.

Hi Mahnaz

there is no particular order. You can start from any part of the paraphrase as long as the ideas are logically connected.

Suzanne (PCALS)

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Hello,
How to paraphrase dot points?

Thanks
Warren

Hi Warren,
your paraphrase needs to be written in full sentences, in a paragraph.- So no dot points. Make notes of the key ideas from each dot point and combine them into sentences.
Mandy (PCALS)

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Dear Jungeun

Do you have a question about paraphrasing?
Suzanne (PCAL)

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Hi there,

What's your name and what is your query about paraphrasing?

Suzanne (PCALS)

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17143569 Hannah Can you tell me how to paraphrase?

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17143569 Hannah Can you tell me how to paraphrase?

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Dear Hannah
Sure what do you want to know?
Suzanne (PCALS)

Where should I start?

Dear Hannah
You first read the extracts.
Suzanne (PCALS)

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Can you please direct me to a ppt that I could use to improve my writing?
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Hi Laura,

This is a useful ppt.

Suzanne (PCALS)