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Adji: 7
Purpose unclearly stated in Thesis, however, it is shown in a great conclusion. Text references and explanations present. Topic sentences lack, choppy sentences.
Michael: 4
Terrific use of syntax and diction. Great structure and explanations. Overall, would have been outstanding essay, except question was misunderstood.

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Adji: Score 7
Very well explained essay with multiple examples to back up claims but needs clear thesis
Leilani: Score 8
Very clear thesis with lots of examples to relate to her claims and views

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Conrad: score 7+
Sophisticated argument with text evidence that is appropriate and convincing, but leaves out point Kennedy is making in paragraph one and his conclusion lacks reasoning.
Ronaldo: Score 6
Deep analysis and use of diction. Needs more evidence and stylistic features.

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Score:6
Clearly stated thesis and Kennedt's purpose is clearly stated as well. Fully supported quotes but could have been more sophisticated and stylish.

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Score : 5
• good analysis
• good introduction
• be more specific when citing from audiences or making references

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Score: 7+. Gave details throughout her whole essay. Although some paragraphs were detailed more than others.

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Great sense of style and his sentences flowed.  But needed to embed the sentences instead of just stating Score : 7
Zubair
Good diction. Used mature words and a good analysis of what Kennedys message
score :7
Elizabeth
Great use of embedding and used mature words in some paragraphs but needs sentence variety
Score :7

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Score : 5
• gets point across
• could use more punctuation
• anaylsis is limited
• good thesis

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Score:5
Great explanation but could use more style

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Great sense of style.

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Score : 7
• good thesis
• clear quotes and analysis
• could elaborate more on points

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Score: 5
Clear thesis. More analysis is needed. Good examples. Needs to work on conclusion.
Beatrice
Score: 6+
Good evidence and analysis. Needs to work on grammar. Needs more connection to the purpose.
Hannah
Score:6+
Has good diction. Has a clear and powerful thesis. Good

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Score : 7
• Good thesis
• quotes and analysis are clear
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Score 8
Very eloquent
Sufficient examples
Thesis statement is clear and topic sentence is present. Body paragraphs provides a thorough understanding of the strategies used

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Score 6
Needs work on analysis and on the conclusion, but is developing style by using colons and dashes.

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Score: 5
Good use of stating he purpose and adding quotes. Just need to add and elaborate on the examples. Adding a little more.
Darnell:
Score: 6
Nice way conclude and reeling how the audience feel. Clear thesis. Add more examples to body and elaborate on it.
Taybah:
Score: 7
Good introduction and clear thesis statement. Explain quotes a little more. Good textual examples

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Score: 7

Has a lot of style and description present. Needs another body paragraph and more added to the conclusion, but besides that, really well done.

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Score 6
Kai's essay was very well constructed and had various descriptive references but lacked style and finesse and vocabulary was basic at times but overall knew the content

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Score 7
Elucidative and smooth introduction. Skilled with embedding and inference.

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Score 7
Short but thorough analysis, lack of stylistic elements, diction could improve but great intro and conclusion and even though analysis was short I felt he understood what jfk wanted to get across
Jordan:
Score 7
Elucidating and smooth introduction, used thought-out inference and embedding, very thorough, but the ideas are a little loose/not connected, good analyzing

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Score 3
Lacks examples
NEEDS MORE EXAMPLES