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Organising an argument within a paragraph

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Organising an argument within a paragraph

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Take a look at this handy guide to writing paragraphs, by the University of the East of London. It reminds us what we discussed and practised about paragraph structure last week, just in a slightly different way - hopefully it's helpful.

When you're finished, try to order these sentences - each colour is a separate scrambled paragraph, on a different topic.

After that, think about what cohesive devices you saw in each part of each para.

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Developing a critical argument - University of East London (UEL)

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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Topic sentence:what brought shortage ion HIV treatment
Evidence sentence(s):indian governments
Commentary sentence(s):comments about the cost and increased charge

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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Topic sentence:This position, however
Evidence sentence(s):More specifically
Explanation(s):Evidence for such a position comes from
Commentary sentence(s):Although

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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What cohesive devices did you find in the:

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Topic sentence: Turning first to

Evidence sentence(s):
According to, for example

Commentary:  sentences+ thus +... base on ...

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e. The Indian government, however, outlawed the copying of patents in 2005 (ibid.), thus escalating the cost of the antiretrovirals to the original $15,000.

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d. In India, for example, the government allowed the copying of drugs that had been patented by multinational pharmaceutical industries. This copying led to a reduction in the cost of antiretrovirals from $15,000 to $200 (Harris, 2011).

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c. One issue that has brought about the current shortage of available treatment for HIV/AIDS is the ownership of patents.

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b. This increased charge most probably prevents sub-Saharan countries from investing in treatments for HIV/AIDS.

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a. This cost, it could be argued, would have made the drugs affordable to Third world countries.

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d. Tourists contribute to the local economy by spending money on travel to and around the country, as well as on accommodation, food, entertainment and souvenirs. Myles (2004), for example, found that close to 70% of total tourist expenditure was on accommodation, restaurants and bars, with a further 16% on transport, tours and entertainment.

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c. Turning first to the economic benefits of tourism, we can see that in the case of the Cook Islands, there is a variety of sources of income from tourist receipts.

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b. Tourists are thus helping to create jobs which are based on making them feel welcome and at the same time they put cash into the economy directly by paying for services.

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a. According to a 1991 visitor survey (Tourism Council of the South Pacific, 1991), after beach activities and natural scenery (62%), visitors to the Cook Islands are looking for entertainment and folklore and cultural experiences (37%).

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b. Although the study was limited to one area, it does suggest that CCTV cameras can have a negative effect on society.

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d. Evidence for such a position comes from Smith and Jones (2008) who conducted a survey on how people felt when they were being watched. A number of interviewees (60%) admitted that they checked to see if they had done something wrong, or were ‘nervous’ (p.453).

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a. More specifically, constantly being watched can cause a sense of guilt in a person and therefore bring about a fear of punishment.

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c. It is often claimed that if one lives within the law, being seen on CCTV is irrelevant (e.g. Clam, 2004, Johns, 2005a). This position, however, does not take into account the sense of fear that this can cause.