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Cage home is a wire cage-like compartment, just large enough for a person to lie down, are typically stacked in pairs, top and bottom. Cage home was not much bigger than a ping-pong table - enough for a person and their belongings. It was very crowded and unhygienic.

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- Good use of a range of adjectives to describe the living condition.
- It should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.

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-A Hong Kong hostel with dormitories that look like cage homes used by the city’s poor has been causing a stir. Wontonmeen, an arts hub offering budget accommodation, claims to give foreign travellers a taste of “the real Hong Kong” by letting them experience caged sleeping for HK$203 (US$26) a night in Sham Shui Po, the city’s poorest district.

“Even starving artists need a place to rest their heads,” reads the blurb on Wontonmeen’s website. “We like to think of Wontonmeen as the hub where Hong Kong’s creative scene starts its day; a unique, diverse living space in the heart of Sham Shui Po.”
- I am happy now the living place, because not everyone have comfortable place to live

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Upon entering the room, I was immediately astonished to learn how small the rooms were. The individual spaces were as big as my desk at home and the living conditions were dirty. The room was never silent, whether it be the dripping pipes or the fight to use the bathroom first. The smell of garbage still lingered in the air even after the constant disposal of rubbish. The conditions were so poor that I wouldn’t wish this on my worst enemy.

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Residents are forced to share a single electrical outlet that aren’t frequently checked by regulatory bodies. Due to the lack of regular cleaning, the apartments are rife with insects and bacteria, causing these cage homes to become a filthy breeding ground for disease. In the summer, overcrowded cage homes an extremely unpleasant environment to live in.

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Cage homes in Hong Kong are very small and cramped which only allows one bed and is surrounded by a metal cage. Both the bath room and kitchen are shared by different families, there are no windows in the bath room, so there are no privacy between. There is only little space for one to put clothes and you can't sleep comfortably inside.

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Well-written!
- Good to use adjectives to describe your feelings
- Nice to use simile to describe the space

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- Good use of a range of adjectives to describe the living condition.
- It should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.
- Moreover, it should be written from the first person point of view, "I".

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Cage home in Hong Kong is very crowded. The spaces can only fit one person in to sleep and they can barely put their belongings inside the bed to sleep with. Besides, the living environment is very poor. You can hear the noise from the street such as the cars and people’s conversation. The smell is also pungent. As cage room in Hong Kong is a combination of many rooms, you can smell other people’s stuff or weird smell they produced. The toxic air like carbon dioxide produced by the cars can also smelled in the cage room which make people feel very uncomfortable and sick easily.

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Cage homes are so small that it is only large enough to fit one bunkbed which is surrounded by a metal cage. There’s almost no extra space for you to place your belongings. You don’t have your own toilet and kitchen. You will need to share them with other tenants. You might also need to accommodate others or else conflicts may easily arise with your flatmates. You have no choice but to do everything whilst sitting on your bed whether it’s work or spending your leisure time.

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- Good use of a range of adjectives to describe the living condition. Nice to include some examples to illustrate the living condition.
- It should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.
- Moreover, it should be written from the first person point of view, "I".

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Many units are closet-sized as they come from big rooms that were divided into small cages in order to rent it out to more people. Cage homes has communal bathrooms and kitchens. These subdivided units are often stacked with personal belongings. Hence, cage homes are so crowded that occupants sometimes don't even have enough space to stretch their body.

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The appearance of cage home is as same as its name. The space is very limited so I have to put my personal belongings on the bed, and because of the cramped environment, I can only fit on the bed reluctantly. It’s hard to turn over so I have to hold a single position which makes me uncomfortable.

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- Good use of a range of actions to describe things residents do in a cage room.
- However, it should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.
- Moreover, it should be written from the first person point of view, "I".

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- Good use of adverbs (e.g. extremely) to describe the degree. - However, it should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.

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Several people lived together in a dusky and worn-out room, and their beds were surrounded by barbed wire, like cages, which looked uncomfortable. The dirty environment seems to be filled with a stench. Such a narrow shelter will only bring a very crowded and depressing feeling.

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- Good use of a range of adjectives to describe the living condition.
- It should a recount of personal experience of living in a cage home for one night instead of a general factual introduction to the living environment of cage home.
- Moreover, it should be written from the first person point of view, "I".

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After living in this cage home for one night, it really makes me realise that the environment there really is suffocating and oppresing. The area of the room is not so very big to begin with and when you also have some belongings put in there, sometimes there's not even have enough space for a human to sleep. Also the kitchen and the toilet are in the common area, which means everyone living in this cage home use the same kitchen and toilet, I think it is unhygienic and unclean. There isn't even any ventilation, because the rooms in there don’t even have a window. This all makes me realise how severe the housing problem in Hong Kong really is and urges me to spread the message to more people.

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I got to experience the miserable living conditions people have to deal with in cage homes first hand. I understand that not everyone has the privilege to live in a clean and comfortable environment. They are forced to live in a dirty and cramped areas with poor ventilation. It may seem like the rent for these cage homes are cheap. Unfortunately that is not the case. These nano living spaces are priced relatively high, which I find absolutely ridiculous.  A lot of the people living in these spaces have to share the kitchen, living room and toilets.  I really hope they can find affordable apartments with a better living conditions in the future.

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- Good to use an adverb (e.g. reluctantly) to describe the action.
- Use past tense to write past experiences.

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Hong Kong's housing market is the most expensive in the world, many low-income Hong Kong citizens can not afford the expensive price of housing and choose to live in such a small house, I feel lucky that I don't need to live in a small place.

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- Good to use a range of adjectives to describe the living condition and feelings.
- Good to use simile to give vivid description.

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The experience really opened my eyes to the problems that people face daily. I couldn’t imagine having to trade places with anyone who has to live in these confined spaces. I learnt to not take even the slightest thing for granted as not everyone is fortunate to be in my place. I learnt to value and cherish each thing In my life, even the smallest of things.

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This breaks my heart to see that a lot of citizens in Hong Kong have to live in such filthy, cramped and unwelcoming places, and yet the government has done barely anything to alleviate such problem.

I am also very grateful to be able to live in an apartment which is not surrounded by metal cages and only has more than a one-bed space.

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I feel very lucky because I don't have to live in such a small and cramped space. There are five people in my family. I can't imagine how hard it would be if the five of us lived in the cage home. The environment there was really atrocious, not only was the ventilation system poor, the kitchen is also a public area and thus many unwashed utensils and dishes were seen causing many arguments between tenants. I can't imagine the amount of arguments if I had lived there not as an experience, if there were as much as I have heard when I stayed there for one day. After this horrible experience, I will never take what I have for granted.

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This special experience really educated me to discover that many Hong Kong citizens were temporarily or even permanently living in cage houses.
Major of us felt somewhat trapped within their homes and unsatisfied with their living environment,  however I have realised to cherish and value what we have already owned, instead of complaining.

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It really opened my eyes to find that there are many Hong Kong citizens living in a very small space. It makes people feel uncomfortable as it is an apartment divided between 10 people and there’s no kitchen. It lacks of privacy. I’m very proud of living in a residence which has more than one bed area, and having a private space.

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Before I even had time to turn around, my bag had been ripped out of my hands and the thief was already sprinting away from me. ‘No!’ I screamed. ‘Stop!’ But it was not use: the robber was long gone and I was rooted to the spot with shock, in o fit state to give chase.

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- Learn a lesson
- Deliver a message
It made me releaize that most people are genuine, honest and kind. Only a minority of people are vicious and cruel. So that you, Eneida, for the lesson I have learnt today: always focus on positive and forget the negative.

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The reflection here is more like a recount of the experience. Only the closing part about the housing problem is about reflection. You may write more about your insights of housing problem in HK.

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Good to share the reflection by sharing an in-depth understanding, new discoveries, hope for the future.

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You showed gratitude as personal growth. You may briefly write about how to tackle the housing issue in HK.

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Nice to show gratitude as personal growth and share the lesson you have learnt from the experience

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- An emotional, honest and sincere sharing of your feelings make the reflection personal and touching.
- Nice to show gratitude as personal growth

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- Comparison between the living condition at home and at cage home as reflection
- Good to show gratitude as personal growth

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- Good to share a lesson learnt from the experience and show gratitude as personal growth.

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It is more like an introduction of the housing issue instead of reflection of a personal experience.

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Is it appropriate to say ' I'm proud ...'?