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One Saturday the rain was coming in hard and the wind was moving the rain. phone sirens turning on and then we here a big BOOM!!!! trees ebbing down my riend zyric started to run around the house yeing theres a tornado

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I am so nervous about learning a new dance in cheer.  Learning a new dance for cheer has always been a challenge for me.   I have been cheering for three years but learning a new dance has always been hard for me to learn because it is at a faster pace.

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"I said get down now!" My mom yelled from the living room as she heard me jump from bed to bed. a thud noise echoed the room something fell from the bed
I used Dialoge because in my story i used dialogue

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"Ow!!" I said as my eye banged against the pole. Everyone surrounded me to see if I was ok.

I used dialogue because I the story that I wrote has dialogue.

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yay! i said as me and my family were on our way to disney i was filled up with joy that i coldhave exploded

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From Mrs. Alloway: Great job. Try to  more excitement when using dialogue
Hook: "mom", I slowly woke up. Mom answered "morning Hannah, we are going to the zoo today"... I got up with excitement!

I used Dialogue because my story involves talking and active activities.
(not true story)

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From Mrs. Alloway: Great Job!!
Hook: I picked the fattest puppy in the litter, but he had the cutest face. He was as small as a shoe box but still the biggest in the litter. I could not say no to that cute puppy.

Jackson now

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question

Cherry was a young lady that was a little bratty to say the least. Anyway she did not care what anyone said especially today, her favorite  thing to do. Her parents loved to do stuff for but not when she acts up.

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
I smelled the cold ocean breeze. We choose an area to sit it was the middle of the Beach. Me and Nikhil decided to play soccer, But then someone screamed "SHARK!!!!"

We ran and left the ball, and it ate the ball.

CHOMP CHOMP

(not real)

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Hook: I sat downstairs eating my cereal. My mom had woken me up at 7 just for a 'surprise'. I groaned, "When's the surprise?" My mom shook her head, "Look outside." I peeked outside the window, a sunrise. I yawn, "And?" I was really cranky. I* wanted to sleep.

I used dialogue hook because my story includes talking. (not real!)

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
One extremely cold Saturday in may my friends and I experienced to the stormest wether ever. The lightning storm made everything look grey and you can see blue sparks lightning bolts coming from the sky the wind was pushing the rain inside the treehouse to we had to crowd all together in one corner.

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From Mrs. Alloway:  Great Job
Hook:  For 10 years now, the hole in the kitchen wall was left the same. One day, when my brother and I returned home from tennis camp, our  hole was filled with a bright blue piece of glass. But then I realized it was something I never imagined...

Type of Hook: This hook creates suspense and curiosity for the readers, which will encourage them to keep reading. They too will want to find out what was in that hole in the wall, and why it was left untouched for ten years.

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From Mrs. Alloway: Great job
Hook: We named ourselves the Crazy Girls Club and we love to do dangerous things for fun."I am crazy and I am proud of it"said one member.
Type of hook:The hook that I used highlights a group of fifth grader girls doing "dangerous things for fun".This sparks curiosity as young girls don't do anything dangerous. Readers will get exited and would want to continue reading to learn exactly what we do and exactly how much fun we have.

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From Mrs. Alloway: add more details
When i was in the museum i did not know what to go and see first so i started with the bones of the animals.

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From Mrs. Alloway:  Re Do. Using a question was not one of the choices.
Have you ever gone swimming before? when i was 7 I was bad at swimming and when I was 9 i new how to swim and i'm 10 now and I can swim very good.

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
There I was riding my scooter in the drive way until I looked at it  what is that !! I yelled . My sister got up  from her chair to see what I was looking at . What is what she asked '' I pointed at the bug it had black wings . My sister started laughing '' what are you laughing at that bug looks weird . Lauren that is a butterfly if you turn your head you can see the yellow . oops   I replied

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
LIAM HIGGINS
One morning I  woke up to a screaming voice down the hallway “ahhhhhhhhh” screamed my brother “what’s wrong“ I said “mom put pepper on my eggs”He said crying with tears like rain  “I woke up for this!!!!” I stormed back to my room. And looked at the time and I heard the school bell ring...

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
There it was infront of my own two eyes was the huge mountain.  I haven't been able to climb Stone mountain for 1 mounth. After my foot was hurt I didn't want to risk hurting it more. Now I could walk up that mountain  without any pain. I have been coming here ever since I was 6 and I have missed coming once every week. Now I could finally climb it!!

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From Mrs.  Alloway: Great Job

I am so irritated! I don’t know how much longer I can live like this.Why did the Coronavirus have to come and mess up everything? Now I can’t go out anywhere, or do anything. This year we were going to go to Cancun, India, and Europe. This would’ve been the best year ever. Instead the Coronavirus decided to come and shut everything down. Right now I’m doing digital learning since schools are not open for the public.

I used a descriptive hook. A descriptive hook is good for my story because my story does not have much action. It's mostly a calm story.

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From Mrs. Alloway: re do the assignment read the directions carefully, Using a question was not one of the options.
The fish swam quickly, sneaky as a fox with its spotted and scaly exterior, it turned as fast as the speed of light. My cousin Shreya shouted “That’s a spotted bass. Quickly, Aarya be ready to catch it.” I frantically lowered the green short rod with bait on it. (A piece of bread rolled up into a ball). It was a bright sunny day, the murky water was full of plants and tiny fish. It was so hot that I was sweating bullets. It was hard to see the spotted bass because of the murky water. I didn’t even know if it was there anymore.

I used an action/descriptive hook. I describe what I saw and how I feel while I was fishing, also I show how the fish was acting.

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From Mrs. Alloway: Great Job
"Th-that was a dream right," I stammered. I looked to the seat beside and howled, "Nooooo!"

I used a dialogue hook to make suspension and mystery cause my reader's to keep reading.  My dialogue did not tell much details of what happened other that it is scary. This shows what hook I used and why.

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From .Mrs. Alloway:  Not Finished
We got and we couldn't deiced what puppy to get they where all so cute in till...

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From Mrs. Alloway: Didn't answer the last part of the question
It was a hot summer day in Woodstock, GA. The blistering sun was turning water into gas. We were in the championship of the final tournament of the Spring/Summer season. I was up to bat. The pitcher was throwing so fast, I could hear the whistling of the baseball flying over the plate. When the umpire said, "Sir, step into the box please.", I was ready.

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
That was the day when they had to go back.The time they went on the airplane was at 1:30, but I didn't know.As soon as I got of the bus I raced towards home, but they were not there any more.

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From Mrs. Alloway: Great hook Awesome job
We turned right and found another dead end. We looked at my dads phone in a last-chance resort. Suddenly the phone turned off and we were lost in the middle of Venice, Italy

I used a action hook because I thought it would go good with the title Lost in the Middle of Venice Italy. Also I used it because I knew that action hook would want the reader to keep on reading the rest of the story.

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From: Mrs. Alloway Didn't answer the last part of the question
My heart sank. My cousin gets to go to her favorite singer's show and I had to go with her. Ugh, I didn't want to go to that show, I wanted to go to my favorite singer's show. My face turned red and smoke came out of my ears, I was furious  and a bit jealous.

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
"Who wants to go to the big park?!" my mom said with a happy voice. YAY my sister and I were so exited since we could go to the park and do activities with my dad on his bday (labor day).

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
As we drive down the street were we see the huge Cruz ships and we park and I run to the back of the car and the my bags. I wait for my parent to get their bags then I sprint to the elevator.

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From Mrs. Alloway: add more details and make sure to answer the entire question

When super just remembered             he beat Dark dark. The dark over lord almost beat super!

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
I was playing the biggest lacrosse game of my life when suddenly I was passed the ball to score, as I was chasing after the rolling ball my opponent Crushed my foot. After I got the ball I immediately threw it into the goal. The second after I fell to the ground and felt a very bad sting to my toes. As I laid there I had no doubt that I shattered my big toe.
Hook: action and suspense

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From Mrs. Alloway: you didn't answer the last part of the question

If your tired of being bullied all of the time please keep reading.You can't just let someone bully you all the time. Try standing up for yourself. Always tell a adult that you trust. Never have someone  bring you down.

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From Mrs. Alloway: great job
hook: I woke up wondering why my grandma didn't wake me up today as i went to get ready i over heard there conversation?? They said something about a beach so I just got ready and went to the dining table. To hear about the exiting news!!
what hook: I used action and mystery for my hook.
why: I used these hook because it would make the reader want to know more and want to know what is going to happen by the tittle of the story and by the hook.
how: the tittle says (The Special Day) so it will want the readers to know what special day and the hook at the end says "To hear the exiting news!!" it will make the readers want to now what exiting news.

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From Mrs. Alloway: make sure to answer the last part of the question
The game starts its 0 to 0 its raining it was raining hard but the Atlanta Braves still play 2   hours later the score is 9 to 9 acuña is up to bat he is from the Atlanta Braves team next score won the game acuña had  2 strikes and 2 balls but he MADE a HOMERUN Atlanta Braves won the game 14 to 9 the ball was out of the park.

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From Mrs. Alloway. Read the direction carefully. I will explain more in class.
Seriously, my best friends are bonkers but in a good way. They always make me laugh. We always do bonkers stuff. We have been best friends since 3rd grade and since then, we do activities that are dangterous just for fun.We named ourselves ”The Crazy Girls Club”. We started with just four members in third grade,but quickly grew to a team of seven. Together, we are unstoppable!