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I had a scary dream last night. I saw that I was standing beside a beautiful horse in a jungle. The next moment, I jumped upon its back and walked. But instead of running on the road, it began to fly in the air.

I held it fast, lest I should fall. After a flight of several minutes, it stood beside the gate of a hanging garden in air. I was received by a group of girls. They led me through a big hall, to a tall man. He was sitting on the back of a lion. But as soon as he saw me his eyes began to burn like flames. He got off the lion and i started running and hes running to me.

I kept on running until i reahed to a place there is alot of people are celebrating a birthday party and i told them to protect me.

I thanked God, as I found myself quiet  and sound  in my bed. Nevertheless, my heart was beating fast, and I could not sleep for the rest of the night.

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Last week, on a Friday in the middle of the night I was sleeping and I dreamed that I met a new friend at school and she invited me to her house to spend some time together outside of school. She gave me her home address and it was close to our house, so I went there on foot. The shape of the house was terrifying and most of the rooms were dark. I called her to come and pick me up from outside the house, and we go to her room, and as we walked into the house, I had a terrifying feeling. After that, we sat and had a conversation, and if the maid knocked on the door of the room, my friend allowed her to enter, and after she entered, I was surprised by her terrifying appearance and was offering us a strange drink. I put a drink near us, so my friend asked what this strange drink is, and why did the maid look so terrifying?
Suddenly my friend's eyes turned white and her voice changed and her voice was very terrifying
She said
Did you think that I am human?
I screamed and ran out of the house
I was running towards our house and the road was endless
While I was running, I heard my mother's voice calling me
I woke up very terrified
And my mother was trying to wake me from sleep, so I was talking while I was sleeping, and the words were not understood. I drank some water to calm down and went back to sleep.


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When I was in middle school, my friends and I used to agree that  every Thursday we go to the studio class at school to draw because we are talented in drawing and we used to go at the break time. So, on a Thursday, we decided to go to the studio class.

We went and we sat down to draw, and while we were sitting, my friend said “What do you think, let us rest a bit and tell each other horror stories?”. We all agreed, so we turned off the lights and lit candles to make the place more interesting. So my friend Maryam started telling her terrifying story, then Zainab’s turn came, then Reem's, then it was my turn. When I was telling my story, the lights suddenly turned on and the things fell on the ground. We all screamed, and then we ran to the principal's office, and when we told her. She did not believe us at first, but after she went and saw everything herself. She believed our words and then the police came. They told us that the school was haunted, and they closed it.  It was a very scary day.

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On a quiet night, I was at my girlfriend's birthday party and everyone was happy until we felt weird and the lights started going out one by one.

After that the electricity went out and everyone started screaming loudly and in fear. Out of fear, some children ran towards the candles.  A little girl ran to her mother frightened and a candle fell on one of the curtains, and the place started burning.

Everyone was very afraid of the fire and everyone was trying to get out of the house.  I went to help some girls who ran, and the quickest solution was to call the firefighters. While they were helping people,  I brought some drinks and food and tried to help the firefighters

It was a very tiring night and definitely the scariest I've ever had.

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It was a calm night. I felt bored, so I walked with my friend in the forest.

Suddenly, the weather became rainy and stormy with loud thunder and bright lightning. We ran back to our camp but there was no one to be seen. My friend said cautiously, "Hey, is anyone there?" After a few seconds, we heard a cracking and a raspy voice coming from behind the trees. "Yes, I'm here."

I closed my eyes and screamed loudly, then I held my friend's hand and ran away. The sound of his footsteps is becoming closer, and my friend fainted from the dread and fear. I looked back and saw the most frightening thing, and it was a very pale-skinned vampire, and he was thirsty for blood. I didn't know what to do, but I carried my friend off the ground and ran off to the end of the forest.

There I saw a man on the road and I asked him to take me home quickly. Two hours later, I went back to the forest and I saw my friend there. I didn't understand what had happened. Suddenly, I woke up from my worst nightmare. However, I was happy that this was just a dream.

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When I was young, we used to live in a small house with a haunted house next to it, and the whole neighborhood was afraid to approach it.

One day, my friends and I decided to go to this house and explore. There were scary sounds and the whole house was covered by cobwebs .  So we sat in the corner of the house and decided to scare each other with horror stories and it was very dark. Suddenly I looked behind me and there was a scary creature, so we screamed at the top of our voices and got out of the house.

None of us expected to sleep after this , but the fear had exhausted us and we fell into a deep slumber . This was the scariest night of our lives .

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Since my childhood, I love adventure and exploring places. My family and I went to Aljazzaer plage last month and I was so excited. When we arrived, we booked a tent and we spent time in talking and eating. After a while, I got tired of sitting so I asked my cousin Sarah if she wanted to have a walk with me and I told her we wouldn't be far away from the ten so she agreed.

While we were looking around and checking out the place, we saw an abandoned house, and we were curious to go and see what was inside the house. So, we proceeded cautiously towards the house, and when we got inside it, it looked very scary and old, as if no one had lived there for hundreds of years. So, we decided to explore the place. Actually, I was a bit scared, but I convinced myself to get in because life is about trials and adventures. The house was dark from inside, so we turned on the lights and we started moving around. I went to look in one side and Sarah in the other. After some time ,we didn't see anything interesting. All of a sudden, I heard Sarah's voice screaming and saying "What do you want from me? Who are you?". So, I ran to her to see what was happening. She was standing at the corner of the room, and fear filled her eyes while she was trembling. I asked her "What happened? Why are you yelling?". She said she heard the voices of a man and a woman; they were talking and asking her to get out of this house. She heard the sound of steps walking in the house. Then it was my role to calm her down and convince her that this is an illusion and there is nothing from what she said and I actually  succeeded in that. We continued to search but this time I did not leave her alone and I stayed with her to make her feel safe and more comfortable.

Then, We entered a small, narrow room, and the shock was that we saw the body of a little girl covered in blood. I stood in my place. I didn't know what was happening and Sarah screamed in fear. The man and the woman appeared and they started threatening us if we didn't get out of the house, they would take our lives and we would be like that little girl. Immediately both Sarah and I ran away and got out of this horrible house. We went straight to the tent, but we didn't tell anyone what happened.

It was very scary and terrifying; I didn't imagine that I would see something like this. Till this day I am traumatized of what happened and still the effects of such experience live with me.

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I was camping with my family at Sakhir. Our group consisted of ten people, while the neighboring campsite had a group of six people. It was a chilly winter evening, and both groups were doing typical activities.

Something about the firelight in the wilderness darkness makes you lean in and listen a little more intently. I went to figure out the source of the sound using my phone's flash light.

While I was walking through the area I heard the sound clearly. I noticed a very tall, skinny pitch-black figure standing 100ft distance away from me. This creature was making the noises . I was terrified and wanted to flee but I froze in my spot.  I closed my eyes and started screaming as loud as I could. When my parents arrived in panic,  the creature had vanished .

We went back to our campsite , my family was around me trying to calm me down and convince me that I was simply hallucinating.  I hid under the covers until I fell asleep .

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It was a normal day in 2018. Nothing was out of the ordinary.  I was at my friends house and we were having a karaoke party.

All of a sudden, people started to disappear and me and 5 of my friends were the only ones left the room. We were freaking out and shaking. None of us knew what was happing . We turned on the news hoping to get an explanation and see what was going on. Turns out Thanos (a creature from other planet called titan) had collected all six infinity stones and snapped his fingers leading to wiping out half of the population on all planets and not just earth.

My friends and I were terrified and called our families scared that they wouldn’t answer. Unfortunately mine didn’t .I was devastated and crushed and went home running hoping that they were just sleeping and hadn’t disappeared but all of my hopes quickly shattered once I finished looking in all the rooms and there was no one to be found. I started sobbing and I didn’t know what to do. My parents and my siblings had disappeared. There were signs everywhere for “missing person” and lists were made of the names of the people that had disappeared. It was horrible.

And now it’s 2023 , 5 years later I’ve moved on, everyone did. The first year was the worst we had hope that one day they’ll show up but after that all hope was lost. But today out of the blue the disappeared started to reappear right were they were before. Thanos snapped his fingers and the ones that were in dangerous places are in a much safer area.

Everyone is thrilled and excited, big parties are being planned to welcome the blipped back on earth. This was all thanks to the Avengers they had finally figured out a way to go back in time and get the infinity stones before Thanos gets them and snap their fingers with the gauntlet that holds all six infinity stones. But unfortunately collecting the stones and snapping had costed two of the avengers lives, Natasha Romanoff and Tony Stark had sacrificed their lives to save billions of others. We are forever grateful to them.

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It was a beautiful and dark night. I was walking by the wall of the cemetery alone. I was very happy, and the weather was beautiful and a little rainy.

Suddenly, I heard a some sound coming from nowhere and something moving for no reason. There was no one and I couldn't move because of this sound. My whole body was shaking as I was in shock of what is around me. A that time, I knew there was a storm. So I tried to escape but I couldn't. I heard some loud noise. I fell to the ground and my heart stopped for a second. I was unconscious. My friend saw me and came very quickly to help me get up. When I woke up, I sat talking to my friend and told her what happened to me.

Even today I don't know what really happened to me there. I feel scared whenever I remember how I felt there alone. It was a really scary night.

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There was a house far from the village located in the middle of a dark forest.  No one lived in this abandoned house for 16 years after the family that lived there died.  One month ago, a girl came to get this house. The girl walked into the house and strange things were happening while she was walking.

Something caught her attention in the room.  She could hear a child screaming. She got scared and went to her house. That same night, she had a nightmare. She was trying to sleep, but she went to that house again. She went to the room where the baby was, but he disappeared. Then she went checking in all the rooms. When she went down the stairs, she heard a knife being thrown to the floor. She looked around, but there was no knife on the floor. She kept going down the stairs, went to the kitchen, and then the kid burned her with the stove and stabbed her with a knife.

At the end, she woke up from her sleep. "It was only a dream" she said.  She then knew that she was only imagining things and it was not a real thing.

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When I was a child, I lived on a street with a haunted house. They told me that a large and happy family had lived in the house until one night when one of the children was playing with matches.

The youngest boy of the family dropped a lit match on his bed but was too scared to call out for help. The boy was burned under his covers. His parents and two sisters died with him in the flames. One evening during a sleepover, my friends and I took turns trying to scare each other with ghost stories, and we thought it would be fun to go to the haunted house in the dark.

We walked through the gate together and up to what remained of the door. There were many shapes that began to form in the clouds of ash and gray hands reached out from the shapes. As we turned to run, screams rose up out of the ashes. “Help us, we’re burning!” they cried. We started to run, thinking that as soon as we were clear of the house we would be safe. But as we reached my home, I glanced over my shoulder to see a hand reaching for me. We ran up the stairs to my room, slamming that door tight, too.

None of us expected to sleep after this, but the fear had exhausted us and we fell into a deep slumber. This was the scariest night of our lives.

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That summer my friends and I wanted to go trip together. So we decided to search online for beautiful places we can visit.  One of my friends found this trip to a wonderful place with the most beautiful nature named “Sanctum” and surprisingly it  was super cheap. We got so super excited and immediately booked for our trip without having second thoughts. From the excitement, it spilt our mind to search or read about the city we’re going to. Little did we know what was waiting for us in there.

The day of the trip came and me and my other three friends Sara, Noah and Henry packed our things and were ready to hit the road. In the beginning, everything was normal and going as planned. While we were driving towards the house that we rented, we saw how amazing and beautiful the trees and nature of the city were. After we arrived, we had dinner together. While we were eating, Noah and I had a fight, so I stormed out and left the house. As I was walking down the street, I saw a sign of a carnival so, I thought to myself why not go there to clear my thoughts. I arrived there and started watching people having fun. Suddenly I started feeling strange and creeped out as if someone is watching me. I turned my head back to see a scary huge man standing behind me.

I knew that this thing is not human even though he looked like one. That is because his legs were not touching the ground. I was horrified and my heart beat was racing. Right at that second, I turned my head and started noticing that non of these people are human because non of them were actually standing on there feet- they were floating. I started shaking and I stopped breathing for a second. That’s when I turned back and started running back to house. Just as I thought this day couldn’t get any more worse,  I opened the door of our motel, I saw Sarah holding a knife and trying to cut her wrist. I was petrified, so I screamed from the top of my lungs. Sara heard me and dropped the knife. It was as if my voice had awakened her because she looked shocked that she was trying to kill herself as if that was not her intention. She started crying and explaining to me how she is not feeling like herself , as if there’s some kind of strange energy in this place that is controlling her mind and actions.

Right at that moment, the boys came running from the garden. We didn’t ask what was wrong with them because we knew it wasn’t time to sit around and tell stories. we just knew that there is clearly something wrong about this place and that we needed to get the hell out of it ASAP. We quickly called the cops to come pick us up. In the meantime, we were all sitting together but none of us spoke a word, we just kept staring at each other in silence and fear, wondering what is happening? What is wrong with this place? What are things we saw if they are not human? Is this place haunted? Is it possible we are imagining things ? If so, how come we are all imagining the same things? All these questions were not answered. When the cops arrived, we went outside for them to takes us home. The shock was when we looked around, the place looked so different and nothing similar to when we first arrived.  It was abandoned and the trees and nature even the carnival were all gone and it was just a big deserted city. It was like that city never existed and were imagining it all along. We started looking at each other in shock like how could have this happen. Right at that second one of the cops asked us what were we doing in such an abandoned place. But no one answered him, we knew deep down that no matter what we say, no one will believe us so we just kept quiet. Then the cop added that we shouldn’t be here as this area has been abandoned by its citizens long time ago for unknown reason.

Later on, the cops took each one of us home.

To this day we don’t actually know what had happened to us or who were those people we saw. But, we never spoke to each other or anyone about it. In fact we never spoke to each other at all after the trip. We wanted to forget about that day and believe that non of what happened or we saw was real. Even though deep down we knew it was real. We just chose to ignore it and live on.

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It was a dark and stormy night in the cemetery. I was walking alone and I was so scared. The night was really frightened and the weather was so windy and rainy.

Suddenly I heard a loud sound coming from no where and something moving without any reason and no body was there. I couldn’t move due to that scary sound .My whole body was shaking and I got shocked. By that time, I knew that there is a gust in the grave yard. I tried to run away but I couldn’t because I was really scared. It was too cold  and windy . I heard a big noise and voices. I fell down ,and  my heart stopped pulsing . I was unconscious. My friend saw me and came very fast to help me get up. When I woke up, I told my friend. "What are you doing here and what happened to you?" she asked. She told me "You were about to die here in this cemetery for some reason!".

Till today, I don't really know what actually happened in there. I just feel scared when I remember how I felt in there all alone. It was the scariest night in my life.

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One day my friends and I decided to go to an abandoned house.  We gathered at one o’clock with all the gadgets we needed such as flashlights, water, phones... etc. When we arrived, I went forward and there was a lot of dust and cobwebs covering the surfaces, we walked cautiously, and suddenly we heard the sound of the door closing strongly.
We screamed in fear, but we thought it was from the air outside because the air was strong.

When we arrived in the middle of the house, we heard strange sounds. We didn't know where to get out, and we were all afraid. So we decided to leave the house quickly, and on our way out we saw a scary black cat standing in front of us.  We went back calmly and our friend Noor tried to keep her away, but the cat was very aggressive. She bit Noor and kept following us.

We ran running quickly to reach the door and while we were running, my flashlight fell from my hand so it was difficult for me to pick it up from the floor because of this cat. We tried to catch up with the sound of our other friends' steps, but luckily we got to the door and it was closed.  We tried to open it completely and finally I it did.  We ran away from this house and sat in a park that was on our way to relax a little.  We drank a lot of water. We took care of Nour's hand but she was still in so much pain.

In conclusion, I was so thankful that we didn't get hurt and as an advice, I always tell people to never give such scary experiences a try.

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It was a windy day in winter. The night before my father, my brother and had decided to go camping in Sakhir. My brother  just had his driving license, so my father let him drive. we got ready, we had already moved a few miles by the time that the wind was becoming strong. As we reached the desert, the wind became  stronger and the car started shaking.

We went over a big rock on the side of the road and the car flipped over easily like a coin because of the extreme strength of the wind. Somehow, I managed to stay conscious, while both my father and my brother fainted.However I was stuck and couldn't move.

As I was helpless, I started shouting  hoping that someone would hear me, but it was in vain. After all, we were in a remote area. Just then, I remembered that my brother had  his mobile phone in his right pocket, which was the one closer to me. I did everything I could to grab it and I managed to do so. Then, I called  an ambulance and we were rescued.

In the end, we were taken to the hospital, treated from some injuries, and we went home  in the same day. It had been a very long and scary day, but we all felt happy to be back home.

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One day my friends and I decided to go to explore abandoned houses and terrifying places in one of the old neighborhoods.
We went in one of the houses  and the door closed by itself. We kept looking at the room for a few seconds, but none of us dared and went to see who closed the door. Then, we got out of this room and  we were very scared. However we were still in the spirit of having an adventure. As we  walked, we felt as if someone else was walking  behind us. I could hear the sound of a breath very close to me, but when I turned, there was no one. I was not the only one who had this thing happen to, even my friends noticed it and then we ran out of the house.
This was the worst day of my life.

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During the winter break, I used to go to my grandma’s house. It was a cold night, so I decided to have a little indoor picnic with her next to the fireplace and catch up with her and what she did in the summer.

We were having such a nice time with each other talking about a lot of stuff and I told her about my life in school and the rumors that kids were spreading at that time. I told her the story about that kid that came to our class because he saw a really tall figure at the end of the hall standing next to that door that we never opened because in the 80s a teacher died there and everyone thought it’s haunted. Because my grandma went to the same school that I’m going to, she immediately knew what I was talking about and turned pale. So I asked her if what we heard was true. I was so confused but she started telling the story.

" It was a dark rainy day” she started, "My friends and I decided to go check that room and see if it was actually haunted. We went there at night so the teachers will not find us .The halls were terrifying and long; I felt like they will never stop. When we found the room, my friend Max went first and opened the door. The room was so dusty, dark and messy. We couldn’t turn on the lights because someone would’ve caught us so thankfully Emma brought flashlights with her. We started looking around the room and removed some books to get to the door and when we finally did I had to go first and open the door which was the first mistake that we did. We should’ve never opened that door. When we entered the room, it had a really long stairway to the basement so we started walking and  every time we go deeper it gets colder and you feel like someone is watching you . When we finally entered the basement, it was an abandoned library. I started getting exited because I really like books but when I started reading the titles I started getting anxious because they were about spells and dark magic. Suddenly,  the lights in the room opened and wasn't by any of us.  We then saw a tall dark figure so we couldn’t move. We were terrified .The lights stated flickering and he disappeared  and after being gone, we heard him screaming "GET OUT, NOW"  so we started running outside. Emma was crying and Max was so nervous. We stopped next to the supermarket. We were quiet all the time and we never spoke about that day .

I still remember what happened in there, every single detail. It was the scariest day of our life.

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“Tom, run fast, come on”, these are the words I hear in my dreams every day. I wake up dazed every time with sweat running down my forehead even though I turned on the air conditioner.

I started my day like every day, trying to forget these dreams. I showered and ate my breakfast quickly so as not to be late for my work, which starts at 9 am.

I arrived at the company at 8:55 am, but I was surprised that Adam, the receptionist wasn't in his place. I wondered to myself: this is strange, it is his first time to be late for this time, he usually comes before everyone, hey, isn't the place terrifyingly quiet?? Where is everybody?!! “Sandy!! Chris!! Elizabeth!! Where are you???” I tried calling my colleagues but to no avail, no one was there. Suddenly, one of the doors creaked, indicating that someone had entered. I was happy to hear this sound, but I stopped in my place, frozen and motionless when I saw what was near the door. It was...  a zombie!! My heart fell between my feet.

“Everyone is dead, There are bodies everywhere” someone shouted. I started running. I just wanted to run away from whatever I saw. Finally, “wake up” my mom said, standing near my bed. During breakfast, I told my family the dreams I continually have and they told me to stop watching horror movies.

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I woke up to hear knocking on the glass. At first I thought it was on the window but it really was  coming from the mirror.

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The last thing I saw was my alarm clock reading 12:07 before her rotten nails digged deep into my chest, her other hand muffling my screams, and I rose up straight in my bed, thinking it was just a dream..When I saw my alarm again it was 12:06  When I heard my closet door creak open.

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I grew up with my cats and dogs..it was normal to hear the scribbles on my door when I was sleeping..now that I live alone it is really annoying to keep hearing them.

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She asked me why I was breathing so deeply, but that wasn't me.

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My wife woke me yesterday at night to tell me that there was an intruder in the house, my wife had been killed by an intruder two years ago.

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A girl heard her mother shouting her name from the bottom floor, so she got up and went towards the stairs, as soon as she wanted to go down, her mother pulled her to her room and whispered to her, "I heard this too."

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All my life I've been in this house alone..I swear to God I've closed more doors than I have opened them.

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There is a picture on my phone that shows me sleeping.  By the way, I live alone.

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My daughter does not want to stop crying and screaming in the middle of the night, I visited her grave and asked her to stop..but this didn't find anything.

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'I can't sleep,' she whispered to me, crawling to the bed in which I was sleeping, and I got up very cold, holding in my hand the clothes in which she had been buried.

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It was the worst sleep I had in my life because of the nightmare that took over my mind.

The nightmare bagan on a black night with a full moon from a small hut in which an old man lives with his family and is accompanied by a big dog, the old man went out that night with the dog to bring some wood from the forest.

The old man managed to cut down some trees and take the wood, but the problem started here! The old man got lost in the depths of the forest and kept walking until he reached a house with a large black brick. He entered the house, and found  a beautiful table full of food in the house that made any person approach it involuntarily. After some time the old man found that he had already finished the food on the table and there was no morsel left. Suddenly he heard a hoarse and frightening voice that he did not know where it came from. The voice was saying to the old man that he would take revenge on him for eating his food. The old man coldly ignored this voice, and somehow returned to his home but the shock was that his family who was with him had been killed and there was no one left.

Then I woke up to find out that this was a scary dream .

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It all started when I heard my brother getting out of the house at one o'clock in the morning. He never gets out at this time so it was quite fishy.

I followed him until he arrived at an abandoned place, they were calling my brother “Boss”. I couldn't believe what I saw and heard. I never thought my brother could be one of these men especially their boss. Unfortunately, one of them noticed I was there, they started following me, I still didn't know how I got the energy to run that fast. Finally, I arrived home, all my body was shaking and I was breathing fast. I decided to tell my mother about all that I saw, and she was shocked. After I told her, we decided to tell my father. The next day I was going to go to my room until I heard my mother talking on the phone saying “she knew everything, we need to kill her immediately”. There were many questions in my mind, suddenly I hit the table by mistake and it made a sound so my mother noticed that I heard all that she said. I took a deep breath and ran as fast as I could. They were behind me trying to catch me. I couldn't believe what happened. "Am I their daughter? Are they my family? Why do they want to kill me?". While I was thinking about all these questions, a car showed up and hit me.

I woke up to my mother's voice trying to wake me. I was so happy that all that happened was just a dream and I am with my family. Later on, I told them about my weird dream and they started laughing.

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It was a dark and hot night. I was on my bed trying to sleep.

Then, my dad came and turned off all the lights and locked the door without knowing I was afraid of the dark.

I was scared. Suddenly I noticed something near the door and when I looked closely, there was a black shadow of a man. I got terrified and I didn't know what to do. I shouted and shouted with all of my power.

My dad heard me and came rushing into my room and turning on the lights. Then he asked me what happened and when I told him what I saw he went behind the door to see what was there and was surprised. The man was my mother's suspended dress, and it was moving because of the air conditioning. Finally, my dad left the lights on and the door open, and he went to sleep, and so did I. It was a really scary night, but it was also funny.

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In a dark gloomy night at Hogwarts city of magic, there was a boy who has super magnificent powers and huge army whom are called ''DEATH EATERS''.  There were working off to kill a young boy who was saved form a love potion by his mum against the most powerful witch alive , whom people are scared to call his name " VOLDEMORT'' and some say 'YOU KNOW WHO'' from how terrifying the name was to them. A night when the war begins at Hogwarts Voldemort against Harry, the young boy who lived.

That day was a complete mess to Hogwarts where the two armies were all together in the same place. The boy who lived (Harry) was surrounded by friends that stood for him all along and  showed him how real friends are! Some have survived, and some have been injured and most have died to show loyalty to their friend. When the dark lord '' YOU KNOW WHO'' tried his best and killed most of the army, he announced that Harry has to face him in the dark forest where students at Hogwarts are not allowed to enter or his friends will be dead! It was a terrifying decision,but he chose facing the dark lord without thinking to show his love and support to what his friends have done to him all along. He used the most powerful spells he knew ,and he tried his best. He worked hard , he lost family and friends. Lastly not finally , Voldemort couldn't hold more . His wand floated up and Harry caught the most powerful wand and DESTROYED him.

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This a true story scary that happened to me. When I was ten years old and during the U.S. occupation of Iraq in 2004. When I going home from school with my friend at 1 pm, we heard the loudest sound we have ever heard in our life.

We quickly ran into the house next to our school. When the bombing sound disappeared, all we saw are  ambulances rushing next to us. A lot of people were injured and the streets were full of blood and the dead bodies were scattered everywhere .The shops and houses were all destroyed. Every sight around us was terrible and scary .

I remember how I couldn't move from my place from this terrible sight. My family was happy to see me coming back home safely. It was the scariest day in my life.

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When night I went to my girlfriend's house and we were having a little party with our friends and everything was going well.

After all our friends had gone, I was sleeping at my friend's house. We went to her room and put on our pajamas. Suddenly we heard a screaming sound from the basement, and it was a very, very terrifying scream.

As we entered the basement, a gust of wind hit the door behind us.  We were afraid. Suddenly we heard the sound of screaming from behind us, and when we turned, we saw a little girl. Her hair was very long and her nails were long. She looked sad and terrifying. We tried to talk to her, but we heard a man's voice telling us to get out of here, and if you don't go out, our fate will be like the fate of that girl.

My friend and I ran outside at full speed and I fell on the ground on my face and suddenly I heard the alarm and I woke up. It was all a terrible nightmare.

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Zahraa Zakareya Mohamed Jaafar Hasan - 2 uni  4

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Zahraa Zakareya Mohamed Jaafar Hasan - 2 uni  4

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"who's there?”I asked. It was quiet that I could hear my breath quickening and rising in fear. Let's start from the beginning, it all started on that fateful night. I was playing a game of truth or a challenge together with my friends. In a moment of enthusiasm, I chose the challenge. I expected it to be normal, but they challenged me to enter the most terrifying haunted house in the neighborhood alone in the middle of the night. I couldn’t refuse the challenge, so I prepared myself for the next day at 12 am to enter the haunted house. I couldn't believe the rumors that people circulated about this house. The place was frighteningly quiet at first. I was wandering around the house with a small flashlight. I quickly stumbled and heard some strong noise coming from behind me. I rushed to the second floor out of fear. There wasn’t  any sign that there was a light and I cut my rope of thoughts on that voice that is getting louder and from the intensity of my fear I could feel the tears on my cheek, but I was silent .The sound was getting closer and closer to me, and I could hear the sounds of objects falling around me and something falling into my lap, then jumping behind me and pulling a cover and spreading a lot of dust. Out of fear, I closed my eyes until I heard the sound of the cat and when I opened my eyes I saw the cover on the ground and the window open.

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One of the women tells her story and says that one day she noticed a noticeable change in the behavior of her daughter, who is only 6 months old, and this change began after they moved together to a new house.

The daughter was laughing and playing alone but then started crying for no reason. At first, the lady imagined that the angels were teasing her  child, and this is very normal among children. But one night,  she heard the sound of her infant daughter screaming, so she immediately went to her room, and she was at the door of the room.

She heard the voice of a woman singing a lullaby to her child. She approached the door very cautiously and saw a lovely looking woman sitting near her daughter's bed. A tall woman with long black hair, wearing an old-fashioned dress. Aa soon as the mother entered the room, she immediately disappeared.

She knew then that it was a ghost and that the house was haunted. She was scared and asked her husband to move out from this house. Every one in the town then knew about this house.

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One dark night, my friends and I decided to watch a horror movie at the cinema.

When we arrived there, we were surprised because no one was in the showroom but us. The movie started at nine o'clock and we were excited, but something strange happened that night after the movie. The movie ended in the middle of the night we went out for dinner and because all the restaurants were closed at that hour, we went to the park to walk a little bit. There, we saw a food stall and an old man standing near it. Because we were hungry, we went to buy food from him.

As soon as we started eating, one of my friends started screaming because his food turned into cockroaches. I looked at my hand at the same time, and it was full of cockroaches. I started screaming hysterically and my hands were shaking and what made it more terrifying is that the food stall disappeared and the man showed up in a scary form. He appeared with a mouth full of blood, a single eye and his hands were burned to the point where the bone was showing up. He run after us and started screaming at us, saying things in an incomprehensible language. Everyone was shocked and scared. We started running until we stopped because I couldn't run any more. My whole body was shaking . The closest place was the cinema so we decided to go there again to ask for help but the big shock was that the cinema building turned into an old abandoned building full of cracks and there was a rope hanging on the door and it had a dead body on it. I couldn't handle it anymore so I called the police but they told us they couldn't find our location  on the device for some reason and that we had to walk to find some sign. After  walking for several miles, I spotted a sign of a village I had heard about long time ago before where everyone in it was murdered .I called the police again to tell them where we were and they immediately came to pick us up.

We were shocked knowing that it was still  seven o'clock, and it was as if all of this was a figment of our imagination, as the policeman told us that this place was deserted for more than 100 years and what we were saying is impossible even when we were in the police car we passed the same park, but we were surprised because it was like a haunted park , everything there was creepy.

Until today, I don't know exactly what happened and how we ended up in that place, and my friends told me that what happened was impossible, and I have to forget it the way they did. Every time I remember it, my body starts shaking. I still remember how I felt that day I was petrified and my body barely carried me. It was a scary, memorable day.

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One dark day, my friends and I were home alone so we thought about watching a horror movie.

My friend chose a movie about a stalker in the woods.The movie seemed interesting and I got excited to watch it.I brought some candles to make the atmosphere suitable for a horror movie and  I brought some popcorn and gave some to my friends.
In the middle of the movie, Nour said she was going to the bathroom, and after a while she didn't come back, I got worried about her and went to look for her and she wasn't in the bathroom.I went out with the rest of my friends to look for her outside, but we lived in a place where there was nothing but the jungle and some  wild animals.

We entered the forest, and we heard a voice behind the trees. We froze in our place from fear. Suddenly, Noor jumped from a tree, laughing out loud. She did a prank that I will never forget for the rest of my life. We got angry with Noor because she scared us.


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