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I learnt that my topic sentences have to be more brief and it has to summarize the main point of the paragraph. I also have to be more structured in the writing of the textual by paragraph. I also feel that i have to analyze the text and plan my essay before i start writing. I feel that in the first essay, the writer could have included the PACC in the first paragraph.

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I learnt that i need to be more detailed in the way i write my elaborations. I need to have more examples and evidence to supports my points. I also should use a clearer PEEL in my paragraphs so that it has a smoother flow and is more in depth. I should also have a more organised essay so that it is not jumping from one point to another but instead also has a smooth flow

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I think that the first paragraph was very clear on what the writer was going to analyse in the essay in a step -by-step-process. I can learn from the good elaboration in the paragraphs. The writer gave a very detailed description, followed by a reason or a explanation, and then gave the effect on readers. I think I should try to follow these steps after I analyse one thing. I also learnt how to explain the ties in the image and language in depth.

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I learnt that I need to be more organised with my points when doing an analysis on advertisements. Usually, when my points are very disorganised and all over the place. I should instead elaborate my points using 'PEEL' like how it is in the sample essay. This will allow better organisation of my points so that my analysis can be understood better. Also, I need to analyze the texts more in depth. Usually, what I analyze is not the point that the creator is trying to get across. This can be achieved by looking at more sample essays and even my friends' work to help with my analysis. Like in the sample essay, the analysis is very in depth and is very detailed. I also need to elaborate more on culture and context. I only write about a paragraph when so much more can be said. Looking at sample essays can also help me with this problem as I can familiarize myself with how writers elaborate on the culture and context of the advertistment or write up.

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I learnt that i need to gather my ideas quickly and be more observant to spot more things to analysis quickly. I also need to remember to describe the effect on readers so as to make my point a valid point and not merely stating the facts.

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I learnt from these two essays that i need to improve on the way i stucture my topic sentences. I should not tell the reader what is shown in the advertisement or text but instead elaborate on why the author placed certain pictures or words in certain places and explain what effect it has on readers. I also need to improve on my introduction, especially the Context and Culture. I need to state what culture is the text written against and how the text or advertisement is in context to real life situations.

The author of the first essay could improve on the way he or she writes the topic sentences. The topic sentences only tell the reader what is shown in the advertisement and does not explain the purpose of it or the effect on the reader to conveince them to do a certain action. Also, he or she should add the culture and context of the advertisement as it was not stated clearly in the introduction.

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I learnt that I need to elaborate more about the details and not just state the things I see. I also need to explain why certain things are placed in a certain manner and explain the effects on readers. I also need to work on how i present my topic sentence, so my paragraphs would look more organised, instead of a lot of different points in a paragraph.

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I learnt that it is important to elaborate clearly in detail when analysing, not simply describe. The analysis should also link back to the audience, how it affects the audience, and the effect on the audience. Moreover, each paragraph should consist of one main idea so that the textual analysis is organised. The writer could have further elaborated on the introduction and explain more about the audience, context and culture of the advertisement.

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I need to organise my essay so that it flows n it does not feel like its all over the place. I should also put one point in one paragraph. I need to be clear in terms of stating my context and i need to state the main culture

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i think that i need to improve on explaining my context and culture . i feel that i can also try to elaborate my point clearly and not just state what i see. i think should try to analyse the ariticle or advertisement properly and not leave out any detail. ( don’t elaborate to much on unimportant points as well) i have also learnt how to organise my essay well to make it fluent when read.
i feel that the writer can elaborate more on the context and culture.

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From the sample essays, i need to improve on my elaboration on the culture and context of the articles that I'm analysing. I also think that i can further improve on describing the effect of language and stylistic features of the article on readers. I also feel that the organisation of my essay could be planned in a way that flows. From reading the two sample essays, i also understand how to write a proper topic sentence and ways to elaborate on it.
The writers could have elaborated more on the cultures of both advertisements.

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I need to work on my topic sentence by making what I'm going to write about in the following paragraph specific and then sticking to it so my organisation is better. I should also plan my essay better, for example, dedicating 2 paragraphs to the image of the text and not writing bits and pieces of the same topic in different paragraphs. I also need to work on my culture and context by differentiating both more clearly and elaborating more on them. I could work on my vocabulary specific to those to be used in textual analysis. I think the writer could have talked more about the effects on reader like how it would influence the way the reader would act after reading, and a more elaborate culture and context in the introduction.

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I should work on my culture and context to give background information on the purpose of the articles being analysed. I should write more detailed culture and context by stating examples of relavant issues. Moreover, i should give evidence from the text or images to show my point and link my points back to the text and what he writer said in the texts. I should also describe what effect the writer’s words would have on the reader and the expected outcome of the reader after reading through the article.
The writer could have given a deeper understanding of the context of the article and how Concern is trying to aid the survivors of the flood. The writer could have also elaborated on the effect on the readers by stating the expected actions of readers after reading the article

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I should elaborate more on the purpose and provide evidence to it. Then state the effect on the readers. I should also be more organised in terms of what i am writing to make it more structured and not messy.
The writer could have elaborated more on the context and culture>

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For my introduction, I need to elaborate more on the context and culture. I need to to use words that are more descriptive which can elaborate the the purpose of the use of certain stylistic features. I should also highlight the effect on readers and how it links backs to the expected outcome. When analysing the advertisement or news article, I need to make sure that the organisation of my analysis is well structured and not all over the place.
The writer could have elaborated more on the context and culture.

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I need to organise my paragraphs in such a way that everything flows starting from the introduction itself. This will give a clearer view of everything that needs to be addressed that can be further elaborated. By doing so, I can ensure that each point is explained clearly with evidence and effect on readers. By indicating clearly the topic sentence for each paragraph, the essay becomes a lot clearer and easy to understand.
The area for improvement would be a deeper understanding in terms of the PACC, culture aspect.

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I should dedicate one paragraph for culture and context especially if there are a lot of things for me t cover. It is also important for me to further elaborate on the evidence from the article. There should be a topic sentence for each paragraph and the topic sentence should be further elaborated.This would make my essay more organized.
The writer could have shown deeper understanding of the culture in the text.

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I should describe the images in more detail and elaborate on the purpose of the image used. I also learnt how to analyse tagline and how symbolism is used in terms of how to be more specific in the explanation and linking. The creator can improve in having a clearer culture and context in the introduction.

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I should clearly state my PACC in my introduction so that i will know what to focus on for the rest of the essay. I should be more specific in terms of my description of the stylistic features. I should also be more aware of the effects on the reader as I usually forget to link the descriptions to the effects on the reader.
The writers could have been more specific in the advertisement's cultural background.

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i should be more specific in terms of pointing out how does the author's writing style affect how the reader views the advertisement. Also, I learnt that it is also important to link what I'm writing to the article and its main purpose, how the point helps the author to bring across his point to his readers.
The author could include a more detailed culture specific background for the essays.