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In the article ‘’Collapse’’ by Diamond (2005) the author focuses on the environment and how we destroyed it.People from all professions and ages lead to transform the world day by day.The writer explains environmental issues and how people  can stop these problems a lot more easily in future. Mankind will impress with these pollutions types (grammar makes it difficult to understand). Moreover, this these pollutions types will affect next generation but the writer is hopeful about for future...

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In the article entitled “Collapse” by Diamond (2005) the author points / pointed out the dozen group of  some serious effect of environmental destruction by man. Firstly, he refers ed that the to serious environmental problems. For example, natural habitats are destroyed to open up space for cities, villages. Such kind of structure which affects environment dramatically extremely. Moreover, the author argued /argues that fossil fuels are non-renewable, and they cause more CO₂ emissions to extract fossil fuel which is getting dirtier and more expensive. Such chemicals affect people’s health negatively. Toxic chemical are also released from factories, and it damages people’s health. The author also compared / compares past and current generations about increasing of human population (what does he stress about population? what is the actual problem- our number or our lifestyle?). He is concerned that these problems may be a risk for future, but they are resolvable. He concluded / concludes that current generations have opportunities to which make a difference by to learning the mistakes from the past.

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In the article entitled “ Collapse” Diamond J. (2005) claims that people and their activities damage to world’s sustainability seriously. First the writers explains destruction oying of natural habitats, use / usage of fossil fuels, and toxic chemicals. These are affect our world negatively. We open up space for cities, farm lands and even golf courses. According to first example golf courses damage world’s green areas (this is one of the reasons, make sure you state the other reasons why we open up space. Use reporting  verbs and refer to the writer such as the author claims that ... / the author criticizes ...) . Moreover, the author stresses that overconsumption ed of resources energies which are fossil fuels affect the future cost of these energy and future generations will be affected with its costly that. Diamond states that the Other negative impact is that using toxic chemicals damage  health, and people’s food and body are affected by them unhealthily. In addition, he claims that over much growing population has /poses a risk for future resources which will be used by future generations like people in the third world countries  people’s resource which are not insufficient than the first world countries opportunities. (rewrite this part as it hinders understanding and state clearly the consumerist lifestyle factor .)The writer concludes by arguing that he  it is cautious but on the other hand, writer has a hope for future (you need to state why is he hopeful? state the reason here?)

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In the article entitled "Collapse" Diamond (2005)

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Diamond (2005) in his article, “Collapse” discusses the environmental problems and people's experience. Therefore, he hopes people can solve these problems well. Diamond starts with the fact that human being demolish natural habitats when people build cities and villages, farmlands and pastures, roads. For instance, people also destroy forests to make timber and paper. He then moves on to underline the fact that reaching fossil fuel is hard in this year because people used it too much  during the last decades. Therefore, People need to find fossil fuel in deeper underground than last decades which is dirtier and more expensive. The third problem Diamond present is the chemical industry and many other industries that release chemicals into the air, soil and oceans and cause toxic chemical pollution. These toxic chemicals can  be used for insecticides and herbicides. However, the toxic chemicals affect people’s lives negatively as these toxic chemical cause a lot of diseases. Therefore, the chemical toxic causes deaths. He underlines the fact that human activities produce harmful gasses. For example, people produce CO2  and emit it into the air when they use fossil fuels. Fossil fuels have damaged ozone layer which protects the world from harmful sunlight. Ozone layer cannot protect  the world well. Therefore, the world temperature has increased year to year. Diamond also states/warns that over population destroy the world because more people demand more food, more space, more water. Therefore, these reasons cause pollution. In addition, first world countries affect over population more than third world countries because people want to immigrate to first world countries from third world countries (Is it about immigration or consumerist lifestyle? Check this). However, this situation increase disease because variety of people live in fist world countries (not stated by the writer). He states (use reporting verbs that reflect the author's attitude - he warns / he claims / he criticizes...) , overpopulation in fist world countries causes environmental problems because more people consume resources than third world countries. For instance, On the average, each citizen of the U.S., Western Europe, and Japan consumes 32 times more resources such as fossil fuels, and puts out 32 times more wastes, than do inhabitants of the Third World countries (do not go into details, be generic the First World Countries consume world resources more than the Third World Countries) . We have to consider that we do not need to use new technology to protect our environment or our future (state what do we need?) we need communication. Diamond concludes, definitely, the cause of environmental problems are us. If people really want to protect the environment, people are expected to focus make  their attention more on collaboration.

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In the article entitled “Collapse” Diamond (2005) criticizes human’s natural resource consumption. He describes overconsumption of natural resources under four main categories. First, the writer states /lists the natural resources which people are destroying. He explains that people destroy natural habitats in order to convert them into places which humans (use plural to generalize events) makes maximum profit. The Writer/author wants to remark (stresses or highlights are better options) that more than half of the world are have already been  has already been converted to man-made habitats human uses. And this behavior doesn’t come to a close because of producing human’s essential materials such as paper (not needed to be mentioned as a specific example). Moreover, people are affected all because of this conversion and destruction. Second the author mentions another issue which is ceilings on natural resources (make sure you express the ideas in your own words or it is difficult to understand the idea presented here. He says that (this verb does not make the attitude clear instead you can use - warns) people are using resources which is very harmful for people and nature. Furthermore, people are not don’t aware of the harm of these resources harms and they easily access them (extracting these resources is getting difficult!). The other issue is the harmful gasses people’s harmful things that they generate because of human needs, many industries produce toxic chemicals and they directly release these chemicals into the air. Moreover, gadgets people use daily people’s objects which use daily life such as refrigerator are not only harmful for nature but also harmful for people. These harms This harm causes important natural and health problems such as global warming. The last issue is problems which originate from the increase in human population. He said (remember the reporting verbs we have studied in class) that humans people have cause harmful impacts on nature. In this issue, he renew that current population already damage nature. If the population increases rapidly, we don’t prohibit damaging nature (language hinders understanding the idea here). Government should solve this problem rapidly. The author concludes by commenting on that if people and governments take precautions (who does Diamod actually hold responsible?) , these problems will solve easily and we live healthy ful in the world.

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In the article entitled "Collapse" Diamond (2005) mainly argues about human beings who destroyed the natural habitats in the previous centuries and he warns us not to display the same behaviour. The author begins with in a critical tone ; by refferring to the fact that forests being destroyed to show the extense significance of this problem. The author then claims that the humans will have to face financial crises due to the fact that natural gas and environmental (check does the writer mention natural gas?) will be higher. Furthermore, author talks about (use reproting verbs that make the author's attitude clear like argue, claim, criticize, hope) the effects of toxic chemicals and he mentions that people cause global warming which may be significantly increased. After words Following this the author mentions the growing population he also claims, in a sarcastic tone, the number of human population poses a risk is enough for the world. He then displays that how the humans' consumption is important. The author warns us that the problem will get worse and mentions that migration from low-impact countries  to high-impact countries is one reason (Is migration or adopting the first world lifestyle dangerous?). He goes on by refferring to show that helping other countries is not enough they should not also forget protecting the global resources. He then criticizes politicians about environmental problems and mentions that the only keeper is the politicians (does he state this?). He concludes, in a hopeful tone, by encouraging the political leaders and readers to learn from the past mistakes and use the natural resources in a beneficial way.

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In the article entitled with "Collapse" Diamond (2005) the writer criticise that why people make world more livable and sustainable place instead consume unconsciously.

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In the article ‘’Collapse’’ by Diamond (2005) the author focuses on the environment and how we destroyed it.The writer focuses on states the destruction of the environment in 4 categories. Firstly, the writer indicates the one of them which is natural resources that we are losing which people destroy such as forests, wetlands to create more villages and roads. Following this, the writer points out that the second problem which is ceilings  fossil fuels are becoming increasingly expensive and dirty. He also states that the third problem is that the harmful things (informal and vague , avoid using the word "thing" in academic writing) that people created which things that harm damage people’s and animal’s health body and also air pollution that killed more than 130,000 people in a year.He indicates the fourth problem is the population growth that is the Third World countries covet the First World’s things and many people immigrate and immigrants may have difficulty in the First World’s countries (language hinders meaning and make clear why population is a serious issue?).As a result,the author says (use a reporting verb that makes the attitude significant) that we can find solutions to the problems that we create,solve environmental problems and use things (avoid using this word) like television and newspaper,learn lessons from the past and make our future better.

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In the article entitled "Collapse" Diamond (2005) criticizes the individual's consumption of natural resources, loss of forests and overconsumption of some resources goods like energy freshwater, and photosynthetic capacity. The writer focusses on some topics about this problem (no need to for too generic sentences). First, he focusses on natural resources which we consume in a bad way and absuming (check this word from a dictionary) day by day. The author wants to highlight that more than half of the world's original area of forest has already been converted to other uses (briefly state what are these uses?). The author complains about the ceiling issue (express the ideas in your own words). People should be more sensitive about the consumption of this kind of source (briefly explain why?).He also mentioned toxic chemicals and some harmful gasses which can cause serious problems for our life like global warming (make sure you mention the health issues too). He concludes"we are the cause of environmental problems" in a critical tone (is he simply ciritical? what does he suggest?).

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In the article entitled "Collapse" Diamond (2005)

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In the article "Collapse" that is written by Diamond (2005) ...