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Dear Mary ,
Thanks for the invitation to your party the next sunday .I have some questions for this party.
First of all I ask you what clothes I wear in the party . Its a formal or a casual party?What about a blue jean and a black t-sirt its a casual dressing and it is amazing i bought last week .Also I could  make  some pizzas I cook perfect
Finally I want some directions because i don't know where is your home . I ask you because if i come on foot or with a car
I am sure we will have a great party
I will waitmg your e-mail about your awnsers
see  you at the party
kisses
stamatia

EDITED LETTER:

Dear Mary,
Thanks for the invitation to your party! Although, I have some questions about this party.
First of all, I want to ask you what clothes should I wear to the party? Is it a formal or a casual one? What about blue jeans and a black t-shirt? I really like the casual style and I think it looks amazing! I bought it last week. (this is how your paragraph should look like) Also, I could make some pizza, I cook perfectly.
Finally, I want some directions to your house because I don't know where it is located. I ask you because I need to catch the bus to get there so I don't want to be late! (this is an example/idea about directions)
I am sure we will have a great time at the party! I will be waiting for your e-mail with your answers. See you there!
Kisses,
Stamatia

SCORE: 10/20
Overall impression: 2/5
Task fulfilment: 3/5
Organisation: 3/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

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Dear Cristina,
Thank you for inviting me to your party next Saturday. I would be my pleasure to come! However, I would like you to give me some information about it.
First of all, I'm thinking of putting on a black dress I bought a last week. It is amazing, I look forward to wearing it. I could bring some snacks my dad loves to cook we can also get crisps that will be on our way.
Do you want to come from my house so that my dad can take us? Because I don't know where the house is.
I'm sure we will have a great time at the party! I'm writing for your reply.

Yours, Marianthi

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Cristina,
Thank you for inviting me to your party next Saturday. It would be my pleasure to come! However, I would like you to give me some information about it.
First of all, I think I will wear a black dress that I bought last week. It is amazing and so beautiful. I could bring some snacks too! My dad loves to cook so he could help me. I can also bring some crisps too.
Do you want to come from my house so that my dad can take us? Because I don't know where the house is. (You can't tell your friend to come to get you because it's her party and she will have guests at her house already. You just need to ask for directions on how you can find her house.)
I'm sure we will have a great time at the party! I'm waiting for your reply.
Yours,
Marianthi

SCORE: 10/20
Overall impression: 2/5
Task fulfilment: 3/5
Organisation: 3/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

You need to pay more attention when you answer the topic questions and explain a little more your ideas in order to have a better overall impression of the letter.

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Dear Anna,
Thanks for your invitation for your party . I'd love to come. I sent you this letter , to give me some informations about the party.  I am sure it's going to be an amazing party!
First of all, i would ask you what should i wear at the party ? I saw yestarday an amazing black jacket , a blue pant and a short white t-shirt. Should i dress this set or something else (formal or this set that i bought)By the way i don't know where is your house, basically, i want some informations. It's near by my house or far away ? I ask to know , to come on foot or my car.Oh,don't forgot! My mum makes so delicious burgers , do you want to bring something else ?
I will waiting for your answer!
Take care,
Valentine.

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Anna,
Thanks for your invitation to your party. I'd love to come. I am sending you(tense correction) this letter because I need more information about the party. I am sure it's going to be an amazing party! --> (that whole sentence should be in the last paragraph, not here!)
First of all, I would like to ask you what should I wear at the party? Yesterday, I saw an amazing black jacket, a pair of blue pants and a white t-shirt. Should I choose to wear(not dress) this outfit(not set) or something else?
By the way, I don't know where is your house. Basically, I want some directions(not information). Is it nearby my house or far away? I am asking in order to come on foot or by car. Oh, I almost forgot! (don't forget is wrong here) My mum makes delicious burgers, do you want to bring some? --> (again, this whole sentence should be in the second paragraph, after the clothes section)
I can’t wait to hear from you!
Take care,
Valentine.

SCORE: 10/20
Overall impression: 2/5
Task fulfilment: 4/5
Organisation: 2/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

Pay attention to the structure of each paragraph! You have to follow the pattern we talked about!

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While I was walking to school, I saw a little dog under a tree. I went straight to him to help him and see If he was okey. He needed help, he was very hungry and he seemed sick, he was so small and I was warried. I thought of taking it to my nearest vet to see that it was really good.
After I arrived at the doctor's office I explained to him what had happened. I gave the dog to the doctor to examine it and waited for the results. After they finished the examination, the  doctor told me that he did not have anything, he just wanted care and a warm place to stay for a few days.
I thought of taking it home to take care of it for a few days. I was scared If my family would want it in the house but I had to keep it. After I got to their house I explained the story to them and they accepted. I immediately went to a super market to buy food. As soon as I got home I put him in a bowl of water and his food. While he was eating I went and prepared his warm house for him. After days we all loved the dog and decided to keep it forever.

EDITED STORY:
While I was walking to school, I saw a little dog under a tree. I went straight to it to help it and checked If it was okay. It needed help, it was very hungry and it seemed sick, it was so small and I was worried. I thought of taking it to my nearest vet to check for any wounds or even more.
When I arrived at the doctor's office, I explained to him what had happened. I gave the dog to the doctor to examine it and I waited for the results. After they finished the examination, the doctor told me that it did not have anything, it just wanted to take good care of it and it needed a warm place to stay for a few days.
I thought of taking it home to take care of it for a few days. I was scared so I had to keep it by my side. After the visit to the doctor, I got to their house and I explained the story to my family and they understood. I immediately went to the supermarket to buy it food. As soon as I got home, I prepared a bowl of water and another one with some dog food inside. While it was eating I went and prepared its warm corner to spend the next days. After a week, we all loved the dog and decided to keep it forever.

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Dear Rafa,
Thank you for inviting me to your party.I send you this letter because I have some quetions about your party.
First of all i will ask you what i was wear to your party.Formal or casual clothes?Yesterday I bought a new jeans and I want to wear it.I'm sure you are like it.Do you want to bring some cap cakes?My mom makes delicious cup cakes,you and your guests will love  that.
I want some informations about where is your house.If you can write me back and send me your adress and which bus station is the nearest to your house.I'm geting a bus to come to your party because no one can lead me .
I wish we have a wonderful time at your party and it will be unforgettable!!a
I'm looking forward to your answer.
Take care,
Joanna

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Rafa,
Thank you for inviting me to your party. I am sending you(tense correction) this letter because I have some questions about it (party: try not to repeat the same words over and over)
First of all, what should I wear to your party? Formal or casual clothes? Yesterday I bought a pair of new jeans and I want to wear them. I'm sure you are going to like them. Do you want to bring some cupcakes? My mom makes delicious cupcakes, you and your guests will love them for sure!
I want some information about where is your house. Please write me back and send me your address and which bus station is nearest to your house. I'm getting a bus to come to your party because none of my parents can drive me there.
I believe we will have a wonderful time at your party and it will be unforgettable! I'm looking forward to your answer.
Take care,
Joanna

SCORE: 12/20
Overall impression: 3/5
Task fulfilment: 5/5
Organisation: 2/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

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Dear nick,
l am writing to you because l want if know  where ,what time and many other and thanks for the invited me.

First of all, l want if know what will dress mask,casual clother or formal.Also will have food and drinks very important info and what will want if bring because l thinking bring votka and chips and l make very good sweats if you want  if bring. Moreover  someone l know will come to the party? because  l  will feel alone and will come people out of  school? Also my dad ask my  who will be your parents.

Finally l want info, where are you home because l will lost and i know if come with my legs, my parents, taxi or bus.

See you soon
Efthimis

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Nick,
l am writing to thank you for the invitation to your party! I think we will have so much fun!
First of all, l want to know, is it a casual or a formal party?. Also, do you want me to bring some food or drinks? I can bring some refreshments and chips. Moreover, I am a great cook so I can bake and bring a delicious cake! I think you will love it.
Finally, l want some directions to your house. Could you let me know how to get to your place? I will come on my own so by car if my parents don't need the car.
I'm sure we will have a fantastic time there! I'm waiting for your reply!
See you soon,
Efthimis

SCORE: 9/20
Overall impression: 2/5
Task fulfilment: 3/5
Organisation: 2/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

I wrote an example letter based on the info that you gave in order to see how a complete letter looks like.

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Dear Sophia,
Thanks for your invitation will be very happy to come  your party.However I want to ask you some questions  about the clothes and food.
First of all I want to ask you about the clothes . I'm not very sure  for what to put. To put something formal or something simple? Last week I went shopping with my mom at the mall and got a set with a bellows and a T-shirt but also have something simpler.  Maybe to bring them there for us to choose together? Also  about the food my dad makes awesome cupcakes and my mum makes amazing pizza  ans I can bring some chips and juices. And one last thing I also want you to send me the address and the bell of your house bacause I will come by bus because my dad will be working that day. I'm sure that we'll have  a fantastic time at your party.
See you soon,
Marina

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Sophia,

Thanks for your invitation, I will be very happy to come to your party. However, I want to ask you some questions about the clothes and food.
First of all, I want to ask you about the clothes. I'm not very sure what to wear. Should I wear something formal or something simple? Last week I went shopping with my mom at the mall and got a set with a ?bellows? and a T-shirt but also have something simpler.  Will it be a good idea to bring my outfits there and choose one together? (Maybe to bring them there for us to choose from together?) Also,  about the food, my dad makes awesome cupcakes and my mum makes amazing pizza and I can bring some chips and refreshments too.
One last thing I want to ask is to send me the address of your house. I will come by bus because my dad will be working that day. I'm sure that we'll have a fantastic time at your party.

See you soon,
Marina

SCORE: 13/20
Overall impression: 3/5
Task fulfilment: 5/5
Organisation: 2/5
Grammar and Lexis: 3/5

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Hi Alice ,
I hope you are fine and I think you are very excited for your party next week. I am writting to you to thank you for the invitation and for the email , Im loved to come .
One more reason , because I have many questions for your party. For example I ask what clothes to wear and what theme will the party have , formal or costume party . I saw yesterday an amazing dress and I wanted to see If I could I get it. Also what are you wanted to bring , Food or something to drink and If you want I know to making fantastic cookies because I want to help you.
Finally ask for directions to your house and If you stay near me to come on foot or with my car depenting. Tell me If you live an apartment building and on which floor.
I will waiting your letter with your awnsers about my questions.

Thank's for all , see you at the party
Kisses
Your friend
Marian!

EDITED LETTER:
Hi Alice,
I hope you are very excited about your party next week. I am writing back to thank you for the invitation and for the email. I would love to come!
I have many questions about your party. For example, I want to ask what clothes to wear and what theme will the party have. Will it be a formal or a costume party? Yesterday, I saw an amazing dress and I wanted to see If I would have the chance to wear it. Also, what do you want me to bring for food or drinks? I know how to make delicious (not fantastic) cookies and if you want I can bring you some!
Finally, I want to ask for directions to your house. If you live nearby, I can come on foot or by car.
I will wait for your letter with your answers to my questions. Thanks for all, see you at the party! Kisses!

Your friend,
Marian

SCORE: 13/20
Overall impression: 3/5
Task fulfilment: 5/5
Organisation: 3/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

I highlighted the changes I made in order to fix grammatical structure.
But you used a lot of linking words and that's a plus!

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Dear John,
Thank you for the invitation to the party. I am writing you a letter because I have some questions for you.
First of all I want to ask you what we are going to wear at the party, Is it a formal one? If it is formal I will wear my new jeans which I bought them last week. Anyway, I have another question, what do you want me to bring? for example I am doing a very tasty pizza, do you want to bring some? Also I don't remember where is your house, Can you tell me please? I think your house is near the meseum, Isn't it?
I am sure that we are going to have the most wonderful party of all the time!
See you soon, your friend,
Gregory

EDITED LETTER:
Dear John,
Thank you for the invitation to the party. I am writing you a letter because I have some questions for you.
First of all, I want to ask you what we are going to wear at the party, Is it a formal one? If it is formal I will wear my new jeans which I bought last week. (them was unnecessary) Anyway, I have another question, what do you want me to bring? (to bring what? you need to mention food and drinks in the first sentence) For example, I can cook a tasty pizza, do you want me to bring some?
Also, I don't remember where is your house, can you tell me(remind me), please? I think your house is near the museum, isn't it?
I am sure that we are going to have the most wonderful party of all time! (not of all the time that's a mistake) See you soon!
Your friend,
Gregory

SCORE: 14/20
Overall impression: 3/5
Task fulfilment: 5/5
Organisation: 4/5
Grammar and Lexis: 2/5

You used a lot of linking words and that's a plus! But, pay attention to grammatical structure and the vocabulary you use.

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Dear Athanasia
Thanks for invitation me to your party. I whould like to ask you some important information about your party.
First of all i want to ask you what kind of party it is because last week i bought a white dress with some beautiful flowers on the side and i think it's a really good choise if i wearing it with also white, a little bit hight shoes and i will straight my hair.
Do you want to bring some handmade cakes or pizza? They have incredible taste and you are gonna love it.  I wan't some information about where is your house. I will come with bus and i don't know if there is a station in your neighborhood. If you give me this information i'm sure i will find your house very quickly.
See you at the party.
Take care,
Eva

EDITED LETTER:
Dear Athanasia,
Thanks for inviting me to your party. I would like to ask you for some important information about your party.
First of all, (good use of phrase here) I want to ask you what kind of party it is because last week I bought a white dress with some beautiful flowers on the side and I think it will be a really good(great) choice to wear.
Do you want to bring some handmade cakes or pizza? They have incredible taste and you are going to love them. (gonna isn't correct, we need to use grammar as we learned it).
I want some information about where is your house. I will come by bus and I don't know if there is a bus station in your neighbourhood. If you give me this information I'm sure I will find your house very quickly. See you at the party!

Take care,
Eva

SCORE: 15/20
Overall impression: 4/5
Task fulfilment: 5/5
Organisation: 3/5
Grammar and Lexis: 3/5

you need more linking words and your letter would be way better!