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The detail and vocab words in this is amazing! The details are so vivid that I  can almost feel what the characters are sensing. I also loved how you used the number 7 a few times. Everything was just really great! Very nice job!

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I love the fact that you used animals instead of humans. It really stood out to me and made your story different from all the others. Why are 4 of the brothers name “rhyming” and the other two not? Is there a meaning or it was just an accident? Try making paragraphs so you can organize each idea and it’s clear to see when an idea is transferred to another. Great job!

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I love your climax. I was very engaged throughout the whole story. Why did u chose NKA as your organization name? You might want to check over for spelling errors and capitalization errors every time your done with a sentence. Otherwise, I loved it!

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This was very sad but interesting. I think it was written well and had good vocab.

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This was a very good story to read. It wasn’t very action packed, but more relaxed. The sorry could us more conflict.

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This fairy tale was very interesting. It had a combination of Disney, with magic. But also included some Grimm, with a dragon. Overall I think the story was well written, but could’ve been less confusing has it was hard to follow along.

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I really liked this story, I loved the plot and I really love all the characters. I like how you incorporated the fairytale part to it with the magic, but still had that grim part with the dragon. It was a little hard to follow along but other than that it was very good!

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It was a good story but kinda hard to follow along

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it was a bit confusing and it was a good twist on the stereo typical evil dragon

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the concept was pretty good and I enjoyed reading but I felt as though it was kinda sad and it could have used more conflict.

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I thought is was really great and I especially loved the ending. One suggestion I have is maybe add a little mor conflict/action to make the story more interesting.

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The juniper tree - This was very creative i I thought it was Disney like because is was pretty happy and nothing violent or gruesome really happened. Only a little bit. One thing I would improve on is taking time to describe each moment. I know that we had a limit as to how much we could write but I thought at some points it would have been better to slow down since it adds perspective to the story. It had a super interesting plot and I overall thought it was great!

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This fairytale was very interesting and seemed to be very Disney-like because there was barely any real violence. One thing that I would suggest is to try and slow down the pace of the story. The events in the story could be slowed down and elaborated on, so that the readers better understand what’s going on. Overall, this story had an amazing plot and was a great read!

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This fairytale is has an amazing plot, and has many fairytale elements. The authors use of dialogue was amazing and added a lot to the story as well. My suggestion is to give the readers a little more detail about the characters. In particular, I would try describing the witch, Kaelani in more detail. Overall, this fairytale was an amazing read, and a great fairytale!

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This was super well written. It had so much good vocab and was an amazing idea. It was pretty sad but I loved it!

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This fairy tale was a great read and had an amazing plot! “The Adventures of Esme and Camelot? had a great use of vocabulary and was really descriptive. To improve on your story, maybe you could talk about Esme’s past a little more in the exposition, so the readers better understand where she’s from and basic information about her. Overall, this fairytale was really interesting and contained many fairytale elements!

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This story was really fun to read and was really well written. The dialogue was perfect and the plot was very creative. One suggestion to make this story a little bit better would be to add a little detail about their journey up the mountain to the dragon’s cave.

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the person who wrote this did a great job. I loved the action and conflict involved which really kept me interested in the story.
One thing I would improve though is editing and reading through once you have finished since there were a few spelling mistakes throughout the story.

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I really enjoyed reading this story and was very happy with the ending, however in my opinion it could have used a bit more action and conflict to make the story more interesting.

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I really liked the concept of this story, however it’s very sad, but written really well

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I liked that there was a war against pigs and wolves.

Why were they at war?

Try to add less of a gruesome theme. I think that just might be me though.

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(Sampath) I really enjoyed reading this story because you made it from scratch. I have never heard of a story with this plot yet. So it was unique.

Who was the oldest?

You could make it like the oldest like Con controlled the pack and took away all of his belongings and kicked him out. Or you could make Simon have more of a role in the story.

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(Sampath) I really liked the word choice. He used intriguing words to pull the readers in.

Why did Rash kill Dan?

This is just a pet peeve but when you are saying Rash(Dan’s dog) you should probably put Rash, Dan’s dog, or at least I think that is how it is supposed to be.

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This was a very interesting story. I really liked how there was action

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This was a very good story. I liked how Curtis didn’t give up and was his true self

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This is a very good story. I really enjoyed the mystery and the clues.

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I really liked your story and especially the plot of it. If I were to make any changes it would be in the ending. I would just make it a little bit more developed. But overall was a great story.

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(Julian) I liked the vocabulary that you used in the story. There were minimal grammar errors but in conclusion was a great story.

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I really loved how you Used certain words to make it feel more like a fairytale. I also loved how you introduced the characters. There was a couple grammar errors but overall it was great story and plot!

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I really love the title of the story because it draws you in. One thing that could be improved is making the introduction longer so that you can introduce all the characters. I loved the story!

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I really liked how the story was wrote and how the plot was incorporated into the story. But the ending could of been more developed.

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Same as the Dragons Tasks, it’s very eye catching and appealing to others and also entertaining. Sometimes it can be confusing and not really understandable.

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This is very creative and amazing. Very PIE looking. It’s very entertaining and eye catching. But something I would say is you grammar/spelling, there are some mistakes but they are easy fixes!!

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I loved how meaningful this story was and how well you put the message “intelligence over rules beauty” from the very beginning! I also really like how detailed this writing is, it looks so professional! Your use of words after the quote was astonishing, there was a different word explaining the person who spoke’s action. I would like to make a few suggestions in order to further improve your writing. I could tell that you picked option #2 because the writing kind of stopped at about three pages. If this were a longer writing piece or a book than your writing would be perfect to fit this. But since we were limited to three pages I would suggest for next time to lessen the dialogue just a bit and try to not go as detailed. For example, when the bullies were making fun of Floreia you kept mentioning multiple times how the girls were calling her so forgetful which seemed to take up a lot of space. I would suggest writing all of your thoughts down as detailed as you want and then go back a try to look out for repeats, spelling errors, etc.. Overall I really loved this story and I would like to read the rest of it some day!

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This story was very cool. I really liked the plot, though it was a tiny bit confusing in the middle. I also really like that you used a little bit of rhyming, though I’m not sure if that was intentional. I did notice a few grammar errors, so next time, make sure you proofread. Otherwise, it was a great story. You’re doing great.

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I enjoyed reading “The Adventures of Esme and Camelot”. The author made an overall, really creative plot. The author may want to consider adding a bit more humor. -Josh M.

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I really liked this story, it was nicely written and had a dark turn. I liked the main character, he was easy to understand and empathize. It was slightly hard to follow, and the end was a little tricky to grasp, but the story overall was great.

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This story was very intriguing, and fun to read. I love the amount of action you included in this fairytale, and the vast vocabulary that I wish I had (T^T). Other than that, your descriptions were quite clear, allowing me to imagine the setting. However, the ending was quite confusing and abrupt, as a castle is suddenly mentioned. I do suggest mentioning the royal family earlier, but other than that, it was a good read!

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Overall, this story was pretty interesting. I loved the talking dog sidekick. However, there were some points where I was confused, and how characters popped out of nowhere. Next time, try to add more detail, but it was a good story.

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I really liked this story. The story always kept me hooked, and the plot was really interesting, along with the spooky vibe it gives off. I loved how you added a myth in your fairytale too. However, I think you should work on splitting your paragraphs correctly to make it more organized, because the paragraphs were a bit too long. But other than that, it was an interesting read!

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The story was a bit confusing, but it had the fairy tale plot were the man loves the woman. It was kinda cool that the dragon wasn’t mean, but was unfortunately killed at the end.

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The story is very creative and I liked the general plot of it, but there were a few grammatical errors here and there and the plot did get a little confusing and complicated at one point. But overall it was a good story.

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I enjoyed this story. The characters were really well written, and the opening got me instantly hooked. The names for the characters are also really good and fit with the fairy tale very well. I could also clearly see the Grimm elements in it, especially in the end. Sometimes, the plot confused me and I didn’t know the character’s intentions. Other than that, I really liked it!

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I loved this fairytale. I think that the plot was very intriguing. This story made me want to read more after I finished! I understood almost everything and there were very little errors. I just had a couple questions. First off, who is Alfred? You never properly introduced alfred, who was one of the main characters, which was very confusing. Something else I thought while I was reading this fairytale was that the pregnancy was a little weird. You said she noticed something one day then 4 weeks later the baby came. Normally pregnancies are 9 months, not just one month. Adding on to what I just said about the pregnancy, because of the time this story takes place in wouldn’t the doctor come to the house for the check up instead of the family going to them? Overall this is a fantastic story - Connor

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It was well written and provided many details. It had many fairy characteristics and a fairy tale plot. For example, the hero that kills the dragon, ends up marrying the princes. It was a good story.

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The plot of the story was very creative, though at times, I was kind of confused. Maybe you could add a little more description about how Ezrel and Ara know each other, and maybe you could tell us a little more about Ren. Overall, the story and plot was great and exciting. It was very interesting to read and i loved how the story made a turn.

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I really liked the storyline of this fairytale. I think it was a strong story but could improve if you added a couple more details to make it flow smoother. Something else you may want to add would be more dialogue, that could make the story easier to understand. - Connor

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I liked the plot of the story and you described Aeger very well. I liked the idea of a sacrifice and how you added fairy tale characters like dragons, witches, knights, and villages. Why did the priest like Serina? Something you might want to add is more description of the witch, Kaelani.

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The story was well written and it kept me hooked.

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The story had a good base which also included fairy tale characters such as the knight and the devil. The story was suspenseful, but some parts were confusing and short sentences.

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I liked how the story was very creative and I understood it very well. I liked how you described the character very well and I knew what her personality was going to be like before the rising action of your fairytale. You may want to consider adding more thrilling or for grimm. I loved the ending and it was very descriptive and action packed.

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This story is super creative.
The exposition was very descriptive and the plot was interesting.

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I like how u showed descriptively that Mary made Sams life hard, and the plot moved at a nice pace to me. I also liked how creative you were in terms of the plot in general and how it moved throughout the story.

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This story is very creative! I like how you described exactly how Mary made Sam’s life miserable. The bird was so funny! What did Sam feel when Mary was unkind to him? At some points, the story moves a little bit fast, but the ending is very satisfying!

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This story was really good. I like how at the beginning of the story, you described each character very nicely. One thing though, maybe next time you could explain how the little boy turned into a bird and back into a human. It was a little confusing. Overall, the plot is really good!

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I liked you’re plot and your execution. I’m wondering,How the girl got her hands back? Something that you can improve on is mabye describing how the girls got her hands back and describe the fight scene better. But overall you did a good job.

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I liked how you explained the characters backstories with each other. Next time i would just space out the lines more so its easier to read.

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I really enjoyed reading this story. There were really a lot of elements that made the plot interesting and kept me at the edge of my seat. However, I think you could make the story seem smoother for the reader by not using the word “Cinderella” so much. Maybe you could replace some of those with a pronoun such as “her” or “she”. Another suggestion I have is to make the ending of the story a little longer. To me it feels like the ending comes at you very fast, and it is hard to keep up.

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I like how the plot progressed and the characters and how everyone has unique powers, however there was a few parts I didn’t understand, but for the most part it was good -Ryan H

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I really like how she put the words that she wanted to emphasize in italics. It was just a little confusing when it first got to the bully part, but other wise I really like the story and it kind of reminded me of Cinderella!

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I think that the concept of the story was good. However, I noticed quite a few grammar mistakes. Also, I didn’t see a very complete story. It was all over the place, and I couldn’t identify the protagonist, or the plot. I was just confused.

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Warm: I really enjoy how this person was able to transfer the Grimm story in to a relaxing Disney story. They had lots and lots of the Disney elements which made it feel like a real Disney story. It was well wrote and easy to read.

Cold: I would say much except that there still a few parts that were a little confusing and not Disney like but overall was really good.

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(Julian) I liked the plot of your story the themes and morals were good. But it was a little confusing in the middle of the story. But overall was a good story.

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A peice of warm feedback is the vocabulary is good. Another peice of warm feedback is the characters make sense and there were not to many to forget over reading the story. A peice of cold feedback is the setting was not really broad also the weather wasn’t really talked about so it was hard to imagine in my head what is happening the the story.

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there are some grammar mistakes but the story structure was really good! loved it :)

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A good thing about this story is the simplistic plot. This is totally fairly tale like and it is very easy to follow for practically any viewer. Everything is fine but one thing I would suggest is to make the paragraphs just a little longer. It would be much better to read.

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I love how you did talking animals as the main characters instead of humans. This was very great overall, but I wish you had described what kind of animal the princess was. Otherwise ,your story was perfect!

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I liked the plot of the story and the themes and morales of it. Did you want to have us figure out the cat could talk in the middle of the story? You should consider adding more detail to the climax.

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I really like this story the plot was good and the ending was very comforting, but I don’t know if it was just me but I feel like it was more of a Grimm story the a Disney one.

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This story was really funny. I had a hard time finding who was the actual bad guy. I also would have put more info about the “Good” Wizard and why did he kill the boy. There were some punctuation errors. But everything else is good.

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I like the story, but I would add a name for the sea.

-David Freitas

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This is a great story! It’s very creative, while at the same time keeping the idea of good vs evil. I also think this story has a great message to it. Very smart thinking!
- Jessica Franklin

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I really liked this story! I think it had a good message at the end and was very interesting. The only thing was that some sentences were hard to understand, and some of them didn’t make sense, but overall the story itself was very good.

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I liked the way the story progressed, and how it tied parts from the start, to the falling action. I would suggest to make the story longer, this way you can add more details.

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I feel like this story was really well written but I feel like it was extremely sad but overall it was a good story.

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I like how there is a lot of symbolism and there is a good storyline. If you used option two, which I think you did, then there is a clear exposition, rising action and climax. I’m not sure if you made the family three people on purpose, but if you did, that is a good addition because it is more hidden. You could try to put dialogue in its own paragraph to make it more straightforward, but besides that it was a really good story.

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Kevin Tharakan

I like the introduction and how the story develops over time. I really like the suspense and how well paced the story goes. I think you could add a little more Grimm setting, instead of a happy setting. But overall, very good.

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I liked this story, but I thought you could have added more detail into how the boy got turned into a shark. I like the whole plot of the story.

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I thought the message was important and did a great job of sharing the point

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I could not have asked for a better ending. So engaged. Good job
-Aiden Austin

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I really liked the plot of your story. It was very interesting. The only thing I have to say is that it is kind of confusing to read.

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I like how detailed you were and how the story was chill and nice to read. But something I recommend is for you to be more specific in some stuff.

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I really loved how well you disneyfied this story and how well you explained the multiple events in this story! A few things that I would suggest to change would be to work on your transitions from one event to the other. For example, when Sam’s mother disappeared you kind of put it all in one sentence instead of explaining why she disappeared, you just moved on to him marrying another women. I am not 100% sure about this but  you were explaining that Margaret was pregnant with a boy and she was due in a week. I do not think this is very realistic to the time because the time this seems to be set in was a while ago. I just don’t know if tests like you were saying could’ve been possible, that part seemed a bit too modern. But this was a great story and I very much enjoyed reading it!

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I loved the idea of this story. I really liked how you included the moon. The story is peaceful to me. The only thing I’m wondering is, how did they get to the moon? I understand they had a ladder but did they canoe directly under the moon? Maybe next time you could be a little more specific.

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I really enjoyed reading this story, and I think the message was very well perceived. I think at some moments it was confusing, but overall it was really great to read.
Abby Bonhomme

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I really liked this story! I think it was very detailed and I think it gave a really good message at the end. I saw little error throughout reading. The only thing was that it was never mentioned how the boy became a bird, but overall I really liked the story!

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Overall this was a really great story. The characters were described so well and there was so much detail. The story was hard to follow but it was still amazing and it had so much detail.

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I think the story was cool and I love the ending mystery it really added to the story but I suggest adding more detail next time.

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Warm: I really like the fact that you changed the story it felt like it had the same concept but you made it your own, great job!

Cool: It felt as if it was still Grimm, and not enough of the Disney aspect.

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The way you wrote the story was really good. You did an amazing job.

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This was a great story I wonder how the boy reacted when he turned into a shark it was a great story good job
-danielly

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I really liked the concept of this story, that intelligence was valued over beauty. I liked the main charter and her sidekick, and the antagonist characters were easy to dislike and had me rooting for the main characters. It was a little hard to understand at some points, but I worked it out. Overall, great story.

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I really enjoyed this story. The character designs of all the characters, especially the ravens, are well made and are very fairy tale esc. I loved how you wrote Sven’s dialogue, it truly made him feel like a 10 year old child. Gunnar’s personality traits are also really well balanced, and I liked the vocabulary used in the story. What gave you the idea to give the ravens ruby eyes? Maybe you could give more of a description of what Gunnar looks like. Overall, I really liked this story.

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In The Day of the Red Moon, I enjoyed the fast paced turn in the story line. I also enjoyed the detail of the characters and their back stories.

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I enjoyed reading this story. I like the moral at the end and the use of having a tawny owl as an animal side kick.

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I really enjoyed reading this story. I liked how the setting was different from other stories and the character development. I don’t have any cool feedback.

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This story was very interesting. There was so many turning points in the story, and it kept me hooked. However, the story was really fast paced, and it was hard to keep track of. I like the diversity, but if you slowed down the pace of the events appending, the story would be perfect. Keep it up.

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I like how they added the phrases “Once upon a time” and “Happily ever after” because it’s commonly used in fairy tales. I also think they put in a good amount of dialogue in the story. I don’t think there is anything that they need to work on in the story and I really liked it.

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Something that I liked about this fairy tale is that it had a lot of dialogue. Something that I wonder is where is the boy? Something that you can improve on is I feel like you should make the story more connected to the title

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The story was amazing and had a great background to it. It was very intriguing. The only thing I would change it maybe break it up in to some paragraphs and not just one paragraph.