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I really like how you stated the sources when you analyze your subject's writing style. However, I noticed that you did not indicate any significant patterns besides the fact that Jessica did not like to read. To me, Jessica's perspective on reading is not a pattern, but a fact. I think you can solve this by reviewing your notes and interviews to find any possible pattern that was interesting about Jessica's reading process.

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The author wants to end the paper with something. However, if you could write a conclusion paragraph that sums up the paper, it will be much better.

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You give clear examples but I see that you use the word "Also" several times in the beginning of most sentences. Try to use different transition words or just remove the word as a whole because it makes it feel like a run on sentence.

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I see that you explained the reading habits of your subject. However, I think that you are trying to convey the importance of these habits by describing them . I suggest that you go more in depth about the significance of these habits and how it affects him as a reader.

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I can see that you thoroughly identify the trend and specify the origin of the trend. I also recognized that the subject prefers to read with a physical copy rather than electronic because from doing that she can be more engaged in the reading activity. However, where you are lacking is analyzation. I believe that your claim would be much stronger if you analyze why is her habit of reading a physical text significant. It is very important to identify the significance of the trend that you are describing because, without it, your report would just be a summary of the information gathered which is what you seem to do currently. I would suggest that you really look at how the physical copy benefits the way she interprets the text or at least draws conclusions on how electronic texts can hinder the way she reads it.

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DES-style feedback requires three components. That feedback must:
DESCRIBE what they see the writer trying to do,
EVALUATE how well the writing is doing that thing, and
SUGGEST revisions that would improve the draft.

Using the explanations of the star system below, rate the comments on this board on a 5 point scale.

3 stars is the default. 3 stars means "Thank you for the feedback" that uses the D-E-S strategy effectively. If you give more or fewer than 3 stars, you need to be able to identify why.

4 stars means the comment goes above and beyond the basic D-E-S and provides lots of useful detail.

5 stars is the the most useful feedback you could ever imagine receiving.

2 stars means you think the reader could have tried a little harder.

1 star means you think the reader didn't follow the comment instructions.

After you select the star rating for each comment write a short comment that explains WHY you assigned it that rating score, based on the DES strategy and the descriptions above.

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Ii gave it a 1 because t doesn't suggest what they should do to make it better they should've gone into more detailed

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I gave this 4 because she notices what she did good in but the person also tells her what she could work on

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I gave this a 2 because they do describe the issue is but they don't go beyond explaining or what other words they can use