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I wouldfix my dialog with more people talking.

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I

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I need more dialogue in my story and some details.

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When I read

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- After reading other's revisions I think that i should make my story better and make my voice sound really better.

- I thonk some kids should add more dialogue. I think I should describe my setting more.

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Stronger words or details

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I would revise my own story and look at the corrections they made

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They should describe more about the settin

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I would add more detail on how my climax got better. I also need to add more dialoge.

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I would change the dialogue and speak louder adding deatails.

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Add more attactments to it and pit more details

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I would change my dialogue and add people talking to others in my story describe the setting

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I would add more dialouge and detail.

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I would try to not laugh alot ,add more details,add more diologe

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I would change my diologe because some of my

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I think I would have explain my story better because I think I mumbled a bit and I would have made the story a little bit better and much more educated.

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The revisions I would make is that why I yeld at my mom when she told me to clean my room.

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I think I would add more dialouge and describe the outside characters.

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In my story I would have added more dialougue

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1. I think some revisions could be adding more dialogue or describing myself or charachter more.

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I think I needed more dialogue and also, I think that i needed a more interesting rising action

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Answer the following question in a complete sentence:

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Answer the following question in a complete sentence:

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1. After reading other's narrative pieces, what revisions would you make to your own writing?

2. How was peer feedback helpful?