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We liked that the first example was interesting. They did a good job explaining what their examples of acronyms were in the paper.

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In model one, we like how the author explains the terminology in depth. It was clear to the reader who may not be part of the discourse community.

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one thing we liked was that the author explains the different terminology and they fit the characteristic well.

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Did we need at least one citation from Swales and one from an outside source?

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One thing we liked was the organization. Another thing we liked was the vocabulary choice that was exclusive to the discourse community.

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One thing we liked about the first body paragraph was how they wrapped up the paragraph’s. The writer connected the last sentence to the theme of the paper.

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We want to imitate the explanations from model one, and how the sources are implemented to flow nicely in each.

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One thing we would change is in the second one the quote takes up most of the article.

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We liked how they explained the terms in an easy, understandable way for the audience.

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The second essay was not as captivating as the first one. It was harder to stay focused while reading.

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One thing were going to imitate in our draft is the organization of the first paragraph.

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We will use acronyms and explain them throughly in our paper, similar to the way that the first example did.

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one thing that we would change is the informal dialect in the second article when they are explaining the ways in which they communicate with the customers and coworkers.

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Do we need both the Swales’ quote and personal quote from a personal source in each body paragraph?

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One move we wanna imitate into our draft is making our quotes flow into our summary, outcomes, and overall essay

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For model two, we would like to see a little less quotes and a little more explanation.

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we want to imitate the explanations of the language used in the community.

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We are going to pull in our personal sources. We will start by defining which characteristic makes it a discourse community and then elaborate to how it applies to our own community.

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We liked in the first one how they stated their acronyms first and then later explained in depth what they were and what they meant.

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We liked how they explained each of the terms they use at their jobs. We also like how they used quotes from Swales article. They also had a good concluding sentence.

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Both of them had good examples of the characteristics. They used their outside sources really well. In the second one, they explained very well how their discourse community emphasizes on mental health.

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We would change the tone of the second one. It seemed kind of unprofessional compared to the first one.

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In model one, we liked how they explained what their shared vocabulary means and how it makes their discourse community. We also like the structure of their paragraph and how detailed it is.

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With the first model, the writer went in depth about the definitions of their acronyms that they use for the shared vocabulary portion of Swales discourse community definition.

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They could ease their way into the information of the paragraph, with a better topic sentence.

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We would want to imitate the first one and how they started out stating all of them and later explained them.

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Explain each topic in detail. We would also use the same outline and structure as they used.

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-We liked the amount of detail the author put into the shared vocabulary, showing a wide range of knowledge on the subject.

-In the second one we liked how the author showed that Swales' definition of a intercommunication is present within their community.

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Second model uses a lot more quotes compared to model one. The first model could use more sources and quotes other than just John Swales article.

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With the second model, we believe that they should add more length and descriptions about how mechanism for intercommunication is used in their community.

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How in depth the first model is, including more information like that into our drafts

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Making sure we use the right resources, and having good explanations for them. Also having an explanation on why the certain topic is important for that discourse community.

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In the first model, something we would change is connecting the segment more to Swales' definitions than just shared vocab.

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For the second one, they could use more outside sources other than Swales.

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We would like to incorporate the deatils that model one used and also use enough references that supports the themes.

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One thing we are using in our drafts would be usage of citiations and how they incorporate them into the paragraphs.