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improve essay writing, includes grammar, academic vocabularies and paraphrase

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1. practice how to write long sentences
2. accumulate conjunction
3. accumulate academic vocabularies from flax collocation and academic articles
4. practice academic writing frequently
5. practice paraphrase
6. review the key knowledge

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I chose articles from goole to practice paraphrase

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I chose articles from goole to practice paraphrase

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At the beginning, I was not good at paraphrase

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I searched Chinese articles from baidu (like goole), and translated into English 

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I searched Chinese articles from baidu (like goole), and translated into English 

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 My learning goal is to focus on improving my writing skills, including grammar and academic writing. Writing has always been my weakness, but it is a very important part, especially for a pre-master student in business, because the essay accounts for the majority of our total score. To this end , at the beginning of the semester, I gave myself a plan to practice writing.My plan started in the second week. From the second week, my main practice was paraphrase, which refers to retelling other people's opinions in our own language, generally changing the way of expression, part of speech or using alternative words. It is a technique that is often used in the process of writing academic essay. When we cite other people's opinions, we must paraphrase. If we copy the original text, we will be considered plagiarism. In the beginning, I just can simply use the replacement word, or change the part of speech, most of the time I copied the original text. However, after a period of practice, I have improved in this area and know the correct way of paraphrase. First of all, I should understand the article, the main content, and then express it in my own language. When I don’t know how to replace the word, I would search in flax collocation, which is a great tool I use to search academic words, and I try again and again. During this time, I also practice grammar, because my tutor said that I have many expressions that are not formal, and I think I should avoid short sentences when I writing. To this end, I chose some Chinese materials, which are about several strategies for retaining talent, and then translate into English. In the beginning, my language expression was very limited, I don’t know what academic terms are, and how the to combine short sentences became a long sentence. However, after studying these days, I feel that my grammar and academic writing skills have improved significantly, especially in the course of the academic language6-lengths sentence, which inspired me. When writing long sentences, I can use conjunctions such as in spite of, despite, although, though, therefore, as a result, and civilization, and use semi-colons/colons/commas, relative clauses and co-ordinating conjunctions to combine sentences. I am very happy that my writing skills have improved. In the following time, I will continue my writing plan, browse more academic websites to learn expressions and vocabulary usage, and pay more attention to the feedback of each essay, and make more progress.

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 My learning goal is to focus on improving my writing skills, including grammar and academic writing. Writing has always been my weakness, but it is a very important part, especially for a pre-master student in business, because the essay accounts for the majority of our total score. To this end , at the beginning of the semester, I gave myself a plan to practice writing.My plan started in the second week. From the second week, my main practice was paraphrase, which refers to retelling other people's opinions in our own language, generally changing the way of expression, part of speech or using alternative words. It is a technique that is often used in the process of writing academic essay. When we cite other people's opinions, we must paraphrase. If we copy the original text, we will be considered plagiarism. In the beginning, I just can simply use the replacement word, or change the part of speech, most of the time I copied the original text. However, after a period of practice, I have improved in this area and know the correct way of paraphrase. First of all, I should understand the article, the main content, and then express it in my own language. When I don’t know how to replace the word, I would search in flax collocation, which is a great tool I use to search academic words, and I try again and again. During this time, I also practice grammar, because my tutor said that I have many expressions that are not formal, and I think I should avoid short sentences when I writing. To this end, I chose some Chinese materials, which are about several strategies for retaining talent, and then translate into English. In the beginning, my language expression was very limited, I don’t know what academic terms are, and how the to combine short sentences became a long sentence. However, after studying these days, I feel that my grammar and academic writing skills have improved significantly, especially in the course of the academic language6-lengths sentence, which inspired me. When writing long sentences, I can use conjunctions such as in spite of, despite, although, though, therefore, as a result, and civilization, and use semi-colons/colons/commas, relative clauses and co-ordinating conjunctions to combine sentences. I am very happy that my writing skills have improved. In the following time, I will continue my writing plan, browse more academic websites to learn expressions and vocabulary usage, and pay more attention to the feedback of each essay, and make more progress.

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I don't know how to write long sentences and use limited vocabularies

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Dialogic Feedback for ILS 1

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improve my paragraph writing

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The aim of my ILS2 is to improve my paragraph writing. Although my writing has improved in the last semester, I think I still need to do more to improve my wiring, it will benefit to my future study. In general, our essay structure is, the first paragraph is introduction, the last paragraph is conclusion, and the main body is the process of the argument. I think main body writing is the most important paragraph of our essay, so my ILS2 is focus on main body writing.To be honest, paragraph writing is not easy for me, so at the beginning of the second semester, I decided to keep practicing. In the first semester, although I know how to organize paragraph, I just know it includes a topic sentence, argument and citation. And the aim of topic sentence is to tell readers the main idea of this paragraph, argument is the process to persuade readers, and citation is to support my argument. In the semester 2, I am more aware of how the paragraph should be written. In addition to listening to the tutor in class, I also practiced paragraph writing myself after class.Firstly, topic sentence is not just the main idea of a paragraph, it states the subject and the controlling idea for the rest of the paragraph, is the most general sentence in the paragraph, so it should be brief, and should be linked to my thesis. Secondly, when I provide evidence to support my argument, if I can use synthesis, for example, quote two or more opinions, “ The prevalence of racial discrimination in the workplace greatly reduces work efficiency and has an impact on employee psychology (Cox,2016 and Jay,2018)”, my argument would be more powerful. And if I want to emphasize someone’s point of view, I could write “Beale argues that……”.Thirdly, in the process of argument, my voice is the most important, which I can show the reader what I am thinking, what my view is and how I critically discuss the topic. And when I put forward my own point of view, I should use hedging language, for example, “it is likely that ……, it is possible that…, it might be…..”.After a semester of study, my writing has improved, I got a B-grade in this time writing exam. Although it is not a very high grade, It proves that my contribution is effective. I think I should keep practicing the habit of writing, I believe that it would help me get a good score on essay writing.

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The aim of my ILS2 is to improve my paragraph writing. Although my writing has improved in the last semester, I think I still need to do more to improve my wiring, it will benefit to my future study. In general, our essay structure is, the first paragraph is introduction, the last paragraph is conclusion, and the main body is the process of the argument. I think main body writing is the most important paragraph of our essay, so my ILS2 is focus on main body writing.To be honest, paragraph writing is not easy for me, so at the beginning of the second semester, I decided to keep practicing. In the first semester, although I know how to organize paragraph, I just know it includes a topic sentence, argument and citation. And the aim of topic sentence is to tell readers the main idea of this paragraph, argument is the process to persuade readers, and citation is to support my argument. In the semester 2, I am more aware of how the paragraph should be written. In addition to listening to the tutor in class, I also practiced paragraph writing myself after class.Firstly, topic sentence is not just the main idea of a paragraph, it states the subject and the controlling idea for the rest of the paragraph, is the most general sentence in the paragraph, so it should be brief, and should be linked to my thesis. Secondly, when I provide evidence to support my argument, if I can use synthesis, for example, quote two or more opinions, “ The prevalence of racial discrimination in the workplace greatly reduces work efficiency and has an impact on employee psychology (Cox,2016 and Jay,2018)”, my argument would be more powerful. And if I want to emphasize someone’s point of view, I could write “Beale argues that……”.Thirdly, in the process of argument, my voice is the most important, which I can show the reader what I am thinking, what my view is and how I critically discuss the topic. And when I put forward my own point of view, I should use hedging language, for example, “it is likely that ……, it is possible that…, it might be…..”.After a semester of study, my writing has improved, I got a B-grade in this time writing exam. Although it is not a very high grade, It proves that my contribution is effective. I think I should keep practicing the habit of writing, I believe that it would help me get a good score on essay writing.

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Staff diversity is possible do harm to the formation and communication of organizational team culture. Diversified staffs have different values, thinking ways and behaviors, there are some hindrances in information sharing and problem solving (Fink,2003 and Marcus, 2000). It means that communication between members of the organization should be strengthened. The more frequent the communication, the more harmonious the organization will be, the more positive the emotions of employees will be, and the more fully the team will play its role (Cox,2016). It is probably that organizations could avoid communication barriers through encourage employees to communicate more.

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Marcus (2000) argues thatthe diversity of employees probably weakens the organizational culture cohesion. In the meantime, it would cause staffs lack organizational identity sense, reducing work efficiency and staff loss (ibid). Due to the improvement of the cultural diversity of organizations, the members managed by the organization tend to make social comparison and self-classification(Earley,2013 and Mosakowski,2000). It means that in this condition, when employees show the bias for other members, which might set up barriers to organization internal communication.

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Staff diversity do harm to the formation and communication of organizational team culture. Because diversified staffs have different backgrounds, they have different values and behaviors. The more frequent the communication, the more harmonious the organization will be, the more positive the emotions of employees will be, and the more fully the team will play its role (Cox,2016). It means organizations could avoid communication barriers through encourage employees to communicate more.

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It is believed that innovation is the core competitiveness of enterprises. The diversity of the cognitive level of rich information knowledge, technology experience and social capital, can activate the information processing process and enhance creativity (Mayhew, 2012 and Dey, 2006). It means that if everyone thinks the same and acts the same, it will be difficult to achieve innovation. It is probable that diversity of employees contributes to innovation in the enterprise and strengthens the uniqueness of decision-making. Diversification will bring more useful decision-making process and better organizational performance, which is mainly because of the good effects of sharing different viewpoints and thoughts (Kristinsson, 2011). These effects might bring innovation and breakthroughs in competition to enterprises, and make organizations more sensitive to various customer needs.

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Innovation is the core competitiveness of enterprises. The diversity of the cognitive level of rich information knowledge, technology experience and social capital, can activate the information processing process and enhance creativity (Mayhew, 2012 and Dey, 2006). So if everyone thinks the same and acts the same, it will be difficult to achieve innovation. Diversity of employees contributes to innovation in the enterprise and strengthens the uniqueness of decision-making. Diversification will bring more useful decision-making process and better organizational performance, which is mainly because of the good effects of sharing different viewpoints and thoughts (Kristinsson, 2011). These effects will bring innovation and breakthroughs in competition to enterprises, and make organizations more sensitive to various customer needs.

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practice how to write my voice

how to provide evidence to support my argument

how to use hedging language

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at the beginning,  I was not good at organize the paragraph