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I would like to start off by saying I love the execution of your padlet. I love what you have created here. This splice has a sense of positive energy and energy of better days to come. I really enjoyed reading your poem and what it has to offer. Thank you sharing!
-McKenzie Mays

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The energy behind your poem is awesome; it feels like something I could read on a rainy day to lighten the mood. I love how progressive minded it is, and ending with "it was a small part of the pantomime" as if we're all performing our own part of the same act really hit home. Great read

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Hey Olivia,

I enjoyed reading your spliced poem. The lines you chose for this assignment fit excellently together. Additionally, I liked the subtle themes you included (alacrity and optimism).

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Despite being a short poem each line really added to the journey. The words feel very free-flowing such as "high", "winds", and "daybreak". Beautiful imagery and great conclusion.

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Olivia, I really enjoyed your poem. Your use of the wind and breaths greatly enhanced the visual. Simply put, it was upbeat and light. You demonstrated what it needed to make the journey. Well done!

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Olivia, I really enjoyed reading your spliced poem. I picked the same two options as you, Maya Angelou and Joy Harjo, so it's really interesting to see how different our poems came out. I liked your use of imagery in this, and I like the way it ended, it tied it all together. Thanks for sharing! -Cat Sigman

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Great job! Despite how much of the Whitman and Steven poems have darker stuff, you did a great job managing to keep your poem light and positive! My title to my poem is similar to yours, Journey of Life. I touched on some of the harder times, but I think I prefer yours!

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Olivia,
You have great imagery hear and really nailed this spliced poem. It really emphasizes the journey and not the destination to be the most important thing to look forward too. Really good spliced poem!

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The imagery here is very vivid. I can imagine the journey. After I read this poem, my phone went off and it was a picture of my three year old daughter at school playing with her friends. I thought she looked so big so I looked through my pictures on my phone from when she was a baby until now and just smiled to myself. When I put my phone down I realized that reading your poem inspired me to think about the journey that is fatherhood and put me into a reminiscent mindset from the beginning of the journey. Very beautiful. Thank you for sharing Olivia!

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Olivia, I love the positivity and hopefulness of this splicing!  That emphasis on air/breath is a great part of the imagery!

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You really brought forward the idea of the journey and what it can mean here: it can be a place we go or a place we are or somewhere we will be. And I really like the recurring imagery of the breath and the winds; it's like there's freedom, yet it's still constrained. It's true that sometimes journeys are a cause we don't understand completely when we set out on them.

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The journey might take you a few hours, a day, a year, a few years, a hundred, a thousand or even more,

An indecipherable cause,

Resist any thing better than my own diversity,

Just like hopes springing high.

Take a breath offered by friendly winds,

Breathe the air but leave plenty after me,

Into a daybreak that’s wondrously clear.

When you find your way to the circle,

Traced in the shadow,

Stuff'd with the stuff that is coarse and stuff'd with the stuff that is fine,

Bringing the gifts that my ancestors gave,

It was a small part of the pantomime.

Works Citied:
Angelou, Maya. "Still I Rise." Poetry Foundation. 2019

Harjo, Joy.   "For Calling the Spirit Back from Wandering the Earth in Its Human Feet." Poets.org. 2019.

Stevens, Wallace. "Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Blackbird." Poetry Foundation. 2019.

"Section16, Song of Myself." WhitmanWeb. University of Iowa. 2019.